Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Говоря по-русски: В вашем ответе есть проблемы с грамматикой, повторениями и организацией мысли. Дайте чёткое вступительное предложение (топик-сентенс), затем одно-два конкретных пояснения без повторов. Используйте простые связки (because, so, and) и избегайте заполнителей (uh, umm). Также исправьте местоимения и порядок слов: say "I like to wear T-shirts and jeans everywhere because they are comfortable."

例: I like to wear T-shirts and jeans almost everywhere because they are very comfortable. For example, when I travel or meet friends I prefer casual clothes since they are easy to move in and easy to wash.

提案: Говоря по-русски: Ответ неясен из-за повторов и запинок; логика нарушена. Начните с прямого ответа (I prefer...), дайте одно или два конкретных объяснения и используйте связующие слова (because, so, when). Уточните причину: commuting, long days, need for comfort. Избегайте слов-паразитов и недокончаемых фраз.

例: I prefer comfortable and casual clothes because I commute a lot and have long days. For instance, wearing trainers and a soft jacket helps me stay comfortable when I travel between work and classes.

提案: Говоря по-русски: Ответ содержит общие фразы и неясные выражения ("pretty short", "nothing arts"). Дайте ясное утверждение, объясните конкретные причины и приведите пример ситуации. Используйте корректную грамматику: "T-shirts are more comfortable than dresses" и избегайте некорректных описаний.

例: Definitely. I find T-shirts more comfortable than dresses because they are loose and easy to move in. For example, I often wear T-shirts when I go for a walk or meet friends because they keep me relaxed.

提案: Говоря по-русски: Ответ повторяет фразы и звучит нескладно. Начните с прямого ответа, объясните причину кратко и конкретно (размер, подходящий стиль), и приведите пример процесса выбора. Уберите повторы и звуки-заполнители.

例: Yes, I do. I usually spend more time choosing clothes because I have a small size and many items don't fit perfectly. For example, I often try on several pieces to find the right fit and style.

提案: Говоря по-русски: Идея есть, но выражена плохо: проблемы со структурой и словоупотреблением. Дайте чёткий топик-сентенс, объясните связь между настроением и выбором одежды, используйте связки (when, so, because) и конкретные примеры для будней и выходных.

例: Yes. On weekdays I usually wear smart-casual clothes for work, but on weekends I dress more according to my mood. For instance, when I'm happy I might wear a dress to go out, while when I'm tired I choose comfortable jeans and a T‑shirt.

提案: Говоря по-русски: Ответ содержит ошибки в структуре и словоупотреблении ("I super so", "in my garden"). Дайте прямой ответ: name the colour, explain why with one specific reason, и приведите пример. Избегайте неправильных слов (garden вместо wardrobe).

例: I like blue clothes the most because it is a calm and flattering colour on me. For example, I own several blue shirts and jackets that I wear to both work and casual events.

× I'd like to wear my T-shirt and new jeans where everywhere because they are so comfortable and they can, they can be so they can.

✓ I'd like to wear my T-shirt and new jeans everywhere because they are so comfortable.

The sentence contains redundant and ungrammatical fragments ('where everywhere', 'they can, they can be so they can') and an unnecessary repeated modal structure. Remove the repetitions and use the adverb 'everywhere' correctly after the object. Keep the present tense simple because the speaker is stating a general preference. Suggestion: simplify statements and avoid repeating words or unfinished clauses. Grammar problem type ID: 10

× I'd like to wear, prefer, uh, I'd like, I prefer wear comfortable clothes because of uh, I, I commute to a lot of, uh, places and I waste my, umm, half time, half day and St.

✓ I prefer to wear comfortable clothes because I commute to many places and I waste a lot of time traveling.

The original contains disfluencies and incorrect verb pattern ('prefer wear' should be 'prefer to wear'), incorrect quantifier phrase ('a lot of places' is fine), and awkward phrase 'waste my half time, half day and St.' Replace with 'waste a lot of time traveling' to convey meaning. Use infinitive after 'prefer'. Grammar problem type ID: 8

× Definitely yes, because T-shirt is very beautiful and more comfortable than umm than dresses Because of uh they are pretty short and I like it. Umm nothing uh arts of T-shirts.

✓ Definitely yes, because T-shirts are very nice and more comfortable than dresses. They are quite short and I like them.

Use plural form 'T-shirts' when speaking generally. Match verb number: 'are' for plural. Pronoun must agree: 'them' refers to plural T-shirts. Remove unclear fragment 'nothing uh arts of T-shirts'. Suggest using clear comparative structure 'more comfortable than'. Grammar problem type ID: 1

× Umm, absolutely yes, because of my uh, choice is very uh, high level because umm, my size is very umm, my size is very small, so that I spend a lot of time choosing clothes.

✓ Absolutely yes, because my choice is very selective and my size is quite small, so I spend a lot of time choosing clothes.

Do not use 'because of' followed by a clause; use 'because' for clauses. 'Choice is very high level' is awkward; 'choice is very selective' or 'I am very particular about my choices' is natural. Avoid repeating 'my size is'. Use adjective 'small' with appropriate adverb 'quite' or 'very'. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× Yes, because I wear different clothes. Uh, uh, changes my moods are when I'm happy I wear dresses, uh, or when I'm sad I wear comfortable clothes to every places.

✓ Yes, because I wear different clothes. My clothing changes with my mood: when I'm happy I wear dresses, and when I'm sad I wear comfortable clothes for all places.

Original has incorrect word order 'changes my moods are' and wrong preposition 'to every places'. Use 'changes with my mood' or 'my clothing changes depending on my mood'. Use plural 'places' without 'every' or use 'every place' or 'all places'. Also add conjunction 'and' to connect clauses. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× I super so I like it blue clothes because of they are umm very beautiful color and I have a lot of blue clothes in my garden.

✓ I really like blue clothes because they are a very beautiful color and I have a lot of blue clothes in my wardrobe.

'I super so I like it' is ungrammatical; use 'I really like'. 'Like it blue clothes' wrong word order; place adjective before noun: 'blue clothes'. Use 'they are a very beautiful color' or better 'they are a very nice color'. 'Garden' is incorrect for clothes storage; use 'wardrobe' or 'closet'. Grammar problem type ID: 13