Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 注意语法和词汇的准确性，并减少填充词（如 uh）。用更自然的表达直接回答问题，然后用一两句具体细节支持。例如改正动词形式（feel → feeling），用更合适的动词（perform → play/listen to），并提供具体例子说明何种音乐让你平静或快乐。保持不超过五句话。

例: I usually choose music based on my mood. When I'm feeling sad, I listen to slow, acoustic songs that help me relax, such as soft piano ballads. But when I'm happy, I prefer upbeat pop or dance music because it creates a lively atmosphere and motivates me to move.

提案: 回答清晰且有理由，但要去掉口头语并用连贯词衔接。可以补充更具体的例子或短说明说明效果（如影响情绪或表现）。保持一句主题句加一两句支持细节的结构。

例: Yes, happy music definitely makes me more excited because of its fast tempo and cheerful lyrics. For example, I usually play energetic pop songs when I exercise, which helps me keep a high pace and stay motivated throughout my workout.

提案: 回答包含时间和态度，但存在语法错误和不清楚的表达（spherical knowledge 不合适，the tell us how to sing a song 语法错误）。应直接说参加过哪些课程，简明说明课程内容并给出具体原因说明为何无聊（例如课程太基础或缺乏实践）。减少笼统或模糊词汇。

例: Yes, I took music classes in primary and junior high school. The lessons focused mostly on basic music theory and simple singing exercises, which felt repetitive to me because there was little practical or creative work.

提案: 回答表达意图明确，但需更自然和具体。改正小错误（it's the one of my hobby → it's one of my hobbies；could → can）。可以给出具体场景说明什么时候听音乐以及哪类音乐最有助于集中注意力。使用连词使句子更连贯。

例: Yes, listening to music is one of my hobbies and I often play background music while studying or doing housework. Research suggests music can boost concentration, and I find that instrumental or lo-fi tracks help me focus better when I work.

× Actually it depends on what I'm feeling at that time.

✓ Actually it depends on what I'm feeling at that time.

句子正确，无需更改。保持现在时态与正在描述的情感状态一致。

× When I'm feel sad, then I'll perform some music which makes me calm down.

✓ When I feel sad, I play some music that calms me down.

原句“When I'm feel sad”中同时使用了缩写的“I'm”和动词原形“feel”，构成时态错误，应使用一般现在时“I feel”。此外，后半句用“perform some music”不自然，改为“play some music”更贴切；“which makes me calm down”改为定语从句“that calms me down”，使句子更简练自然。建议：注意主语和动词的一致形式，避免重复使用缩写与动词原形。

× But if I feel glad then I will prefer happy music which, uh, produce a happier atmosphere.

✓ But if I feel glad, then I prefer happy music that produces a happier atmosphere.

原句中“which ... produce”主谓不一致，produce应与单数名词music搭配为produces，且情景更适合一般现在时表达偏好，所以将“will prefer”改为“prefer”。同时将“which”改为“that”更口语和连接限制性定语。建议：注意时态选择（习惯/偏好用一般现在时）及主谓一致。

× ... happy music which, uh, produce a happier atmosphere.

✓ ... happy music that produces a happier atmosphere.

这是第三人称单数动词形式错误。主语music为第三人称单数，谓语动词必须加-s，故produce应改为produces。建议：第三人称单数现在时动词要加-s/-es。

× Yes, of course, uh, happy music does make me feel more excited because of its, uh, fast rhythm and cheerful lyrics, and I'll always listen to this kind of music when I do sports.

✓ Yes, of course, happy music does make me feel more excited because of its fast rhythm and cheerful lyrics, and I always listen to this kind of music when I do sports.

句子大体正确，但“I'll always listen”使用将来时不符合常规习惯性动作，应使用一般现在时“I always listen”。同时去掉口头语“uh”使表达更正式。建议：描述习惯性动作用一般现在时。

× Of course, I have taken music classes when I was in primary school and junior high, and these classes were about spherical knowledge and the tell us how to sing a song.

✓ Of course, I took music classes when I was in primary school and junior high, and these classes were about basic knowledge and taught us how to sing a song.

“I have taken ... when I was”时态混用，不应将现在完成时与表示过去时间点的从句连用，改用一般过去时“took”。原文“spherical knowledge”词不当，应为“basic knowledge”；“the tell us”语法错误，应改为动词过去式“taught us”。建议：表示过去具体时间用一般过去时；注意词汇搭配与动词形式。

× ... these classes were about spherical knowledge ...

✓ ... these classes were about basic knowledge ...

“spherical knowledge”不是英语中常见搭配，语义不明确。应使用“basic knowledge”或“fundamental concepts”。建议：选择与语境匹配的常用词汇。

× ... and the tell us how to sing a song.

✓ ... and taught us how to sing a song.

原句用法错误，需使用动词的过去式或过去分词形成被动或完成结构。这里表示过去发生的动作，应使用过去式“taught”。建议：描述过去事件时使用动词过去式。

× Of course, I have taken music classes when I was in primary school and junior high, and these classes were about spherical knowledge and the tell us how to sing a song. I think they were boring.

✓ Of course, I took music classes when I was in primary school and junior high. These classes were about basic knowledge and taught us how to sing a song, which I thought was boring.

原段落句子结构混乱，时态不一致且包含不自然的短语。将复合句拆分并统一为过去时，使表达更清晰流畅。建议：保持时态一致，避免将多个信息堆在一个句子中，必要时拆句。

× Of course, it's the one of my hobby.

✓ Of course, it's one of my hobbies.

原句中“the one of my hobby”中使用了错误的冠词和单复数形式。正确说法为“one of my hobbies”（我的爱好之一）。建议：'one of'后接名词复数，且不需定冠词'the'。

× Some research shows that listening to music could improve people's efficiency, and it is true for me.

✓ Some research shows that listening to music can improve people's efficiency, and it is true for me.

此句主要问题在于情态动词选择（could改为can更自然），介词部分无误。改动为情态动词使用，不改变介词。建议：用can表示一般性事实或普遍真理。

× When I am listening to music, I could be focused.

✓ When I listen to music, I can be focused.

原句中“am listening”现在进行时可以，但与“could be focused”混用显得不自然，描述一般事实更适合一般现在时“listen”与情态动词“can”搭配。注意“focused”作形容词使用是可以的。建议：描述习惯或一般情况用一般现在时并用can表能力或可能性。