Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammatical accuracy and concise phrasing. Begin with a clear topic sentence, correct articles and noun forms, and avoid redundancy. Use one linking phrase and one specific detail (e.g., activities) to support your idea.

例: I prefer comfortable clothes, such as jeans and soft T-shirts, because they suit everyday activities. For example, when I go shopping or meet friends, these clothes let me move easily and stay relaxed.

提案: Correct tense and pronoun consistency, and combine ideas more smoothly with linking words. Start with a direct answer, then contrast reasons for both choices using a linking phrase like "however" or "on the other hand."

例: I prefer comfortable clothes because they allow me to move freely and feel relaxed during the day. However, on special occasions I choose smart clothes because they create a professional impression and make me look more formal.

提案: Make sentences grammatically correct and concise. Use precise verbs and fewer clauses. State one clear reason, then give a specific example of how you style T-shirts.

例: Yes, I’m a big fan of T-shirts because they are very comfortable and easy to style. For example, I often pair a plain T-shirt with jeans and a jacket to create a simple but fashionable look.

提案: Avoid repeating words and improve word choice (e.g., "designing" → "planning" or "deciding"). Use a clear contrast connector like "however" and give a specific example of a special occasion.

例: Not really. I usually pick clothes quickly without much thought. However, for special occasions such as weddings or job interviews, I spend more time planning my outfit to ensure I look appropriate and fashionable.

× I prefer comfortable clothes such as a simple jeans or soft T-shirt because they are suited for everyday activities and you feel easy to move in.

✓ I prefer comfortable clothes such as simple jeans or a soft T-shirt because they are suited for everyday activities and you feel easy to move in.

The phrase 'a simple jeans' mixes singular article 'a' with the plural noun 'jeans'. Use 'jeans' without 'a' or use a singular countable alternative (e.g., 'a pair of jeans'). Also use the article 'a' with 'soft T-shirt' since 'T-shirt' is singular and countable. Suggestion: 'simple jeans' or 'a pair of simple jeans' and 'a soft T-shirt'.

× I would prefer comfortable clothes because they allowed me to move freely and feel relaxed throughout the day.

✓ I would prefer comfortable clothes because they allow me to move freely and feel relaxed throughout the day.

The student used past tense 'allowed' while the modal phrase 'I would prefer' expresses a present hypothetical preference. Use present tense 'allow' to match the time frame. 'They allow me to move' correctly shows habitual or general ability.

× But in special occasion I would pick smart clothes because it will create a professional impression and also make you more formal.

✓ But on special occasions I would pick smart clothes because they create a professional impression and also make you look more formal.

Problems: 'in special occasion' needs plural 'occasions' with preposition 'on'. 'It will create' shifts to future; keep verb tense consistent with hypothetical/present preference by using present simple 'create'. Also 'make you more formal' is awkward; use 'make you look more formal' to describe appearance. Use plural agreement 'they create' to match 'smart clothes'.

× Yes, I am actually a big fan of T-shirts because they are comfortable wearing and they also suits for merging with all the clothes easily which you can be fashionable just with the T-shirts and you don't have to worry about what to wear.

✓ Yes, I am actually a big fan of T-shirts because they are comfortable to wear and they also suit being paired with many other clothes easily, so you can be fashionable just with T-shirts and you don't have to worry about what to wear.

Use 'comfortable to wear' instead of 'comfortable wearing' (infinitive required). 'They also suits' has subject-verb agreement error and incorrect form; use 'they suit' (plural). 'Suits for merging with all the clothes' is unnatural; use 'suit being paired with many other clothes' or 'go well with many other clothes'. Simplify and remove unnecessary articles: 'T-shirts' plural is fine.

× But for special occasion I usually spend more time designing what to wear so I will look fashionable.

✓ But for special occasions I usually spend more time planning what to wear so I will look fashionable.

Use plural 'special occasions' and the correct preposition/phrase 'for special occasions'. 'Designing what to wear' is unnatural; use 'planning what to wear'. Also verb 'will look' is acceptable if referring to a specific upcoming event, but ensure consistency: if speaking generally, 'so I look fashionable' may be better.