Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct vocabulary, use a clear topic sentence then 1–2 supporting details. Avoid unclear words (e.g. “pickers”, “titles”) and grammatical errors. Use linking phrases like “because” or “so” to connect ideas and one specific example of an item or situation.

例: I usually prefer casual clothes, especially T-shirts and jeans, because they are comfortable for my daily work. For example, I often wear loose jeans and a cotton T-shirt when I commute and run errands because they allow me to move freely.

提案: Reduce hesitations and repeat words; start with a clear topic sentence and give a concise contrast. Use linking words such as “however” or “but” and give a specific example of a smart outfit and an occasion.

例: It depends on the occasion: I usually wear casual clothes for everyday life, but for special events I prefer smart attire. For instance, I might wear a blazer and dress shirt to a birthday party or a formal function to look more presentable.

提案: Eliminate filler words and correct unclear vocabulary (“Becky T-shirts”). Use present simple and give a specific reason and brief example. Keep to 2–3 sentences maximum.

例: Yes, I like wearing T-shirts because they are comfortable and allow me to move easily while doing chores. In summer I usually choose lightweight cotton T-shirts because they keep me cool during outdoor activities.

提案: Use clearer grammar and fewer vague phrases. Start with a direct statement about your habits, then give one reason and an example. Avoid awkward sentence endings and incorrect forms (e.g. “mealy”, “leave”).

例: Not really — I rarely spend much time choosing clothes because my mother often picks them for me. For example, when I need new clothes she goes shopping and selects items I usually like, which saves me time.

提案: Provide a concise contrast with correct word choices and no trailing fragments. Use linking words like “while” and give a brief specific example of weekday and weekend outfits.

例: Yes. On weekdays I wear presentable clothes such as a shirt and trousers for work, while on weekends I prefer comfortable clothes like pajamas or loose T-shirts for relaxing at home.

提案: Be more succinct and avoid repetition. State your preferred colors, give a reason, and one specific example of how this affects your shopping. Use correct plurality and avoid filler sounds.

例: I prefer black and blue because they are easy to match and practical. For example, most of my wardrobe is black and navy blue, which makes it simple to put outfits together when I shop.

× Generally, I prefer to wear casual clothes such as T-shirts and jeans pickers.

✓ Generally, I prefer to wear casual clothes such as T-shirts and jeans.

The word 'pickers' is incorrect here; it looks like a wrong adjective or extra noun. Remove it so the phrase correctly lists clothing items. Keep adjectives like 'casual' before the noun 'clothes'.

× I feel comfortable and it's very convenient for my daily life as I have to go to my work so titles are not good for me.

✓ I feel comfortable, and they are very convenient for my daily life because I have to go to work, so formal clothes are not good for me.

Tense is present but sentence uses wrong noun forms ('titles') and awkward structure. Use 'they' to refer to 'casual clothes', 'go to work' is the correct idiom, and replace 'titles' with 'formal clothes' to convey meaning. Use commas and 'because' for clarity.

× So I love to wear baggy clothes or those who are loose.

✓ So I love to wear baggy clothes or those that are loose.

Use 'that' (or 'which') to refer to clothes, not 'who' which is for people. This fixes pronoun reference.

× Uh, it depends on the situation.

✓ It depends on the situation.

Remove filler 'Uh' for a clear present-tense response. The sentence is otherwise grammatically correct in present tense.

× But for uh, some occasions like birthday parties and some other functions or parties, I uh, prefer smart clothes such as some fancy clothes so I can be like buying in the party.

✓ But for some occasions like birthday parties and other functions, I prefer smart clothes, such as fancy outfits, so I can look appropriate at the party.

Remove unnecessary articles and filler words, use 'fancy outfits' instead of repetitive 'some fancy clothes', and 'look appropriate at the party' clarifies intended meaning. 'Buying in the party' is incorrect; corrected to 'at the party' and appropriate verb phrase.

× T-shirts are one of my favorites because, uh, when I wore them, I feel comfortable and I can easily move around and do my daily, uh, household chores and any kind of work.

✓ T-shirts are one of my favorites because when I wear them I feel comfortable, and I can easily move around and do my daily household chores and other work.

Maintain present tense ('wear' and 'feel') to match general preference. Remove filler 'uh' and commas; use 'other work' instead of 'any kind of work' for clarity.

× So I pref I love T-shirts and mostly I like Becky T-shirts because in summers they are good so.

✓ So I love T-shirts, and mostly I like basic T-shirts because they are good in summer.

Fix typo 'pref', change 'Becky' (likely 'basic') to 'basic', use plural agreement and correct word order: 'good in summer'. Remove trailing 'so'.

× If we talk about clothes, so I'm not that much choosy, whatever I likes, I bought it so mealy.

✓ If we talk about clothes, I'm not that choosy; whatever I like, I buy it easily.

Use correct quantifier/adverb 'that' with 'choosy' and correct verb forms: 'like' (not 'likes') and 'buy' (present habitual). 'So mealy' is incorrect; replace with 'easily' to convey ease of buying.

× My mother chooses my clothes because I don't want to go out to choose my clothes because I know that if I choose my clothes then I feel confused.

✓ My mother chooses my clothes because I don't want to go out to pick them; I know that if I choose my clothes myself I get confused.

Avoid repeating 'choose my clothes'; use pronoun 'them'. Use 'pick' for choosing in context and 'get confused' for natural phrasing. Maintain consistent pronoun use.

× So it is good to leave.

✓ So it is better to leave it to her.

Original is incomplete and unclear. Specify what is being left and to whom: 'leave it to her' clarifies that the student lets the mother choose clothes.

× Yes, I do because on weekdays I have to put some clothes that are presentable because I have to go to my work, but on weekends I am relaxed.

✓ Yes, I do, because on weekdays I have to wear clothes that are presentable since I have to go to work, but on weekends I am relaxed.

Use verb 'wear' (not 'put') and idiom 'go to work' without 'my'. Minor punctuation improvements. Subject-verb agreement is correct but verb choice corrected.

× I can wear my pyjamas, uh, any kind of T-shirts, uh, kind of mix match.

✓ I can wear my pyjamas, any T-shirts, or mix and match different items.

Restructure phrase for clarity: 'any T-shirts' and 'mix and match' is the correct idiom. Remove fillers and awkward 'kind of' repetition.

× I want uh, comfortable and.

✓ I want to be comfortable.

Original is an incomplete fragment. Complete the idea with 'to be comfortable' and remove filler 'uh'.

× If we talk about colors, then I love black and blue because those are my favorite colors.

✓ If we talk about colors, I love black and blue because they are my favorite colors.

Remove unnecessary 'then' and keep present tense; use 'they' to refer to colors. Simplifies sentence.

× And in my wardrobe collection, all my, all my clothes are like black and uh, black, white and Blues because I don't have to choose that that much, that many colors in shops when I shop my clothes.

✓ In my wardrobe, most of my clothes are black, white, and blue because I don't choose many different colors when I shop.

Fix capitalization ('Blues' -> 'blue'), remove repetition, ensure subject-verb agreement and correct quantifier 'many different colors'. Simplify 'wardrobe collection' to 'wardrobe'.