Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar; start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Fix grammar (articles, verb forms, and plural/singular) and avoid unclear phrases like “they schedule out.”

例: I usually wear a basic T-shirt and jeans because they are comfortable and quick to put on. For special occasions, however, I prefer a dress or smarter outfit. For example, I’ll wear a dress to family celebrations because it looks more presentable.

提案: Give a direct answer first, then explain with clear grammar and logical linking. Avoid fillers (“you know”) and repetition. Correct awkward phrases like “I don't have any special occasions go” and “occasional outfits.”

例: I prefer smart clothes because they make me feel more confident. However, since I don't often attend formal events, I usually wear casual clothes to school for comfort and practicality.

提案: Keep the answer natural and avoid repeating the same reasons. Use one linking word and provide a specific detail or brief example. Correct subject-verb agreement and word order.

例: Yes, I really like wearing T-shirts because they are comfortable and easy to put on when I'm in a hurry. For instance, I often choose a T-shirt before school because it saves time and still looks neat.

提案: Answer directly, then explain with specific details and correct grammar. Replace vague phrases like “favorite friend brand” with precise wording (e.g., favorite brands). Mention how long or what you do online to be more specific.

例: Yes, I do spend a lot of time choosing clothes because I like to compare styles online. For example, I usually browse three or four of my favorite brands’ websites for 20–30 minutes to find the best design and price.

× I usually wear a basic T-shirt with a jeans because they are comfortable and easy to put on when I in a hurry.

✓ I usually wear a basic T-shirt with jeans because they are comfortable and easy to put on when I'm in a hurry.

Use the zero article with plural countable nouns when speaking generally (jeans), not 'a jeans'. Also the sentence was missing the verb contraction 'I'm' for 'I am' to be grammatically correct in 'when I'm in a hurry'. Suggestion: Use 'jeans' without 'a' and include the auxiliary verb: 'when I'm in a hurry.'

× However, if there are some special occasions I might choose a dress, but for everyday activities they schedule out.

✓ However, if there are special occasions I might choose a dress, but for everyday activities I stick to simple outfits.

The phrase 'there are some special occasions' is acceptable but 'they schedule out' is ungrammatical and unclear. The student needs a subject that refers to themselves: 'I stick to' or 'I choose.' Also remove 'some' (optional) and use present simple for habitual actions. Suggestion: Replace unclear phrase with a clear present-tense habitual verb phrase: 'I stick to simple outfits.'

× Basically, I like to wear smart clothes, but you know, I don't have any special occasions go, so I always wear wear occasional outfits to go to school.

✓ Basically, I like to wear smart clothes, but I don't have any special occasions, so I always wear casual outfits to go to school.

The clause 'I don't have any special occasions go' is ungrammatical; likely intended meaning is 'I don't have any special occasions.' Repetition 'wear wear' is an error. 'Occasional outfits' is awkward; 'casual outfits' fits the context. Use simple present for habitual action. Suggestion: Remove the extra verb, correct the noun phrase and use 'casual' to contrast with 'smart.'

× Yes, I do really like wearing T-shirts because it is easy to put on when I'm in a hurry and it's comfortable to wear and I have a lot of T-shirts in my clothes.

✓ Yes, I really like wearing T-shirts because they are easy to put on when I'm in a hurry, they're comfortable, and I have a lot of T-shirts in my wardrobe.

Use the plural pronoun 'they' to refer to 'T-shirts' (plural). 'It is easy' incorrectly uses singular. Also 'in my clothes' is unnatural; use 'in my wardrobe' or 'in my closet.' Combine clauses more smoothly. Suggestion: Use plural agreement 'they are' and a more natural noun for storage like 'wardrobe.'

× Yes, I really spend a lot of time choosing clothes, you know, I always search on websites and I have a lot of favorite friend brand, so I will always search all of them and find what I really like.

✓ Yes, I spend a lot of time choosing clothes; I always search websites and I have a lot of favorite brands from friends, so I always check them to find what I really like.

Tense consistency: 'I really spend' should be simple present 'I spend' for habitual action. 'Search on websites' is better as 'search websites.' 'Favorite friend brand' is ungrammatical; likely 'favorite brands recommended by friends' or 'favorite brands from friends.' Avoid future 'I will always search' when describing habitual behavior; use simple present 'I always check.' Suggestion: Keep present simple for habits and correct noun phrases ('favorite brands from friends' or 'brands my friends recommend').