Headphones— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and fix tense and article errors.

例: Yes, I sometimes use headphones, especially for long journeys. For example, when I travel the hour-long commute to my university, I listen to music to lift my mood and make the trip more enjoyable.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence naming the model, then briefly explain two specific features and how they help you, using correct tense and linking words. Avoid repeating words and vague references.

例: I use AirPods Pro, which I bought last year. They have active noise cancellation and a comfortable fit, so I can concentrate while studying and relax during stressful exam periods.

提案: Start with a clear statement about when you use them, then explain two specific reasons with linking words. Correct unclear phrases and finish your sentence. Avoid repetition and incorrect nouns.

例: I usually use headphones for journeys longer than an hour because they help me focus and block out external noise. For instance, the noise-cancelling feature makes busy places like airports much quieter, so I can relax and listen to music or podcasts.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence about when you avoid headphones, then provide specific reasons and an example. Use correct verb forms and avoid vague or repetitive phrases. Mention the book by title or topic if possible.

例: I don't usually use headphones at home because I prefer reading to improve my skills and knowledge. For example, recently I started reading a personal-development book about time management, so I focus on reading instead of listening to music.

提案: Answer directly, then explain briefly why with specific details (materials, fit, battery life). Avoid irrelevant price details and unclear numbers; correct grammar and remove repetition.

例: Yes, my headphones are very comfortable because they have soft ear cushions and a secure fit, which is important for wearing them for several hours. They also have long battery life, so I don't need to recharge them during a long study session.

× Yes, I use headphones sometimes especially when I have to travel a long distance.

✓ Yes, I sometimes use headphones, especially when I have to travel a long distance.

Word order and adverb placement: 'sometimes' usually comes before the main verb or after the subject. Placing it earlier makes the sentence more natural. Suggestion: move 'sometimes' to before 'use' to follow common English adverb placement.

× For example when I have to travel to my university which almost take one hour.

✓ For example, when I travel to my university, which takes almost one hour.

Subject-verb agreement and tense: 'which' refers to 'travel to my university' (or 'the journey'), so the verb should be 'takes' (third-person singular present). Use simple present 'travel' when describing habitual action. Add commas for clarity.

× So that time I used to listen to a good music to uplift my mood.

✓ At that time I used to listen to good music to uplift my mood.

Article and collocation: 'music' is uncountable and does not need 'a'. Use 'good music' not 'a good music'. 'At that time' is a more natural phrase than 'So that time'.

× But usually I don't use headphones in my daily.

✓ But usually I don't use headphones in my daily routine.

Missing noun: 'daily' is an adjective or adverb; the noun 'routine' or phrase 'daily life' is needed. 'In my daily' is incomplete. Use 'in my daily routine' or 'in my daily life'.

× I use Airpod pro which which I bought last air that help me to study especially during my exams that help me to relax my mind.

✓ I use AirPods Pro, which I bought last year; they help me study, especially during my exams, and help relax my mind.

Several issues: repetition 'which which' removed; 'last air' is incorrect — should be 'last year'; 'AirPods Pro' plural brand name; pronoun agreement: refer back with 'they' not 'that'; punctuation improves clarity. Use base verb 'help' with plural subject.

× It has a option which which helps me to concentrate like noise cancellation and comfortable fit too.

✓ They have features that help me concentrate, such as noise cancellation and a comfortable fit.

Article and plurality: 'It has a option' should be 'They have features' because AirPods are plural and 'option' should be 'an option' or 'features'. Removed duplicate 'which'. 'Like' is replaced with 'such as' to list examples. Add 'a' before 'comfortable fit'.

× I I use headphones when I have to travel a long distance over an hour.

✓ I use headphones when I have to travel a long distance of over an hour.

Removed duplicated 'I'. Clarified 'over an hour' by connecting it to 'a long distance' with 'of' or rephrase 'when I have to travel for over an hour'.

× This helps me to focus more and relax especially when there is a noise outside.

✓ They help me focus more and relax, especially when there is noise outside.

Pronoun agreement: 'This' should refer to 'headphones' (plural), so use 'They'. Also remove unnecessary 'to' after 'helps' when rephrased. 'a noise outside' is unnatural; use 'noise outside' or 'a lot of noise outside'.

× As the airport contain noise cancellation and easy to fit.

✓ They include noise cancellation and are easy to fit.

Subject-verb agreement and sentence fragment: 'airport' is incorrect referent; context implies 'headphones'. Use plural 'They' and verb 'include' and add 'are' before 'easy to fit' to form a complete clause.

× So this helps me to relax and listen to a good.

✓ So these help me relax and listen to good music.

Incomplete noun phrase: 'listen to a good' is unfinished—'good music' completes the thought. Match plural subject 'these' to 'headphones'. Remove unnecessary 'to' after 'helps' when rephrased.

× I wouldn't use headphones when I am at home, I would prefer to read a book that help me to gain more knowledge and improve my skill at the same time.

✓ I wouldn't use headphones when I am at home; I would prefer to read a book that helps me gain more knowledge and improve my skills at the same time.

Comma splice: use semicolon or separate sentences. Subject-verb agreement: 'that help' should be 'that helps' because 'book' is singular. 'skill' should be plural 'skills' unless referring to one specific skill. Remove unnecessary 'to' after 'help' and 'prefer to read' is fine.

× Usually I try to not to listen to music.

✓ Usually I try not to listen to music.

Incorrect infinitive negation: use 'try not to' (not 'try to not to'). Remove the extra 'to'.

× Recently I started a new book name book.

✓ Recently I started a new book named 'Book'.

Phrase clarity and naming: use 'named' or 'called' to introduce a title. If the title is literally 'Book', use quotation marks when speaking, but in writing include 'named Book'. Also 'started a new book' is fine with 'named' following.

× Yes my headphones are really comfortable as I have to wear them for a long hours so I bought them on a bit expensive.

✓ Yes, my headphones are really comfortable as I have to wear them for long hours, and I bought them a bit expensively.

Article and plurality: use 'long hours' not 'a long hours'. The phrase 'bought them on a bit expensive' is ungrammatical; better: 'I bought them at a slightly expensive price' or 'they were a bit expensive'. 'A bit expensive' as adjective: 'they were a bit expensive' is most natural.

× They I bought it for almost 71,000 last year so it is really good and comfortable especially when I'm wearing 2 for a long.

✓ I bought them for almost 71,000 last year, so they are really good and comfortable, especially when I'm wearing them for a long time.

Pronoun and agreement: remove stray 'They'. Use 'them' for plural 'headphones'. '71,000' needs a currency unit (e.g., 71,000 rupees) for clarity. 'Wearing 2' should be 'wearing them', and add 'time' after 'long' to complete the phrase.