Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Говорить яснее и структурированнее: начните с прямого ответа (Yes/No) и дайте 1–2 конкретных причины. Избегайте повторов и исправляющих фраз. Уточните слова («calm music» → «calm, instrumental music») и добавьте одно конкретное примечание о том, когда вы её слушаете.

例: No. I prefer calm, instrumental music because I don't like songs that change my mood. For example, I often play piano or ambient tracks while reading or working, as they help me relax and concentrate.

提案: Улучшите грамматику и лексику: начните с короткого связного ответа и используйте связующее слово для объяснения. Избегайте разговорных междометий («Uh») и неправильных форм ("boots" → "boosts"). Приведите 1–2 конкретных примера ситуаций и избегайте неясных фраз («doing tours»).

例: Yes, it does. I usually listen to upbeat music before starting something demanding or before going to the gym because it boosts my energy and lifts my mood. For instance, I play energetic pop tracks when I’m preparing for a workout or doing household chores like washing dishes.

提案: Сделайте ответ более последовательным и грамматически корректным: начните с простого утверждения о факте, затем уточните, где и кто посоветовал. Уберите ненужные слова («whatever») и исправьте времена и форму глаголов. Дайте конкретные факты: когда, какой курс.

例: Yes, I have. I started with basic music lessons at school and later took a local course in my town. My school music teacher recommended I try the course, so I attended weekly lessons for about a year.

提案: Сформулируйте ответ чётко и устраните повторы и нечёткие слова. Начните с короткого «Yes» и затем перечислите 1–2 конкретных занятий с примерами музыки. Избегайте бессмысленных фраз («cold music», «beating up music») и уточните, что конкретно вы имеете в виду (например, calming or upbeat music).

例: Yes, I often listen to music while doing other things. For example, I play upbeat tracks when I exercise or walk, and calming instrumental music while I do my homework because it helps me focus.

× In my opinion is yes.

✓ In my opinion, yes.

Sentence word order is incorrect for a present-tense opinion. The correct form places 'in my opinion' before the comment and does not use an extra verb. Use a comma after the introductory phrase to improve clarity. Suggestion: Use 'In my opinion, yes' or 'I think so.'

× it boots me my energy

✓ it boosts my energy

'Boots' is a misspelling and wrong verb; 'boosts' is the correct verb and should take a direct object 'my energy'. The structure 'boots me my energy' is ungrammatical. Suggestion: use 'it boosts my energy' or 'it gives me energy.'

× improves my mood

✓ improves my mood

This phrase is correct. 'Improves' is present simple third-person singular verb used appropriately with 'it'. No change needed.

× Sometimes I also play it while doing tours like washing the dishes, walking before cleaning.

✓ Sometimes I also play it while doing chores like washing the dishes or walking before cleaning.

'Tours' is the wrong word; 'chores' fits household tasks. Preposition 'like' is correct but lists should use 'or' for alternatives. 'Walking before cleaning' is unclear; if meaning walking instead of cleaning, use 'or walking' or rephrase. Suggestion: 'while doing chores like washing the dishes or walking.'

× Yes I had whatever starting in school I take a local courses.

✓ Yes, I did. Starting in school, I took some local courses.

Mixed and incorrect verb tenses and words. 'Had whatever' is ungrammatical; use 'I did' to answer. Then past tense 'took' matches 'starting in school'. Use 'some local courses' for plural quantifier. Suggestion: 'Yes, I did. Starting in school, I took some local courses.'

× Uh actually I didn't take it by myself.

✓ Uh, actually I didn't take them by myself.

'It' refers to 'courses' (plural), so use plural pronoun 'them'. Also 'by myself' is acceptable if meaning without personal initiation. Suggestion: 'I didn't take them by myself' or 'I didn't enroll in them on my own.'

× My teacher from music letters advice it to try it.

✓ My music teacher advised me to try it.

Word order and word choice are wrong. Use 'music teacher' as natural phrase. 'Advised' is the past tense of 'advise'. The verb 'advise' takes an indirect object: 'advised me to try it.' Remove 'letters'. Suggestion: 'My music teacher advised me to try it.'

× Of course I do. Is I mentioned before before?

✓ Of course I do. As I mentioned before,

'Is I mentioned before before?' is ungrammatical. The correct phrase is 'As I mentioned before,' using proper connective 'as' and correct word order. Also avoid repeating 'before'. Suggestion: 'As I mentioned before, I listen to music while doing other things.'

× It during tourists I prefer listen to music and cold music also concentrates me more.

✓ When I'm travelling, I prefer to listen to music, and calm music also helps me concentrate more.

Many errors: 'during tourists' is nonsense; use 'when I'm travelling' or 'when I'm on trips'. 'Prefer listen' needs infinitive 'to listen'. 'Cold music' likely meant 'calm music'. 'Concentrates me' is incorrect; use 'helps me concentrate.' Suggestion: 'When I'm travelling, I prefer to listen to music, and calm music helps me concentrate more.'

× During doing my homework I'm also listening beating up music called music.

✓ While doing my homework, I also listen to upbeat music.

'During doing' is incorrect; use 'while doing'. 'I'm also listening beating up music called music' is ungrammatical and confused. 'Upbeat music' is likely intended. Use simple present 'I listen' for habitual actions. Suggestion: 'While doing my homework, I also listen to upbeat music.'