Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., "when it comes to") and fix tense/word choice (use "weddings" instead of "marriage").

例: I usually wear comfortable clothes, but I dress up for special occasions. For example, I often wear jeans and a hoodie at home, but I choose a smart shirt and blazer for weddings or parties.

提案: Give a direct answer first, then one or two clear reasons with linking words. Remove filler words and correct collocations ("trousers", "going to a wedding").

例: I prefer comfortable clothes in everyday life, but I wear smart outfits for special events. For instance, I usually wear jeans and a T-shirt when I'm relaxing, whereas I wear trousers and a blazer when I attend a wedding.

提案: Fix grammar and reduce fillers. State a simple opinion, then give specific reasons and one concrete detail (e.g., why white T-shirts). Avoid vague phrases like "since I was good"; say "since I was young."

例: Yes, I like wearing T-shirts because they are comfortable and easy to wash. I have worn them since I was young, and I prefer plain white T-shirts because they match many outfits and look fresh.

提案: Answer directly and give one clear reason with a specific example. Avoid repeating "literally" and finish your sentences. Mention how much time or the steps you take to choose an outfit to add specificity.

例: Yes, I spend quite a lot of time choosing clothes for special events because I want to look appropriate. For example, I often try on several suits and coordinating shirts for about an hour before deciding on the best combination.

× It depends. Most of the time I like to wear comfortable clothes, but when it comes to when I have to go out with my friends or it's a marriage or a party. So I decided to wear some fancy and smart clothes.

✓ It depends. Most of the time I like to wear comfortable clothes, but when I have to go out with my friends or attend a wedding or a party, I decide to wear some fancy and smart clothes.

The original contains a sentence fragment and awkward phrasing ('when it comes to when I have to... or it's a marriage'). This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Combine clauses to form a complete sentence, use 'attend a wedding' instead of 'it's a marriage', and keep consistent present-tense 'decide' to match 'I like' and habitual context. Suggestion: reorganize the clause order and remove redundant 'when'.

× As I said previously, I depend on the situation whether where when I'm at home or I'm going out with my friends and chilling out, then I would like to wear comfortable clothes but like jeans, trouser, but I'm going on a marriage then I will obviously wear smart and fancy clothes.

✓ As I said previously, I depend on the situation: when I'm at home or going out with my friends and chilling, I prefer to wear comfortable clothes like jeans or trousers; but if I'm attending a wedding, I will obviously wear smart and fancy clothes.

This sentence has multiple issues; primary errors are incorrect prepositions and word choices (ID 11) such as 'going on a marriage' which should be 'attending a wedding', and 'trouser' should be plural 'trousers'. Also remove redundant words ('whether where when'). Suggestion: use 'depend on the situation' followed by clearer time clauses and correct prepositions/phrasing.

× Yes I do, I love wearing T-shirts because I'm wearing it since I was good and it makes me feel comfortable.

✓ Yes I do. I love wearing T-shirts because I have been wearing them since I was young, and they make me feel comfortable.

The original uses incorrect tense and wording: 'I'm wearing it since I was good' is ungrammatical. This is a past tense / present perfect context issue (ID 5). Use present perfect 'have been wearing' to express an action continuing from past to present, correct pronoun agreement 'them' for plural 'T-shirts', and 'young' instead of 'good'. Suggestion: use 'have been wearing them since I was young' and maintain subject-pronoun agreement.

× Umm, most of the time I wear from a different kind of companies, but I really like white colour T-shirts.

✓ Most of the time I wear T-shirts from different brands, but I really like white T-shirts.

The phrase 'wear from a different kind of companies' is incorrect quantifier and noun choice (ID 14). Use 'brands' instead of 'companies', remove unnecessary 'colour' after 'white', and place adjectives in proper order. Suggestion: say 'T-shirts from different brands' and 'white T-shirts'.

× Yes, I literally spend a lot of time choosing clothes when I have to choose clothes for a party or or an event. So I always make sure to buy a full suit, have a combination so it literally take a lot of time. So I literally spend on my.

✓ Yes, I literally spend a lot of time choosing clothes when I have to pick outfits for a party or an event. I always make sure to buy a full suit and coordinate the pieces, so it literally takes a lot of time.

This passage has sentence fragments and repetition (ID 26). Errors include 'it literally take' (subject-verb agreement) and an unfinished sentence 'So I literally spend on my.' Correct the verb to 'takes' and finish thoughts: 'coordinate the pieces' clarifies 'have a combination'. Remove duplicated words. Suggestion: complete sentences and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× So I always make sure to buy a full suit, have a combination so it literally take a lot of time.

✓ So I always make sure to buy a full suit and put together a combination, so it literally takes a lot of time.

The clause 'so it literally take a lot of time' has a subject-verb agreement error (ID 27). The singular subject 'it' requires the verb 'takes'. Also improve parallelism by linking verbs with 'and'. Suggestion: use 'takes' and restructure for parallel verbs.