Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and clear: start with a topic sentence saying what you like now, then briefly compare with the past. Use correct tense and avoid unclear phrases (e.g. “curls,” “editing to the trend”). Keep to 2–3 sentences and add one specific example of a garment or style.

例: Now I prefer wearing fashionable but comfortable clothes, such as slim-fit jeans and simple blouses. When I was a child, I mostly wore whatever my mother bought for me, which tended to be loose and plain.

提案: Answer directly: state your general preference and then explain the conditions with linking words like “however” or “when.” Finish sentences fully and give a short example of an event when you choose smart clothes.

例: It depends on the situation: at home I usually wear casual clothes because they are comfortable. However, when I attend a party or a family dinner I prefer smart clothes, such as a shirt and chinos, to look neat and respectful.

提案: Be concise and correct common errors. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No), then add one or two specific reasons and an example of when you wear T-shirts. Use correct word order and avoid filler words.

例: Yes, I wear T-shirts most of the time because they are comfortable and easy to pair with jeans. For example, I usually wear a plain T-shirt when I go to the cinema or meet friends on weekends.

提案: Give a clear reason and one concrete detail about what makes you spend time choosing clothes (fit, color, quality). Use linking words (because, so) and complete your sentences. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I spend quite a lot of time choosing clothes because I want them to fit well and suit my style. For instance, I always try clothes on to check the fit and color before I decide to buy them.

× To talk about the clothes, when I was child, I used to the clothes which are comfortable and which my mom used to buy it.

✓ To talk about clothes, when I was a child, I used to wear clothes that were comfortable and that my mom used to buy.

Missing past-tense verb 'wear' after 'used to'; missing article 'a' before 'child'; redundant pronoun 'it' after 'buy'. Use 'used to' + base verb for past habitual actions and past-tense 'were' to describe comfortable clothes. Also use relative pronoun 'that' for things. Suggestion: practice 'used to' + base verb and include necessary articles (a/an/the).

× But looking at now, I prefer wearing a bit fashionable curls.

✓ But now I prefer wearing slightly more fashionable clothes.

Incorrect phrase 'looking at now' and word 'curls' is wrong noun here; should be 'clothes'. Use 'prefer' + -ing is acceptable, but adverb placement and choice needed: 'slightly more fashionable' expresses degree. Suggestion: replace awkward temporal phrase with 'now' and choose correct noun and adverb order.

× Editing to the trend and it keeps me calm.

✓ I follow trends, and that makes me feel calm.

Fragment 'Editing to the trend' is ungrammatical; unclear subject and verb. Rephrase to a clear subject ('I') and verb ('follow') and connect clauses with 'and'. 'That' refers to following trends. Suggestion: make complete clauses with subject + verb and clear referents.

× Basically it depends, if I am at home I wear comfortable clothes which are casual and which makes me feel ease.

✓ Basically it depends: if I am at home, I wear comfortable, casual clothes that make me feel at ease.

Comma splice and clause punctuation; 'which makes' should be 'that make' to agree with plural 'clothes'; 'feel ease' is incorrect collocation — use 'feel at ease'. Also adjectives order and commas needed. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and use correct idiomatic expressions.

× However when I have to attend any events or I have to go out with my friends family I tend.

✓ However, when I have to attend events or go out with my friends and family, I dress up.

Sentence is incomplete ('I tend' needs complement). Remove redundant 'have to' and add a verb to complete thought; add 'and' between 'friends' and 'family'. Suggestion: finish clauses with clear verbs and use conjunctions for lists.

× Well, yes, I most of the time.

✓ Well, yes, most of the time I do.

Fragment missing verb. Place 'most of the time' with auxiliary 'do' to form complete answer. Suggestion: include auxiliary verbs when replying elliptically.

× I usually prefer T-shirts when I'm ho home because or going out it is.

✓ I usually prefer T-shirts when I'm at home because they are comfortable, and I also wear them when going out.

Many errors: typo 'ho home', fragmented 'because or going out it is'. Need subject 'they' for T-shirts and clear structure. Suggestion: keep sentences simple: state preference, reason, and additional circumstance with correct pronouns.

× I consider it as a comfortable piece of clothing which also makes you feel good and confident.

✓ I consider them comfortable pieces of clothing that also make you feel good and confident.

Pronoun agreement: 'T-shirts' is plural so use 'them' and 'pieces' and plural verb 'make'. Avoid unnecessary 'as' after 'consider'. Suggestion: match pronoun number to noun and use 'consider + noun/adjective' without 'as' when appropriate.

× Yes I do. While choosing the clothes I usually spend a lot of time because I really buy the new clothes for me and when I buy it, I have to guarantee that particular piece of clothes so look good to me and makes me.

✓ Yes, I do. When choosing clothes I usually spend a lot of time because I really like to buy new clothes, and when I buy them I have to make sure that each piece looks good on me and makes me feel good.

Multiple issues: tense and verb forms and pronoun agreement. Use 'When choosing clothes' and present simple 'spend'; 'I really like to buy' clarifies intent; plural 'clothes' requires 'them'; 'make sure' is correct collocation; 'looks good on me' is proper phrasing; finish with 'makes me feel good'. Suggestion: break long sentence into clauses, ensure subject-verb agreement and correct collocations.