Headphones— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be careful with grammar and avoid small hesitations. Make your response grammatically correct and slightly more specific. Use a clear topic sentence, one or two supporting details, and linkers if needed.

例: Yes, I use headphones every day. I usually wear lightweight earphones when I exercise or study because they help me focus and motivate me.

提案: Watch subject-verb agreement and reduce redundancy. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add two specific details using linking words to keep coherence.

例: I use wireless Bluetooth earphones. They are compact and convenient to carry, and as a result they’re very popular among young people today.

提案: Reduce hesitation and correct tense consistency. Use linking words to connect ideas and be specific about frequency and purpose.

例: I use them almost every day when I exercise, such as walking or running. For example, I listen to music for motivation and sometimes I play English podcasts to improve my language skills.

提案: Eliminate repetition and fix small phrasing issues. Give a clear topic sentence and two concise reasons, using linking words for clarity.

例: I don’t wear headphones when talking to someone because I remove them to show respect. Also, I avoid them when crossing the street or riding a bike for safety reasons.

提案: Improve grammar and coherence: use correct verb forms and clearer comparisons. Provide a balanced opinion with linking words and a specific example about duration or design.

例: It depends on the headphones. Modern models are lightweight and comfortable for short periods, but wearing them for several hours can cause ear discomfort or soreness.

× I often use them when I working out or studying.

✓ I often use them when I am working out or studying.

The clause after when requires a finite verb; 'working' as -ing form needs an auxiliary 'am' for present continuous. Use 'I am working out' to show ongoing action during which headphones are used.

× I use a wireless earphones that connect to my phone via Bluetooth.

✓ I use wireless earphones that connect to my phone via Bluetooth.

'Earphones' is plural, so the singular article 'a' is incorrect. Remove 'a' to match plural noun, or change to 'a wireless earphone' for singular. Also 'that connect' correctly uses plural verb.

× They are quite small which make them really convenient and easy to carry around.

✓ They are quite small, which makes them really convenient and easy to carry around.

The relative clause refers to 'being small' (singular idea) or to 'it' as a singular fact, so the verb should be 'makes' not 'make'. Adding a comma before 'which' improves sentence structure.

× And I think this type of headphone is really popular among young people nowadays.

✓ And I think this type of headphone is really popular among young people nowadays.

This sentence is acceptable as 'type of headphone' (headphone used generically) but could also be 'type of headphones'. No grammatical correction required; left unchanged. Explanation: both 'type of headphone' and 'type of headphones' are used; keep consistency with earlier plural 'earphones'.

× I used them almost every day, uh, when I do exercise like walking or running, I usually put them on, uh, to listen to music and sometimes I uh, uh, listen to English podcast to improve my English while I'm working out.

✓ I use them almost every day when I do exercise like walking or running. I usually put them on to listen to music and sometimes I listen to English podcasts to improve my English while I'm working out.

Mixed tenses: 'used' (past) conflicts with habitual present 'almost every day'. Change to present 'use'. Also split into clearer sentences and pluralize 'podcast' to 'podcasts' for general reference. Remove filler 'uh' for clarity.

× I don't use headphones when I'm having conversation with others people because I always take them up to show respect.

✓ I don't use headphones when I'm having a conversation with other people because I always take them off to show respect.

Use the article 'a' with 'conversation' and 'other people' instead of 'others people'. The phrasal verb is 'take off' (remove), not 'take up'. Also 'take them off' indicates removing headphones.

× Another situation when I I am crossing the street or riding a bike I I take them off for safety reasons.

✓ Another situation is when I am crossing the street or riding a bike; I take them off for safety reasons.

Fix repeated words 'I I' and add a main verb 'is' after 'Another situation' or restructure with a semicolon to join clauses. This clarifies the sentence and corrects word repetition.

× I think it's depend umm, headphone and uh, modern headphone is uh, designed uh to be lightweight, so it make us umm feel comfortable while wearing them.

✓ I think it depends on the headphones, and modern headphones are designed to be lightweight, so they make us feel comfortable while wearing them.

'Depend' needs third person singular 'depends'. Use plural 'headphones' consistently. 'Modern headphone is designed' should be 'modern headphones are designed' to match plural. 'Make' should be 'make' agrees with 'they' (plural); original had subject-verb mismatches. Remove fillers.

× But if we wear them for a long time, it's my ears is not good.

✓ But if we wear them for a long time, my ears do not feel good.

The original combines 'it's' and 'my ears is' which is ungrammatical. Use 'my ears do not feel good' or 'my ears start to hurt' to express discomfort. Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'ears' plural with 'do'.