Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more grammatical, concise and organized. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your general preference, then add two brief specific examples using linking words (for example, 'for formal events' and 'at home'). Avoid fillers like 'uh' and unclear phrases such as 'I always feel low.'

例: I choose clothes depending on the occasion. For example, I wear a suit to weddings and a kurta for religious ceremonies, but at home I prefer simple, comfortable clothes.

提案: Give a direct answer first, then briefly explain why with clear vocabulary. Correct awkward phrases and avoid redundancy. Use one linking word like 'because' to connect reason.

例: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes most of the time because they make me feel relaxed. For instance, at home I usually wear loose T-shirts and sweatpants.

提案: Answer directly and correct grammar (use present simple). Give a short reason and a brief extra detail using a linking word like 'so' or 'because'. Remove fillers.

例: Yes, I like wearing T-shirts because they are comfortable. So at home I usually wear T-shirts, especially cotton ones in hot weather.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and explain the reason concisely. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., 'choose clothes' not 'choose my clock') and improve sentence structure. Provide one specific detail about how you choose colors and use a linking word like 'because' or 'so'.

例: Yes, I often spend a long time choosing clothes because I try to pick colors that suit my dark skin. For example, I test different shades like navy or burgundy to see which looks best on me.

× The clothes I wear this is depend on uh, occasion wise, uh, when it is wedding I always wear suit uh, when, when it's uh pooja I always wear kurta and in my home I always feel low.

✓ The clothes I wear depend on the occasion: for weddings I always wear a suit, for pooja I wear a kurta, and at home I usually dress casually.

Original sentence has several structure problems: unnecessary words ('this is'), incorrect phrase order ('occasion wise'), missing articles ('a suit'), and awkward clause links. Suggestion: remove filler words, use 'depend on the occasion', include articles before singular countable nouns, and separate ideas with commas or conjunctions for clarity.

× As I said I this is depend on occasion wise but I always prefer comfortable cloth in at my home I always wear a lower scented shirt.

✓ As I said, it depends on the occasion, but I always prefer comfortable clothes; at home I usually wear a loose, simple shirt.

Errors include wrong pronoun/phrase ('I this is depend'), incorrect noun form ('cloth' should be plural 'clothes'), wrong preposition ('in at my home'), and incorrect adjective choice ('lower scented' is nonsensical). Suggestion: use 'it depends on the occasion', use plural 'clothes', 'at home' for location, and choose correct adjectives like 'loose' or 'simple'.

× Yes, I always liked you to wear T-shirts.

✓ Yes, I always like to wear T-shirts.

The original uses past tense 'liked' which conflicts with 'always' meaning a habitual present preference. Use present simple 'like' for habits. Also 'you' is incorrect pronoun here; the speaker should use 'I'.

× They feel me so comfortable and uh, when I am at my home I always wear T-shirts.

✓ They make me feel very comfortable, and when I am at home I always wear T-shirts.

'They feel me' is incorrect; English uses 'make me feel' or 'I feel' with the subject as clothing. Also 'at my home' is more natural as 'at home'. Use 'very' instead of 'so' for formality and clarity.

× Yes I always I always confused to choose my clock because of my my skin is so dark that's why I choose my clothes according to my skin they takes lot of time to be selected.

✓ Yes, I am often confused when choosing clothes because my skin is very dark; I select clothes according to my skin tone, so it takes me a long time to decide.

Multiple problems: repetition ('I always I always'), wrong verb form ('confused to choose' should be 'confused when choosing' or 'have trouble choosing'), wrong noun 'clock' instead of 'clothes', pronoun errors, subject-verb agreement ('they takes' -> 'it takes me'), and awkward sequencing. Suggestion: use 'I am often confused when choosing clothes', 'skin tone' for clarity, and 'it takes me a long time to decide'.