Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and fluent: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers and repetition, and add one specific supporting detail. Use linking words if needed.

例: I prefer casual clothes because I like simple, modern silhouettes. For example, I often buy basics from Uniqlo because their items are comfortable and easy to mix and match.

提案: Give a direct answer first, then a concise reason with clear vocabulary. Avoid unclear phrases and hesitations; replace vague words like "futurity" with precise terms.

例: I prefer comfortable and casual clothes because comfort matters to me when I'm choosing new items. For instance, I choose breathable fabrics and relaxed fits for everyday wear.

提案: Answer directly, eliminate hesitation, and give specific details (how many, where from). Use linking words to make it coherent.

例: Yes, I love wearing T-shirts with funny prints. I have about ten in my collection, most of which were gifts from friends or souvenirs from my travels.

提案: Respond clearly and explain your reasoning in a structured way. Avoid repetition and phantom words; use specific actions you take when shopping.

例: Yes, I spend a fair amount of time choosing clothes because I care about quality and value. I usually compare materials, try items on, and wait for sales before I buy.

提案: Structure your response: give a clear yes/no then explain the exception. Use correct grammar for plural/singular and avoid fillers.

例: Not really — I usually wear similar casual outfits during the week. However, at weekends I sometimes switch to sporty clothes if I'm going hiking or doing outdoor activities because they are more comfortable.

提案: Start with a direct statement of preference, use correct prepositions, and give specific reasons and examples of how you combine colours.

例: I prefer neutral colours like white and black. White works well with bright accents in my casual outfits, while black serves as a basic colour that I can dress up or layer easily.

× I prefer to wear casual clothes because I'm not a big fan of colorful prints.

✓ I prefer wearing casual clothes because I'm not a big fan of colorful prints.

The verb phrase 'prefer to wear' is acceptable, but in this context a gerund ('prefer wearing') sounds more natural and consistent with habitual preference. Use 'prefer wearing' to emphasize general habit.

× Prints.

✓ I don't like loud prints.

Single-word response 'Prints.' is fragmentary. It should be combined into a complete sentence to express the idea. Provide context and an adjective (e.g., 'loud') if intended.

× I uh, like modern silhouettes and especially for the brands, I uh, prefer Uniqlo.

✓ I like modern silhouettes and, especially when it comes to brands, I prefer Uniqlo.

Use the prepositional phrase 'when it comes to' to indicate topic; 'for the brands' is unnatural. Also remove filler words and add commas for clarity.

× Speaking of my clothes, I can say that all futurity of looks in my uh, that I have uh, comfortable and casual and that's what I'm looking for when I'm choosing my new clothes.

✓ Speaking of my clothes, I can say that all of my outfits are comfortable and casual, and that's what I look for when I choose new clothes.

Original has awkward phrases ('all futurity of looks', 'that I have') and tense/word choice issues. Replace with 'all of my outfits are' (clear subject and verb), use present simple 'look for' and 'choose' for habitual actions.

× To be honest, I'm a big fan of T-shirts with funny prints.

✓ To be honest, I'm a big fan of T-shirts with funny prints.

Sentence is correct; no grammatical change needed. Included to show it's acceptable.

× I have little collection on my own with T-shirts, uh, that was present gifted for, uh, gifted to me from my friends and family.

✓ I have a small personal collection of T-shirts that were gifted to me by my friends and family.

Incorrect collocations: 'little collection on my own' -> 'small personal collection'; passive and word order issues: 'that was present gifted for, uh, gifted to me' -> 'that were gifted to me by'. Use plural 'were' to agree with 'T-shirts'.

× And also I have a few samples from, uh, my trips.

✓ I also have a few souvenirs from my trips.

'Samples' is an odd word here; 'souvenirs' or 'T-shirt souvenirs' is more natural. Remove filler words and leading 'And also' changed to 'I also' for cohesion.

× Just a good.

✓ They're just nice.

Original fragment 'Just a good.' is ungrammatical and unclear. Replace with concise adjective phrase 'They're just nice' to refer back to the T-shirts.

× Uh, yes I am because I like uh, the appropriate quali quality of new clothes and I will be better to look for some bargains than buy the first item.

✓ Yes, I do, because I like the appropriate quality in new clothes, and it's better to look for bargains than to buy the first item I see.

Use 'Yes, I do' to answer 'Do you spend a lot of time...'. 'Quali quality' is a repetition error; use 'quality'. 'I will be better to look' is ungrammatical—use impersonal construction 'it's better to' and include infinitive 'to buy'.

× I, uh, I see, I saw in.

✓ (Remove this fragment.)

Fragment 'I, uh, I see, I saw in.' is incomplete and should be omitted. If they meant a specific example, supply a full sentence describing where they saw something.

× As I see no, because I have the same looks for every day, uh, and for weekends, uh, even if I go outside somewhere in mountains, I uh, I will choose uh, some sporty looks that is comfortable for this.

✓ No, I don't. I wear the same style every day and on weekends; even if I go to the mountains, I choose sporty clothes that are comfortable.

Multiple issues: answer fragment 'As I see no' -> 'No, I don't.' 'same looks for every day' -> 'same style every day'. 'some sporty looks that is' -> subject-verb agreement; use plural 'clothes that are comfortable'. Remove fillers and simplify.

× I tend to white color uh, because it fits with other bright accents in my in my uh, casual clothes.

✓ I tend to choose white because it goes well with other bright accents in my casual clothes.

'Tend to white color' is ungrammatical—use 'tend to choose white' or 'prefer white'. 'fits with' is acceptable but 'goes well with' is more natural. Remove repeated words.

× And also I prefer black color as a basic one, uh, for editing something to my looks.

✓ I also prefer black as a basic color to complement my outfits.

'Black color as a basic one' is wordy—use 'black as a basic color'. 'for editing something to my looks' is incorrect; use 'to complement my outfits' to express the intended meaning.