Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with a linking word. Avoid repetition and correct articles/plural forms.

例: I prefer comfortable casual clothes like jeans and cotton T-shirts because they suit my daily activities. For example, I usually wear jeans and a soft T-shirt when I go to classes since they allow me to move easily and feel confident.

提案: Open with a direct statement, then add a clear contrast using a linking word (however/although). Correct small grammar errors and avoid redundant phrasing like 'feel me relax'. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes because they let me move freely and feel relaxed during long days. For example, when I work long hours I wear sneakers and jeans for comfort. However, I wear smart clothes for formal events to make a professional impression.

提案: Avoid repeating the same reason and correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, article use). Give one clear supporting detail and a concise example. Use linking word 'because' or 'for example' once.

例: Yes, I like wearing T-shirts because they are comfortable and easy to wear. For example, I often choose a soft cotton T-shirt when studying or going out with friends because it helps me feel relaxed and looks casual.

提案: Remove hesitations and filler words, and organize the answer: give a direct answer, then explain reasons with specific details (what you coordinate). Keep sentences short and grammatical.

例: Yes, I do. I'm passionate about clothes so I often spend extra time coordinating colors and accessories for social events. For instance, I choose matching shoes and a belt to create a neat look.

提案: Make the contrast clear and correct grammar. State what you wear on weekdays and weekends, then give a specific reason or example using a linking word like 'because' or 'whereas'. Avoid vague phrases like 'looks more aesthetic'.

例: Yes. On weekdays I usually wear simple or smart clothes for studying at my institute because they look professional and comfortable. On weekends I wear more casual dresses when I hang out with family and friends because I want to feel relaxed and look nicer.

提案: List colours clearly and give specific reasons with correct grammar. Fix noun/verb agreement and unclear phrases (e.g., 'high stain'). Give one concise example showing how you use colours.

例: I prefer simple colours such as pink, sky blue, grey and black because they are versatile and easy to match. For example, I often wear a black jacket for work because it looks smart, and grey trousers for casual outings because they hide stains and stay looking neat.

× I prefer to wear the comfortable casual clothes such as jeans and soft cotton T-shirts because they suit my daily activity and are easy to move because it helps me to feel confident and appropriate for this settings.

✓ I prefer to wear comfortable, casual clothes such as jeans and soft cotton T-shirts because they suit my daily activities and are easy to move in; they help me feel confident and appropriate for these settings.

Adjectives 'comfortable' and 'casual' should not have 'the' before them here; use a comma between coordinate adjectives. 'Daily activity' should be plural 'daily activities'. The phrase 'easy to move' needs the preposition 'in' to indicate clothing that allows movement. 'Because it helps me' has unclear subject; change to 'they help me' to refer to clothes (plural). 'This settings' mixes singular and plural; use 'these settings'. Use a semicolon or separate clause to avoid run-on sentence.

× Honestly saying, I prefer wearing comfortable and casual clothes because they allow me to move freely and feel me relax throughout the day.

✓ To be honest, I prefer wearing comfortable, casual clothes because they allow me to move freely and help me relax throughout the day.

'Honestly saying' is incorrect; idiomatic expression is 'to be honest'. 'Feel me relax' is ungrammatical; use 'help me relax' or 'make me feel relaxed'. Also add comma after 'comfortable' as coordinate adjectives.

× For example, when I have a long working hour day, sneakers and jeans keep me more comfortable.

✓ For example, when I have a long working day, sneakers and jeans keep me more comfortable.

Phrase 'long working hour day' is awkward; use 'long working day'. Present tense 'have' is fine; remove redundant words. 'Keep me more comfortable' is acceptable but 'keep me comfortable' is more natural; here kept minor wording but corrected noun phrase.

× However, I too choose smart clothes for formal events to make the professional impression.

✓ However, I also choose smart clothes for formal events to create a professional impression.

'I too' is grammatically possible but 'I also' is more natural. 'Make the professional impression' is incorrect collocation; use 'create a professional impression' or 'give a professional impression'.

× Yes, I really like wearing T-shirts because they are comfortable and for they are comfortable and suits me more.

✓ Yes, I really like wearing T-shirts because they are comfortable and suit me well.

Sentence repeats 'they are comfortable'. 'Suits me' must agree with plural subject 'they' so use 'suit me' (subject-verb agreement). 'More' is vague; 'well' is clearer.

× For example, I often choose a soft cotton T shells when studying or going out with my friends since it keep me more relaxed and look more cool.

✓ For example, I often choose a soft cotton T-shirt when studying or going out with my friends since it keeps me more relaxed and makes me look cooler.

'T shells' is incorrect noun; correct is 'T-shirt'. Subject 'it' (the T-shirt) requires 'keeps' (third person singular present). 'Look more cool' should be 'make me look cooler' or 'look cooler' — use comparative 'cooler' rather than 'more cool' and include 'makes me' for clarity.

× Yes, I do because I'm very passionate about choosing the clothes because I think, uh, the, the clothes which we wear look more, look different from anyone else.

✓ Yes, I do because I'm very passionate about choosing clothes; I think the clothes we wear make us look different from others.

Remove redundant words 'the clothes' repeated and filler 'uh'. 'Choosing the clothes' should be 'choosing clothes' (no article). 'Look more, look different' is disfluent; simplify to 'make us look different from others'. Use semicolon to connect related ideas.

× So while the social event, I might spend bit more time in coordinating the color and other accessories.

✓ So for social events, I might spend a bit more time coordinating colors and other accessories.

Incorrect preposition 'while the social event' should be 'for social events' or 'at social events'. 'Spend bit more time in coordinating' should be 'spend a bit more time coordinating' (no 'in'). Use plural 'colors' to match general statement.

× Yes, I usually wear some simple or formal clothes on my weekday because nowadays I prefer I go to the institute for my academic study, but on the weekend I prefer to wear some dresses and because at that time I do hang out with my families and friend and that look me more beautiful and looks more aesthetic.

✓ Yes, I usually wear simple or formal clothes on weekdays because I now attend an institute for my studies, but on weekends I prefer to wear dresses because I hang out with my family and friends; that makes me look more attractive and more stylish.

Use plural 'weekdays' and 'weekends' for general statements. Remove 'some' before 'simple or formal clothes'. 'Nowadays I prefer I go to the institute' is ungrammatical; use 'I now attend an institute for my studies'. 'Families and friend' should be 'family and friends'. 'That look me more beautiful and looks more aesthetic' is incorrect; use 'that makes me look more attractive and more stylish'.

× I prefer wearing natural and simple color like pink, sky blue, grey, black because they are versatile and easy to match with other item.

✓ I prefer wearing natural, simple colors like pink, sky blue, grey, and black because they are versatile and easy to match with other items.

Use plural 'colors' when listing multiple colors. Add comma between adjectives. Include comma before 'and' in list for clarity. 'Other item' should be plural 'other items'.

× For example, a black jacket look more smart for work while grey trousers are comfortable for casual outing and the darker shade high stain and wearing better over their time.

✓ For example, a black jacket looks smarter for work while grey trousers are comfortable for casual outings; darker shades hide stains and wear better over time.

Subject-verb agreement: 'a black jacket' requires 'looks' (third person singular). Use comparative 'smarter' rather than 'more smart'. 'Casual outing' should be plural 'casual outings'. Phrase 'the darker shade high stain and wearing better over their time' is ungrammatical; correct idea is 'darker shades hide stains and wear better over time'.