Headphones— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid tense inconsistency and redundant phrases.

例: Yes, I often use headphones. For example, I wear them when watching movies at home and when I travel by train because they block noise and improve sound quality.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and a specific reason. Use correct article and subject-verb agreement, and use a more precise term than ‘iOS headphones’ if you mean Apple EarPods or AirPods.

例: I usually use Apple EarPods because they fit comfortably and have good sound quality for the price.

提案: Answer directly then add one or two specific situations linked logically. Keep consistent tense and avoid repeating the same idea twice.

例: I use headphones when my family is talking so I don't disturb them, and also when I watch movies or listen to music late at night.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence plus a brief reason. Use correct tense and a natural phrasing for conditions.

例: I normally don't wear headphones when I'm alone at home because there's no need to avoid disturbing anyone.

提案: Be concise and coherent: give a direct opinion and one clear reason or example. Avoid hesitation sounds and unclear comparisons; make sure the reasoning makes sense.

例: I find some headphones uncomfortable, especially over-ear models after long use, because they can feel tight and make my ears warm. However, lightweight in-ear buds are comfortable for long periods.

× Yes, I use headphones for watching movies, listening songs.

✓ Yes, I use headphones for watching movies and listening to songs.

Use gerund phrases with correct parallel structure and include the preposition 'to' for 'listen to'. Connect items with 'and' for clarity.

× When I was in train I usually prefer headphones.

✓ When I am on the train I usually prefer headphones.

Tense inconsistency: 'usually' indicates a habitual present action, so use present tense 'am' and the correct preposition 'on' with 'train'. 'Prefer' should remain present.

× I use the iOS headphones because it is a best in quality.

✓ I use the iOS headphones because they are the best in quality.

'Headphones' is plural so use 'they are'. Use the definite article 'the' with 'best' and correct subject-verb agreement.

× I use headphones when I'm sitting in family and they are talking with each other.

✓ I use headphones when I'm sitting with my family and they are talking to each other.

Use 'with my family' rather than 'in family'. Use 'talking to each other' for correct verb+preposition collocation.

× So when I was watching movie I used headphones.

✓ So when I was watching a movie I used headphones.

Include the article 'a' before 'movie'. The past continuous 'was watching' and past 'used' are acceptable together for a past event.

× I did not use headphone when there is nobody at home because there is nobody to disturb me.

✓ I do not use headphones when there is nobody at home because there is nobody to disturb me.

Use plural 'headphones'. Match tense: general habit uses present 'do not use', not past 'did not use'. 'There is nobody' is acceptable.

× No, wearing headphone is not comfortable.

✓ No, wearing headphones is not comfortable.

Use plural 'headphones' to match common usage. 'Wearing' is fine but the noun should be plural.

× Uh, whenever we remove the headphones, our uh, listening quality is uh, low rather than uh, we did not use uh, headphones.

✓ Whenever we remove the headphones, the sound quality is lower than when we are not using headphones.

Improve sentence structure and clarity. Use 'sound quality' and comparative 'lower than', and replace awkward clause 'we did not use headphones' with 'when we are not using headphones' to maintain tense consistency and correct comparison.