Headphones— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and accurate: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitations and repetition, correct vocabulary (e.g. 'over-ear' instead of vague words), and clarify what you use instead (the student said 'Airport' which is unclear). Use one linking phrase to add a brief reason.

例: No, I usually avoid using over-ear headphones because they are too large for my small head and look uncomfortable. Instead, I prefer compact earphones that fit snugly and are less conspicuous.

提案: Provide a direct topic sentence naming the type, then give specific features and a short reason using a linking word. Avoid filler words and repeated phrases.

例: I prefer small in-ear or on-ear headphones because they fit comfortably and are lightweight. Also, I choose models with good sound quality and noise isolation so I can hear clearly while working.

提案: Start with a clear statement about typical situations, then give 2–3 specific examples connected by linking words. Correct pronoun use ('my' not 'his') and avoid redundant phrases.

例: I usually wear headphones while doing household chores, such as washing dishes or cleaning, because they help me listen to music or podcasts and make tasks more enjoyable.

提案: Respond directly and concisely: name the situations and give a short reason with a linking word. Improve grammar (e.g. 'full concentration').

例: I avoid using headphones when I need to study for exams or focus on important tasks, because they can be distracting and I need full concentration.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence, reduce hesitations, and use precise vocabulary. Explain briefly why size and fit matter with one linking phrase. Correct unclear phrase at the end ('wedding hat' seems incorrect).

例: Yes, headphones can be comfortable if they fit properly; however, oversized or poorly padded models can cause discomfort after prolonged use, so I choose ones with adjustable bands and soft ear pads.

× No, I do not use headphones because they are quite big.

✓ No, I do not use headphones because they are quite big for me.

The original sentence is grammatical but sounds incomplete; adding 'for me' clarifies the reason. This is a sentence structure clarity improvement rather than a specific tense error. Suggestion: include a phrase that shows the perspective (e.g., 'for me').

× They are com, they are came in quite big size and my head is small so they kind of look ridiculous on me.

✓ They come in quite large sizes and my head is small, so they look ridiculous on me.

Problems include incorrect verb form 'are came' (should be 'come') and awkward adjective use 'big size'. Also remove filler 'they are' repetition. Use plural 'sizes' and 'large' as adjective. Suggestion: use simple present for general facts: 'come in sizes'.

× So rather than that I use Airport.

✓ So instead I use earbuds/AirPods.

'Rather than that' is awkward and 'Airport' is likely mispronunciation of 'AirPods' or wrong word. Replace with 'instead' and the correct item. Suggestion: use precise nouns and simpler connectors: 'So instead I use AirPods.'

× If I have to use headphones then I usually go for the for those who are in small size and easy to wear on my head.

✓ If I have to use headphones, I usually go for those that are small and easy to wear on my head.

Remove redundant words and correct relative clause: use 'those that are' not 'for those who are in small size'. 'Who' is used for people, 'that' for things. Use size adjective 'small'. Suggestion: use concise relative clauses: 'those that are small and easy to wear.'

× Yes, and also the quality that they produce is good then I'll use them.

✓ Also, if the sound quality is good, I will use them.

Original mixes tenses and connector 'then' awkwardly. Use conditional structure: 'if... , I will...' and 'sound quality' is clearer than 'the quality that they produce'. Suggestion: use if-condition and future/modal consistently.

× I use his headphones while I'm doing work doing household works like washing dishes, cleaning house, cooking food and taking out rest.

✓ I use headphones while I'm doing household chores like washing dishes, cleaning the house, cooking, and resting.

'His' is wrong pronoun; should be 'headphones' or 'my headphones'. 'Doing work doing household works' is redundant; use 'household chores'. 'Taking out rest' is incorrect phrase; use 'resting'. Suggestion: choose correct possessive or omit when general, and use standard collocations: 'household chores.'

× I specifically try to avoid using headphones when I'm doing.

✓ I specifically try to avoid using headphones when I'm studying or concentrating on work.

Sentence ends abruptly with 'when I'm doing.' Complete the clause with the intended activity. Suggestion: specify the activity after 'when I'm' to form a complete sentence.

× When I'm preparing for my examination or have to give full concentrations on the work, then I do not use them.

✓ When I'm preparing for an exam or need to concentrate fully on my work, I do not use them.

Use 'an exam' instead of 'my examination' for natural phrasing and 'concentrate' instead of 'give full concentrations'. Remove unnecessary 'then'. Suggestion: use natural collocations: 'prepare for an exam', 'concentrate on my work.'

× MMM uh yes, wearing headphones is comfortable if it if it is, if they are in the right size for you.

✓ Yes, wearing headphones is comfortable if they are the right size for you.

Remove fillers and redundancy 'it if it is'. Use 'the right size' rather than 'in the right size'. Suggestion: avoid hesitations and simplify: 'if they are the right size for you.'

× If they are not, if they are big enough, big inside, then they then they will be trouble for you.

✓ If they are not, if they are too big inside, then they will cause discomfort for you.

Use 'too big' rather than 'big enough' (which reverses meaning). Remove duplicate 'then they then they'. 'Will be trouble' is unidiomatic; use 'will cause discomfort'. Suggestion: use 'too' for excess and 'cause discomfort' for natural expression.

× So I think if you choose the right one then it is easy for wedding hat.

✓ So I think if you choose the right pair, they will be comfortable to wear.

The original contains nonsense 'wedding hat' likely mispronunciation; replace with intended meaning 'wear'. Use 'pair' for headphones and 'comfortable to wear' for clarity. Suggestion: ensure word choice matches intended meaning and use appropriate noun for headphones ('pair').