Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and correct grammar: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid redundancy and tense/number errors (e.g., “types of music,” “makes me”).

例: I enjoy both types of music, but I prefer happy music. For example, upbeat songs boost my energy and make me feel optimistic, so I usually choose them when I want to lift my mood.

提案: Give a direct answer then add one specific, concise explanation. Use natural linking phrases and avoid exaggerated or repetitive statements. Correct subject-verb agreement ("makes me").

例: Yes, definitely. Happy music makes me feel more excited because the fast tempo and cheerful lyrics boost my energy and help me concentrate on positive thoughts.

提案: Answer directly, then give one clear supporting detail or consequence. Avoid vague comments and fix phrasing ("It's a bit of a shame," "I've never played an instrument").

例: No, I have never taken any professional music classes, which is a bit of a shame because I would like to learn an instrument. For instance, I hope to learn the guitar someday to play songs I enjoy.

提案: Be clear and avoid repetition. Give specific examples and use linking words to explain condition and preference. Correct awkward phrases ("when tasks are not complicated").

例: Yes, I often listen to music while driving and sometimes when studying, provided it doesn't distract me. For example, I choose instrumental tracks while studying and upbeat songs during simple drives.

× I like both type of music but however I always prefer happy music over sad music because happy music always make me feel excited and optimistic whilst that music doesn't necessarily make me feel sad but don't make me feel good as happy.

✓ I like both types of music, but I always prefer happy music over sad music because happy music always makes me feel excited and optimistic, while sad music doesn't necessarily make me feel sad and doesn't make me feel as good as happy music.

Errors: 'both type' should be plural 'both types' (singular/plural issue). 'make' should be 'makes' to agree with singular noun 'music' (subject-verb agreement but treated under singular/plural). 'whilst that music' is awkward; use 'while sad music'. The clause 'but don't make me feel good as happy' lacks subject and comparative structure; change to 'doesn't make me feel as good as happy music'. Suggestions: Use correct plural for 'both types', ensure verbs agree with their subjects, include explicit subjects in clauses, and use 'as...as' for comparisons.

× Yes, definitely. Without question, happy music always make me feel like flying into the sky.

✓ Yes, definitely. Without question, happy music always makes me feel like I'm flying into the sky.

Error: 'happy music always make' should be 'always makes' because 'music' is singular and requires third person singular verb form. Also 'feel like flying into the sky' is acceptable but more natural as 'feel like I'm flying into the sky'. Suggestion: Use '-s' for third person singular verbs and include a subject for the 'feel like' clause when appropriate.

× I always feel subconsciously happy when I'm listening to happy music.

✓ I always feel subconsciously happy when I listen to happy music.

Error: The progressive 'when I'm listening' is not wrong but simple present 'when I listen' better matches habitual actions ('always'). Use simple present for repeated or habitual activities. Suggestion: Use consistent tense for habitual statements.

× That's always true.

✓ That is always true.

Error: Contraction 'That's' is acceptable, but in formal responses use full form 'That is always true.' No grammatical error beyond formality. Suggestion: Use full forms in formal spoken responses.

× I have never taken any professional music classes.

✓ I have never taken any professional music classes.

This sentence is correct. Present perfect is used correctly to describe life experience. No change needed.

× That's a bit of shame.

✓ That's a bit of a shame.

Error: Missing article in idiomatic expression; should be 'a bit of a shame'. Suggestion: Use correct fixed expressions with necessary articles.

× And I've never played any musical instrument ever since I was a child.

✓ I have never played any musical instrument since I was a child.

Error: 'ever since' with present perfect is redundant; 'since' suffices. Also starting sentence with 'And' is unnecessary. Suggestion: Use 'since' to indicate starting point and avoid redundant 'ever'.

× I like to listen to music but not good at playing music.

✓ I like to listen to music but I am not good at playing musical instruments.

Errors: Missing subject and verb 'I am' before 'not good'. Also 'playing music' is vague; 'playing musical instruments' is clearer. Suggestion: Always include subject and auxiliary verb, and choose the correct prepositional phrase ('good at').

× It's quite unfortunate.

✓ It's quite unfortunate.

This sentence is grammatically correct and appropriately concise. No change needed.

× I like to listen to music while I'm driving or sometimes studying as well, as long as it does not distract me too much.

✓ I like to listen to music while I'm driving or sometimes while studying, as long as it does not distract me too much.

Error: Parallel structure issue: 'while I'm driving or sometimes studying' should be parallel: 'while I'm driving or while studying'. Suggestion: Keep parallel gerund/participle structures for clarity.

× I particularly like to listen to the music while I'm doing the driving.

✓ I particularly like to listen to music while I'm driving.

Errors: Unnecessary definite article 'the music' and awkward 'doing the driving'. Use 'listen to music' and 'driving' directly. Suggestion: Omit 'the' when speaking generally and avoid redundant 'doing the' phrases.

× Especially during the time when those are not complicated.

✓ Especially when the roads are not busy or complicated.

Errors: 'those' is vague and has no clear antecedent; the phrase 'the time when those are not complicated' is ungrammatical. Likely meaning is 'when the roads are not busy' or 'when conditions are simple'. Suggestion: Use clear subjects and referents; specify what 'those' refers to (e.g., 'roads' or 'traffic conditions').