Headphones— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (plural 'headphones', 'daily' -> 'every day') and avoid redundancy. Add one specific detail using a linking word to support your answer.

例: Yes, I use headphones every day. For example, I listen to music and watch vlogs on YouTube while commuting, which helps me relax.

提案: Give a clear, direct answer naming the type and a brief reason. Avoid filler words and unclear phrasing ('obvious' is vague). Use one or two concise sentences with a linking word if needed.

例: At the moment I use Apple EarPods that came with my iPhone because they are convenient and fit well, so I can use them everywhere.

提案: Organize the answer: start with a topic sentence about common situations, then give specific examples with linking words and correct grammar. Limit to at most 4–5 sentences and avoid repetitions.

例: I use headphones in many situations, especially at home and while travelling. For instance, I wear them when studying to concentrate and when shopping with friends to listen to music, because they help me relax and reduce stress.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence and a concise reason. Use correct articles and plural forms, avoid filler sounds, and add one brief supporting detail or example using a linking word.

例: I wouldn't use headphones in lectures or classes because I need to pay attention to the teacher. For example, during university seminars I leave them off so I don't miss important information.

× I use headphone at the daily because I listen to music and I sometimes listen to some vlogs and Youtubes and some channels.

✓ I use headphones daily because I listen to music and sometimes watch vlogs and YouTube channels.

'Headphone' should be plural 'headphones' (count noun for the device). 'at the daily' is incorrect; use 'daily' or 'every day'. 'listen to some vlogs and Youtubes and some channels' is awkward: you 'watch vlogs' and 'YouTube channels' (YouTube is a proper noun and not pluralized as 'Youtubes'). Simplify to 'sometimes watch vlogs and YouTube channels.'

× So yeah, I use it daily.

✓ So yeah, I use them daily.

Referring back to 'headphones' (plural), the pronoun should be plural 'them' rather than singular 'it.' This ensures agreement between the pronoun and its antecedent.

× I use right now uh an iPhone headphones because I have an uh iPhone phone.

✓ Right now I use iPhone headphones because I have an iPhone.

'An iPhone headphones' mixes singular article with plural noun; remove the article. Also 'iPhone phone' is redundant—'iPhone' already implies a phone. Move 'right now' to the start for natural word order and remove filler words.

× So that's why and I like it uh very much because, uh, it is so obvious.

✓ So that's why I like them very much because they are very comfortable.

'It is so obvious' is unclear and unnatural in this context. 'Headphones' are plural, so use 'them' and plural verb 'are.' Replace vague 'obvious' with a specific adjective like 'comfortable' to explain preference.

× I use headphone, uh, actually in everywhere in home and school or maybe sometimes in, umm, uh, when I'm go to shop with my friends or with my family.

✓ I use headphones almost everywhere at home and at school, and sometimes when I go shopping with my friends or family.

'Headphone' should be 'headphones' (plural). 'in everywhere' is incorrect; use 'almost everywhere' or 'everywhere' and use prepositions 'at home' and 'at school.' 'when I'm go to shop' is ungrammatical—use 'when I go shopping.' Also remove redundant 'with my' before 'family.'

× So I use something everywhere actually because it's helped me to concentrate and help me, uh, to become more comfortable.

✓ So I use them almost everywhere because they help me concentrate and make me more comfortable.

'It's helped me' mixes tenses and uses singular 'it.' Use present simple 'they help' for habitual actions. Use 'make me more comfortable' rather than 'help me to become more comfortable.' Maintain plural pronoun 'they' for 'headphones.'

× And it's also sometimes reduce the stress and the anxiety for me.

✓ They also sometimes reduce my stress and anxiety.

'It's' is singular; should be 'they' for plural headphones. 'Reduce the stress and the anxiety for me' is wordy—use 'reduce my stress and anxiety.' Place adverb 'sometimes' before the verb for natural word order.

× There's a lot of conditions that I do not use a headphones, uh, one of them, for instance, when I am in a lecture or maybe in a in the university or in the class in the school, I should not use headphone then because, uh, I should concentrate and pay attention to the teacher or maybe to the tutor.

✓ There are many situations when I do not use headphones. For example, when I am in a lecture at university or in class at school, I should not use headphones because I need to concentrate and pay attention to the teacher or tutor.

'There's' (there is) is singular but it refers to plural 'conditions/situations' so use 'There are.' 'A headphones' and 'use headphone' are incorrect—use plural 'headphones' without an article. 'In a in the university' is awkward; use 'at university' or 'at the university.' Use 'I need to' or 'I should' consistently; 'should not use' is fine but keep verb forms parallel. Simplify phrasing for clarity.