Headphones— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid unclear phrases and errors, and give one brief specific reason. Use linking words if adding details. Keep it under 5 sentences.

例: Yes, I do. I usually wear headphones when I study math because listening to music helps me concentrate. For example, calm instrumental music blocks out noise from my surroundings and lets me focus on problem-solving.

提案: Give one clear topic sentence naming the type, then add 1–2 specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and grammar mistakes (plural/singular, pronouns).

例: I use wireless Bluetooth headphones. They are convenient because they connect easily to my phone and don’t have cables to get in the way when I move around, which is especially useful during study sessions.

提案: Answer directly and correct grammar (use plural/singular, verb forms). Provide a brief specific explanation and a linking word to connect ideas. Avoid repeating previous answers word-for-word.

例: I usually wear headphones when I’m studying math because they help me concentrate. For instance, they reduce background noise and let me focus on solving exercises for longer periods.

提案: Be clearer and accurate: state conditions briefly, give a specific reason, and use appropriate vocabulary (e.g., ‘distracting’, ‘unsafe’, ‘lose awareness’). Avoid confusing phrases and be concise.

例: I usually avoid wearing headphones in crowded public places because they make it harder to hear announcements and can reduce my awareness of traffic, which could be unsafe.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence and one specific detail. Correct grammar (can be adjusted / depends on my head size) and avoid filler words. Use a linking word if adding a second reason.

例: Yes, they are comfortable. My headphones are adjustable so I can change the headband to fit my head, and the ear cushions are soft, which makes long study sessions easier.

× Yes I do, especially when I do some exercise in maths.

✓ Yes I do, especially when I do some exercises in maths.

Plural issue for 'exercise' — when referring to repeated or general activities use the plural 'exercises'. This fits the present habitual context. Suggestion: use 'exercises' or rephrase to 'when I exercise in maths'.

× Dramatic wearing headphone helped me to hear the music clearly.

✓ Wearing headphones dramatically helped me hear the music clearly.

Incorrect word order and form: adverb 'dramatically' should modify the verb phrase and 'headphone' should be plural 'headphones'. Also 'helped me to hear' can be 'helped me hear'. Suggestion: place adverb before verb and use plural nouns for general items.

× I use wireless headphone.

✓ I use wireless headphones.

Count noun 'headphone' should be plural when speaking generally about the item. Use 'headphones' for a pair.

× This is because it can connect with the Bluetooth device easily.

✓ This is because they can connect to Bluetooth devices easily.

Pronoun and verb agreement: 'headphones' is plural so use 'they' and plural verb 'can connect'. Preposition 'to' is correct for connecting to a device and 'Bluetooth devices' plural fits the general statement.

× Other than that it also help me with it.

✓ Other than that, they also help me with it.

Subject-verb agreement: 'they' for 'headphones' and verb should be 'help' (not 'helps'). Include a comma for clarity.

× Also convenience for me to wear it.

✓ They are also convenient for me to wear.

Missing verb and incorrect adjective form: 'convenience' (noun) should be 'convenient' (adjective) and sentence needs a subject and verb. Use 'they are' to refer to headphones.

× I usually wear headphone when I do some exercise in maths.

✓ I usually wear headphones when I do some exercises in maths.

Plural forms needed for 'headphones' and 'exercises' when speaking generally. Alternatively say 'when I study maths' or 'when I do math exercises'.

× This is because it helped me to be more concentrate in doing it.

✓ This is because they help me to concentrate more when doing it.

Tense and form mismatch: context is habitual (present) so use present 'help' not past 'helped'. Use 'concentrate' (verb) rather than 'concentrate' as noun, and place 'more' after 'concentrate'. Use plural 'they' for headphones.

× I rarely use headphone in public areas.

✓ I rarely use headphones in public areas.

Use plural 'headphones' when referring to the item generally.

× This is because it's a bit dangerous for me to wear it because it can cost me not be a lightweight to surrounding.

✓ This is because it's a bit dangerous for me to wear them, as they can prevent me from being aware of my surroundings.

Multiple problems: pronoun number ('it' should be 'them'), awkward phrasing 'cost me not be a lightweight to surrounding' is ungrammatical. Use 'prevent me from being aware of my surroundings' to express danger. Also use 'as' or 'because' once to avoid redundancy.

× Yes it is. This is because my headphone can be adjust, uh, depends on my size of head.

✓ Yes it is. This is because my headphones can be adjusted, depending on the size of my head.

Passive participle 'adjust' should be 'adjusted'. Use plural 'headphones'. 'Depends on my size of head' is unnatural; use 'depending on the size of my head'.