Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise, correct grammar and avoid fillers. Start with a clear topic sentence, give one or two short reasons with specific detail, and remove hesitation words (uh, and).

例: I prefer wearing black clothes because it is my favorite colour and I feel it flatters me. Also, I find black easy to match with other items, so I wear it most days.

提案: Give a direct answer first (casual or smart) and then provide two concise reasons with specific contexts. Avoid repetition and incorrect adverbs (use 'often' not 'oftenly').

例: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes because they allow me to move freely and feel relaxed. For example, I usually wear loose tops at home and to the gym, and I often choose casual outfits for informal events.

提案: Answer briefly and clearly, avoid repetitions and filler words. Explain one or two specific reasons why T-shirts are preferable (comfort, practicality) and give a short example of when you wear them.

例: Yes, I like wearing T-shirts because they are very comfortable and practical in warm weather. For instance, I often wear a T-shirt when I go for a walk or run errands in summer.

提案: Provide a clear opening sentence about how much time you spend, then give specific details (what you look for, where you shop) and finish with a brief reason. Remove hesitations and incomplete endings.

例: Yes, I do spend quite a bit of time choosing clothes because I like finding the right fit and style. I often visit nearby shops to look for black T-shirts from different brands, comparing fabric and price before I buy.

× I like to wear black colours clothes because black is my favorite colour and black colour suits me so much and. Astrologer also uh said me to wear black clothes because it's good for my uh.

✓ I like to wear black clothes because black is my favorite color and it suits me very well. An astrologer also told me to wear black clothes because it's good for me.

Errors: redundant and incorrect adjective phrases ('black colours clothes', 'black colour'), awkward phrasing ('suits me so much and.'), incorrect verb form and object ('said me' should be 'told me'), and incomplete sentence ending. Suggestions: use 'black clothes' not 'black colours clothes'; avoid repeating 'black colour'; replace 'so much' with 'very well'; use correct reporting verb structure 'told me' and complete the final clause 'because it's good for me'. Maintain simple present tense for preferences.

× Yes, I prefer to wear casual uh clothes and uh and loose clothes.

✓ Yes, I prefer to wear casual clothes and loose clothes.

Error: unnecessary repetition and filler words, but also redundancy 'casual clothes and loose clothes' can be streamlined. 'Clothes' is plural and correctly used; remove fillers 'uh' and duplicate 'and'. Suggestion: say 'casual, loose clothes' if combining.

× Also loose clothes I prefer to wear in gym or in my home.

✓ Also, I prefer to wear loose clothes at the gym or at home.

Error: incorrect or missing articles and wrong preposition 'in gym' and 'in my home'. Use 'at the gym' and 'at home' to indicate location. Also follow subject-verb order: 'I prefer to wear loose clothes'.

× Wherever, in any program function I like to wear casual clothes oftenly.

✓ For any event or function, I like to wear casual clothes often.

Errors: 'Wherever, in any program function' is awkward; 'program function' is unclear—use 'event' or 'function'; 'oftenly' is nonstandard; correct adverb is 'often'. Place adverb after verb phrase or at sentence end. Use concise expression.

× Yes, I like to wear T-shirt, uh, because, uh, T-shirt is wearing AT shirt is very, uh, comfortable and, uh, in summer I can change that, change my T-shirt openly when I want to change it and.

✓ Yes, I like to wear T-shirts because a T-shirt is very comfortable, and in summer I can change my T-shirt easily when I want to.

Errors: article and plural problems ('T-shirt' vs 'T-shirts'), word order and redundancy ('T-shirt is wearing AT shirt' is incorrect), and awkward phrase 'change that, change my T-shirt openly'. Suggestions: use plural 'T-shirts' when speaking generally; use 'a T-shirt is very comfortable' for general statements; replace 'openly' with 'easily' or omit; complete the sentence.

× Yes, I spend a lot of time selecting my favorite clothes.

✓ Yes, I spend a lot of time selecting my favorite clothes.

This sentence is grammatically correct. It uses present simple to describe a habitual action. No change needed.

× My favorite colour is black, so I am always trying to pick some black T-shirts, uh, from any shops nearby my house and I get different brands and I.

✓ My favorite color is black, so I always try to pick black T-shirts from shops near my house, and I buy different brands.

Errors: unnecessary 'some' and filler 'uh'; 'nearby my house' should be 'near my house' or 'nearby'; 'I am always trying to pick' is wordy—use 'I always try to pick'; sentence fragment 'and I' must be completed—use 'and I buy different brands'. Suggestions: remove fillers, simplify progressive to simple present for habitual actions, and complete the sentence.