Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a direct topic sentence that answers the question clearly, correct grammar (singular/plural, pronouns), and add one specific detail. Keep it concise (1–3 sentences). Avoid hesitations and unclear references like “she.”

例: I prefer to wear cozy, relaxed clothes that make me feel comfortable and free to move. For example, I often choose soft sweaters and loose trousers when I want to feel relaxed at home or running errands.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give a specific reason and an example. Reduce filler words like “umm” and avoid repetition. Use linking words (because, so) correctly and keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes because my country is humid and often very hot. For example, I usually wear lightweight cotton shirts and shorts when I am out during the day to stay cool.

提案: Give one clear statement of opinion, avoid exaggeration and repetition, and support it with a brief specific example. Correct sentence structure and tense, and remove fillers. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I really like T-shirts because they are versatile and comfortable. For instance, I wear a T-shirt to sleep, to casual workdays, and when I meet friends on weekends.

提案: Answer directly, then give specific details about how often and why, using correct grammar and vocabulary. Avoid gender-generalizing statements and fix verb forms. Use linking words (sometimes, but) for coherence and limit to 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I often spend time choosing clothes because it depends on my mood and the occasion. Sometimes it takes me five minutes, but other times I may spend thirty minutes deciding; when I'm in a hurry, I just pick a single-colour outfit.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence stating the contrast, then give specific examples of weekday and weekend styles. Correct plural/singular and tense errors, avoid repetition, and use linking words (usually, whereas, while). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I dress differently on weekdays and weekends. Usually on weekdays I wear simple, casual clothes for work, whereas on weekends I prefer sporty or more relaxed outfits for outdoor activities.

提案: Begin with a clear statement of your preferred colours, then give specific reasons why you like them. Fix subject-verb agreement and simplify phrasing. Use one linking phrase (because, since) and provide a brief example if possible.

例: As an architecture student, I prefer black and white because they look simple and elegant and match almost any outfit. For example, a black jacket or a white shirt is easy to combine with different styles.

× Well, I would like to wear like a cozy clothes where she was expect me more relaxed and flexible.

✓ Well, I would like to wear cozy clothes that make me feel more relaxed and comfortable.

Pronoun and noun agreement: 'a cozy clothes' mixes singular article with plural noun; use 'cozy clothes' or 'a cozy outfit'. Incorrect pronoun 'she' and tense 'was expect' are wrong; use a relative clause 'that make me feel' and correct adjective 'comfortable'. Suggestion: use 'that' to introduce the clause and ensure subject matches ('make' for plural 'clothes').

× Well, I would like to wear comfortable and casual clothes because in my country it's quite humid and the weather is quite hot. So it's better to wear comfortable clothes when you umm, going around hanging around.

✓ Well, I would like to wear comfortable and casual clothes because in my country it is quite humid and the weather is quite hot. So it's better to wear comfortable clothes when you are going out or hanging around.

Missing auxiliary verb in present continuous: 'going around' needs 'are going' when referring to 'you'. Avoid repetition 'going around hanging around' – choose one phrase. Use full 'it is' for formality. Suggestion: use 'when you are going out' or 'when you are hanging around'.

× Oh, I love wearing T-shirt T-shirt is the best invention in the entire world.

✓ Oh, I love wearing T-shirts. The T-shirt is the best invention in the entire world.

Article and plural agreement: When speaking generally about the item worn, use plural 'T-shirts' for wearing them regularly. When making a general statement about the type, use the definite article 'the' with singular 'T-shirt' to refer to the invention. Suggestion: use 'T-shirts' for habits and 'The T-shirt' when praising the item itself.

× Oh, I quite uh, actually I wear T-shirts as my pyjamas every night and also even I go to work, even like going out.

✓ Actually, I wear T-shirts as my pajamas every night, and I even wear them when I go to work or go out.

Awkward word order and redundant fillers: 'also even I go to work, even like going out' is ungrammatical. Use parallel structure 'when I go to work or go out'. Remove filler 'uh' and place 'actually' at the start. Suggestion: keep clauses parallel and concise.

× I also wearing AT shirt T-shirt is a basic, uh, basic outfit in my.

✓ I also wear T-shirts; a T-shirt is a basic outfit for me.

Incorrect verb form: 'I also wearing' should be 'I also wear' (base verb after subject). Sentence fragment 'T-shirt is a basic ... in my' is incomplete and missing 'for me'. Suggestion: use correct verb form and complete the prepositional phrase.

× Yes I do. I guess this is for every woman problems.

✓ Yes, I do. I guess this is a problem for every woman.

Number and article agreement: 'every woman' requires singular noun and singular article: 'a problem for every woman' or 'problems for every woman' inconsistent. Suggestion: use 'a problem for every woman' for clarity.

× Sometime I would like took like 5 minute to choose a girl, sometime I will took like more than a 30 minute to choose a girl.

✓ Sometimes I might take about five minutes to choose an outfit; sometimes I will take more than thirty minutes to choose one.

Incorrect past tense 'took' where present/future modal constructions are needed: use 'take' with 'might' or 'will'. Number and noun errors: '5 minute' needs plural 'minutes'; 'choose a girl' is incorrect meaning — likely 'choose clothes' or 'choose an outfit'. Suggestion: use 'sometimes' and correct verb forms and nouns.

× It's depend of my moods.

✓ It depends on my mood.

Subject-verb agreement and preposition: use 'depends' for third person singular and 'on' not 'of'. 'Moods' should be singular 'mood' when preceded by 'my' in this context; 'my moods' could work but 'depends on my mood' is more natural. Suggestion: use 'depends on my mood.'

× But sometime when I don't want to spend so much time off for choosing the clothes, I will just randomly grab one colour. I will.

✓ But sometimes when I don't want to spend much time choosing clothes, I just randomly grab one color.

Extra words and wrong prepositions: 'time off for choosing' is incorrect; remove 'off' and use 'choosing clothes'. 'One colour' is fine but finish sentence; no need for 'I will' at end. Suggestion: keep simple present for habits: 'I just randomly grab one color.'

× Yeah, I would wear different style of cloth on work day and weekends.

✓ Yeah, I would wear different styles of clothing on weekdays and weekends.

Plural forms: 'different style' should be 'different styles'; 'cloth' (uncountable or fabric) is wrong for 'clothing'; 'work day' -> 'weekdays'. Suggestion: use 'styles of clothing' and 'weekdays'.

× Usually for weekdays I wear like quite casuals and normal because during weekday weekdays I always go for works, but for weekend I will go with the style is more sporty or style uh St. style.

✓ Usually on weekdays I wear fairly casual and normal clothes because during weekdays I always go to work, but on weekends I choose a more sporty style.

Incorrect forms and articles: 'casuals' should be 'casual clothes' or 'casual'; 'go for works' should be 'go to work'; tense and plurality: 'weekdays' consistent. Clumsy phrase 'the style is more sporty' -> 'a more sporty style'. Suggestion: use 'on weekdays' and 'on weekends', and simpler phrasing.

× As an architecture students the colours I like is black and white because black and white is very simple and like whatever what style you wear is always look good for you and your body.

✓ As an architecture student, the colors I like are black and white because they are very simple and whatever style you wear, they always look good on you and your body.

Number and agreement: 'architecture students' should be singular 'student' to match 'I'. Verb agreement: 'colours I like is' -> 'colors I like are'. Pronoun and verb agreement: 'black and white is' -> 'they are'; 'look good for you' -> 'look good on you'. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and use 'on you' for appearance.