Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Maak je antwoord vloeiender en beknopter door vulwoorden (zoals "uh", "umm") te vermijden en een duidelijke hoofdzin te gebruiken. Geef één of twee concrete redenen of een kort voorbeeld waarom je verdrietige muziek vermijdt, en gebruik verbindingswoorden om de zinnen logisch te verbinden. Houd het bij maximaal 3–4 zinnen.

例: I prefer happy music because sad songs tend to worsen my mood. For instance, when I'm already feeling down, listening to melancholic tracks usually makes me dwell on negative thoughts, so I choose upbeat playlists to lift my spirits.

提案: Formuleer je antwoord correct en concreet, en verwijder hesiterende uitingen. Gebruik één duidelijke reden en een voorbeeld of resultaat. Zorg dat de zinnen grammaticaal kloppen en logisch verbonden zijn met een verbindingswoord zoals "because" of "so".

例: Definitely. Upbeat music makes me feel energetic because the rhythm boosts my motivation; for example, I often play lively songs in the morning to help me start the day actively.

提案: Gebruik de correcte tijdsvormen en geef een korte, duidelijke uitleg. Begin met een directe antwoordzin, voeg daarna een relevante aanvullende detail toe met een verbindingswoord. Vermijd onnodige herhaling en wees specifiek over het soort lessen en wanneer je ze volgde.

例: No, I haven't taken formal music lessons, but I did take salsa dance classes during the COVID lockdown. They helped me stay active and improved my sense of rhythm.

提案: Verkort en verhelder je antwoord door overbodige woorden te verwijderen en duidelijke details te geven. Benoem welke genres of artiesten je kiest en waarom, en gebruik één extra zin om te beschrijven hoe muziek je activiteit beïnvloedt.

例: Yes, I often listen to music while cooking, especially in the evenings. I usually play mellow jazz or acoustic playlists because they help me relax and make the cooking experience more enjoyable.

× Honestly, I wouldn't say that I uh, ever listened to sad music because I umm, realized uh, couple of years ago that it changes my mood.

✓ Honestly, I wouldn't say that I have ever listened to sad music because I realized a couple of years ago that it changes my mood.

The original mixes past simple 'listened' with a present relevance 'ever'; use present perfect 'have ever listened' for life experience up to now. Also add the article 'a' before 'couple of years ago'. Suggestion: use 'I have never listened' or 'I wouldn't say I have ever listened'.

× So even though I'm feeling sad or down or emotional, umm, whenever I have this negative.

✓ So even though I feel sad, down, or emotional sometimes, I don't listen to sad music when I'm in a negative mood.

The original sentence is incomplete and ungrammatical ('whenever I have this negative' lacks a noun). Correct by completing the idea and using simple present 'I feel' for general states and 'when I'm in a negative mood' to name the condition. Suggestion: avoid fragments and finish the clause with a clear noun phrase like 'negative mood'.

× Tapping uh up music makes me more energetic and uh, happy and wants to be, umm, the take off maximum of my day.

✓ Upbeat music makes me more energetic and happy and helps me get the most out of my day.

The phrase 'Tapping up music' is incorrect; 'upbeat music' is the appropriate term. 'Makes me ... and wants to be' shows a subject-verb mismatch and unclear subject for 'wants'. Use 'helps me get the most out of my day' to express the intended meaning. Suggestion: use clear subjects and verbs and correct collocations like 'upbeat music' and 'get the most out of my day'.

× No, I've never been taking music classes, although I did take salsa classes.

✓ No, I've never taken music classes, although I did take salsa classes.

Use present perfect 'have never taken' for the experience of having not attended classes. 'Have never been taking' is incorrect because 'been taking' implies an ongoing action in the recent past. Suggestion: use 'I've never taken' or 'I have never attended' for completed experiences.

× So it's dancing classes during the COVID.

✓ They were dance classes during COVID.

'It's dancing classes' is ungrammatical; use 'They were dance classes' or 'They were dancing classes'. Also 'during the COVID' needs either 'during COVID' or 'during the COVID-19 pandemic'. Suggestion: say 'during COVID' or 'during the COVID-19 pandemic' for correctness and clarity.

× I put on some uh, dinner music and start cooking and enjoying my umm uh, cooking classes.

✓ I put on some dinner music and start cooking and enjoying myself in the kitchen.

'Enjoying my cooking classes' is wrong if the meaning is enjoying cooking at home; 'cooking classes' implies formal lessons. Also the reflexive 'enjoying myself' fits here. Use 'in the kitchen' to clarify location. Suggestion: if you mean lessons, say 'I start cooking and enjoy my cooking classes'; if you mean home cooking, use 'enjoying myself in the kitchen'.

× Definitely yes. Tapping uh up music makes me more energetic and uh, happy and wants to be, umm, the take off maximum of my day.

✓ Definitely yes. Upbeat music makes me more energetic and happy and helps me get the most out of my day.

Combined tense and phrasing errors: ensure verb forms match the subject ('music makes me' not 'wants to be') and use idiomatic expressions ('get the most out of my day'). Suggestion: keep verbs consistent and use common collocations like 'upbeat music' and 'get the most out of'.