Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and grammatical. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition and correct tense and article errors.

例: I prefer sad music because it helps me feel nostalgic. For example, slow piano songs remind me of past experiences, so I listen to them when I want to reflect.

提案: Answer directly, use correct grammar, and give a clear reason. Avoid unclear phrases and repetition. Use one linking word to connect reason and result.

例: Yes, happy music makes me feel more excited because upbeat rhythms and cheerful lyrics lift my mood. For instance, listening to pop songs with strong beats energizes me before exercising.

提案: Use past tense correctly and be specific about the class. Give one or two concise supporting details with a linking word to explain impact.

例: Yes, I took a school music class when I was 15. It covered basic theory and singing, and as a result I became more interested in music and started practicing regularly.

提案: Respond clearly and correct unclear vocabulary. State the activity, give a reason and an example; avoid mistaken words (e.g., 'masks bowling'). Use linking words for coherence.

例: Yes, I usually listen to music while studying for maths. It helps me concentrate and reduces stress; for example, soft instrumental tracks help me stay focused during practice problems.

× I prefer to listen to sad music because it's made me feel nostalgic and feel sentimental because I always feel sad thing sad experiences.

✓ I prefer to listen to sad music because it makes me feel nostalgic and sentimental; I often remember sad experiences.

Errors: incorrect use of 'it's made me' (mixes contraction with present perfect incorrectly for a general preference), redundant phrases ('feel sentimental' and 'feel nostalgic' repeated awkwardly), and ungrammatical fragment 'sad thing sad experiences'. Correction uses simple present 'makes' to describe a habitual effect, removes redundancy, and clarifies meaning. Suggestion: use simple present for general truths or habitual reactions (it makes me), avoid repeating similar verbs, and replace unclear fragments with clear nouns (sad experiences).

× I believe happy music makes me feel more excited because happy songs lyric is my it can be my Bible and also makes me feel ha makes me feel refreshed.

✓ I believe happy music makes me feel more excited because the lyrics of happy songs can be like a Bible to me, and they also make me feel refreshed.

Errors: subject-verb agreement and noun phrase problems ('songs lyric is' incorrect), pronoun/reference error ('my it'), repetition and broken phrase ('ha makes me'). Correction fixes third-person plural agreement ('they make'), uses proper noun phrase 'the lyrics of happy songs', and clarifies meaning. Suggestion: ensure the verb agrees with the subject (songs/they), use clear noun phrases, and avoid extraneous words or repetitions.

× I have taken a music class when I was 15 years old because schools education system has it and also it makes me feel more excited about music and also I feel more interested in music.

✓ I took a music class when I was 15 because the school education system offered it, and it made me more interested and excited about music.

Errors: mixing present perfect 'have taken' with a specific past time 'when I was 15' (use simple past), article omission and word order in 'schools education system' (should be 'the school education system'), and awkward repetition. Correction uses simple past 'took' for a past event, includes 'the' for the system, and streamlines the sentence. Suggestion: use simple past with specific past time expressions, include definite articles where needed, and avoid repeating the same idea.

× I usually listen to music while studying for maths tests because it makes me more excited to for preparing for the exam and also masks bowling for me, so yeah.

✓ I usually listen to music while studying for math tests because it helps me get excited about preparing for the exam and also helps me concentrate, so yes.

Errors: awkward infinitive phrase 'to for preparing', incorrect or nonsensical phrase 'masks bowling for me', and inconsistent word choice ('maths' acceptable regionally but made uniform). Correction replaces the incorrect infinitive with 'about preparing' and interprets 'masks bowling' as likely intended 'helps me concentrate' (meaning was unclear so replaced with a plausible effect). Suggestion: use correct prepositional phrases ('excited about preparing'), avoid unclear idioms, and state effects clearly. If 'masks bowling' had a specific meaning, provide the intended verb and noun clearly.