Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more direct and organized: start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, avoid filler words (um, uh), and give one or two specific reasons or an example. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and use linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

例: I prefer wearing pajamas most of the time because they are extremely comfortable and let me relax at home. However, I also wear formal clothes for special occasions or when I need to look professional, for example at interviews or family events.

提案: Make the contrast clearer and use linking words such as 'but' or 'however'. Remove repetition and provide a brief reason for each preference. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: At home I usually wear casual clothes because they are comfortable and practical. However, when I go to the mall or meet friends I prefer to dress smartly so I look presentable and feel more confident.

提案: Avoid hesitations and redundant phrases. Start with a clear statement, then give a specific reason and an example. Use vocabulary like 'oversized' instead of 'big' for variety.

例: Yes, I like wearing T-shirts, especially oversized ones, because they are very comfortable and breathable. For example, I often wear an oversized cotton T-shirt when I study or relax at home.

提案: Give a concise, coherent explanation with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler, and add a brief reason or example. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to show cause.

例: No, I don't spend much time choosing clothes because I usually pick whatever is convenient in my closet. For instance, I often grab the first clean outfit I find when I'm in a hurry.

× I like to wear formal clothes or pajamas because that's more comfortable.

✓ I like to wear formal clothes or pajamas because they are more comfortable.

Plural noun 'formal clothes or pajamas' requires plural pronoun 'they' and plural verb 'are' rather than singular 'that's' (that is). Use 'they are' to agree with the plural subject.

× Comfortable when I'm, umm, wearing it.

✓ I feel comfortable when I wear them.

This fragment lacks a main verb and uses incorrect pronoun and tense. 'Wearing it' is awkward for plural clothes; use 'I feel comfortable when I wear them' to provide a subject and verb and correct plural pronoun. This fixes sentence structure and present tense usage.

× So yeah, uh, my favorite is pajamas.

✓ So yeah, my favorite is pajamas.

Remove filler words 'uh' for clarity. Grammatically the sentence is acceptable, but avoid unnecessary fillers in spoken responses to improve clarity.

× I prefer to wear casual clothes when I'm at home, but when I'm going to the mall I prefer the smart clothes better than the casual clothes.

✓ I prefer to wear casual clothes when I'm at home, but when I go to the mall I prefer smart clothes to casual clothes.

Use simple present 'I go' for habitual actions rather than present continuous 'I'm going'. Also use the comparative structure 'prefer X to Y' rather than 'prefer X better than Y'. Remove the definite article before 'smart clothes' unless referring to specific items.

× I do umm, I'm comfortable with big T-shirts because umm, I feel like it is more comfortable when I'm using it.

✓ Yes, I do. I'm comfortable with big T-shirts because I feel they are more comfortable when I wear them.

Combine short fragments into a clear sentence. Use 'they are' to match plural 'T-shirts' instead of 'it is'. Use 'wear' rather than 'use' for clothing. Avoid filler words and supply the auxiliary 'do' correctly in the short answer 'Yes, I do.' This fixes pronoun agreement and verb choice (verb + -ing not required).

× No, because I pick clothes where, uh, I mean, I pick clothes, uh, when I see it in my closet.

✓ No, because I just pick clothes when I see them in my closet.

The original has disfluent repetition and incorrect pronoun 'it' referring to plural 'clothes'. Simplify to 'I pick clothes when I see them' to correct pronoun agreement and sentence structure. Remove fillers for clarity.