Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clearer and more natural: start with a direct topic sentence, avoid invented or incorrect words, reduce hesitations, and add one specific detail. Use one or two linking words for coherence. Aim for 2–3 concise sentences.

例: I prefer wearing casual clothes like jeans and T-shirts because they are comfortable and practical for daily activities. For example, I usually wear a plain T-shirt and jeans when I go to class or meet friends because they keep me relaxed and make it easy to move around.

提案: Answer directly (prefer comfortable clothes), avoid repetition and hesitations, fix grammar (subject-verb agreement), and finish your thought with a reason or example. Use a linking word like 'because' or 'also' to connect ideas.

例: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes because they make me feel relaxed. For instance, when I hang out with friends I usually wear a hoodie and jeans, which are both practical and let me show my personal style.

提案: Keep the direct reply and give clear, specific examples. Correct grammar and vocabulary mistakes, and use one linking word to add a related detail. Avoid invented phrases and be concise.

例: Yes, I like wearing T-shirts because they are comfortable and versatile. For example, I wear simple T-shirts for studying at university, and sporty T-shirts when I go for a run; I also own several in different colours and designs.

提案: Be concise and correct grammar: use one clear reason and a specific example. Remove unclear or inappropriate phrases (e.g., 'face the Caucasians occasions') and avoid hesitations. Use a linking word like 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I spend a fair amount of time choosing clothes because I want to look my best. For example, before a family event I pick an outfit carefully and sometimes ask my parents for their opinion to make sure it suits the occasion.

× I prefer wearing cashicles such as jeans or AT shirt is because it's really comfortable practicals for daily activities like umm, going to class or meeting up with friends.

✓ I prefer wearing casual clothes such as jeans or a T-shirt because they are really comfortable and practical for daily activities like going to class or meeting up with friends.

Multiple adjective and noun choice errors: 'cashicles' and 'AT shirt' are incorrect word forms; 'is because' creates a faulty structure; 'it's' singular doesn't match plural nouns; 'practicals' is incorrect as an adjective. Suggest using 'casual clothes', 'a T-shirt', and 'they are' to agree in number, and use 'practical' as an adjective. Also remove filler words and extra commas.

× It's also takes uh, keeps things simple and relaxed.

✓ They also help keep things simple and relaxed.

Subject-verb agreement and verb choice: 'It's also takes' mixes singular subject 'it' with plural verb 'takes' and incorrect auxiliary. The intended subject is plural 'they' (clothes), so use 'help keep' with base verb 'keep'. Remove fillers.

× Yes, I prefer to wear comfortable and casual clothes umm like I will choose a gyms or and AT shirt whence I hang out with my friends.

✓ Yes, I prefer to wear comfortable, casual clothes; for example, I choose jeans or a T-shirt when I hang out with my friends.

Multiple issues: 'a gyms' mixes singular article with plural noun; 'AT shirt' wrong form; 'will choose' implies future but context is habitual so simple present 'choose' is correct; 'whence' is archaic/incorrect here — use 'when'. Also punctuation improved. These match incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs and tense usage (present tense).

× It's mainly feels more relaxed and also let me feel comfortable.

✓ It mainly feels more relaxed and also lets me feel comfortable.

Subject-verb agreement and incorrect insertion: 'It's mainly feels' combines contraction 'it is' with another verb; correct is 'It mainly feels'. 'let me feel' needs third-person singular 'lets' to agree with 'it'. Use consistent subject and verb forms.

× Moreover, it also can express my.

✓ Moreover, it can also express my personality.

Sentence is incomplete and missing object: 'express my' requires a noun (e.g., 'personality' or 'style'). Complete the sentence to convey meaning. This is a sentence structure error.

× This go well with almost any things whether I'm going to the dreams or runnings returns.

✓ They go well with almost anything whether I'm going to class or going for a run.

Several word choice errors: 'This' should be 'They' to match plural 'T-shirts'; 'go' agrees with plural; 'any things' should be 'anything'; 'dreams' and 'runnings returns' are incorrect — likely 'class' and 'a run'. Replace with correct collocations.

× I also have my own T-shirts in different designs and colours.

✓ I also have T-shirts in different designs and colours.

Minor redundancy: 'my own' is acceptable but unnecessary; sentence is otherwise correct. No grammar change required except optional stylistic simplification. Classified as subject-verb agreement check though original verb 'have' was correct.

× Yes, I do spends a lot of times choosing my clothes because I want to let me root my best and also uh, I like to make things different outfits uh, so that it can face the Caucasians occasions.

✓ Yes, I do spend a lot of time choosing my clothes because I want to look my best and I like to create different outfits so that I can suit various occasions.

Multiple errors: 'do spends' mixes auxiliary 'do' with incorrect verb form — after 'do' use base verb 'spend'; 'a lot of times' should be 'a lot of time' for amount, or 'many times' for frequency; 'let me root my best' is incorrect—use 'look my best'; 'make things different outfits' should be 'create different outfits'; 'it can face the Caucasians occasions' is unclear and likely means 'suit various occasions'. Fixes involve subject-verb agreement, verb forms, and word choice.

× I also will ask my parents opinions.

✓ I will also ask my parents' opinions.

Possessive form missing: 'parents opinions' needs the possessive apostrophe 'parents'' to show opinions belong to parents. Also word order 'will also' is preferable. This is an incorrect use of pronouns/possessive form.