Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clear and concise. Begin with a direct topic sentence stating your preference (sad or happy), then give one or two specific reasons with examples. Avoid repetition and irrelevant words. Use linking words (for example, because, when, so) to connect ideas and keep sentences short (no more than 4–5 sentences).

例: I prefer happy music. Because when I feel good, upbeat songs boost my energy and make daily tasks more enjoyable. For example, I often play lively pop playlists while cleaning or commuting, which helps me stay motivated.

提案: Answer directly and give a clear reason with one specific example. Use correct tense and simple linking words (because, so, for example). Remove filler sounds (uh, um) and redundant phrases. Keep sentences compact and logical.

例: Yes, happy music does make me feel more excited because up-tempo rhythms increase my energy and lift my mood. For example, when I listen to an energetic pop song before exercising, I feel more motivated and upbeat.

提案: Give a direct yes/no answer, then explain briefly and clearly why. Use correct grammar (I have not taken any music classes; I am busy with my studies). Provide a short detail about future plans if relevant. Keep to 1–3 sentences.

例: No, I have not taken any music classes because I have been very busy with my university studies. However, I might take lessons in the future when I have more free time.

提案: Start with a direct answer, then list two specific activities and explain briefly how music helps you in each. Use linking words (for example, when, while) and avoid repetition. Keep sentences natural and grammatically correct.

例: Yes, I often listen to music while doing other things. For example, I play podcasts or soft music when I cook because it makes the task more enjoyable, and I listen to upbeat playlists while exercising to keep my energy up.

× I I prepare a coat so I have to use it when my mind is when I'm upset and I live then I listen pregnancy and when I happy mode then I listen to song. That's it.

✓ I prepare a coat, so I have to use it when I am upset; then I listen to sad music, and when I am in a happy mood I listen to songs.

Multiple issues: redundant words, missing verbs, incorrect words ('live' and 'pregnancy' are incorrect here), and awkward clause structure. Suggest breaking into shorter clauses, use correct verb forms ('am upset', 'am in a happy mood'), and use appropriate vocabulary ('sad music' instead of 'pregnancy'). (Grammar problem type ID:26)

× Yes, happy music make me feel more excited because it helps me energy and uh, relaxed, uh, love Happ happy when you see and it is the most favorite song of mine.

✓ Yes, happy music makes me feel more excited because it gives me energy and makes me feel relaxed; I love happy songs, and they are my favorites.

Subject-verb agreement: 'music' is a singular noun, so use 'makes' not 'make'. Also missing verbs after 'helps me'—use 'gives me energy' and 'makes me feel relaxed'. Avoid repetition and unclear fragments. Use plural 'songs' and 'favorites' for general preference. (Grammar problem type ID:2 and 27)

× No, I have no taken any music classes. Uh umm. However I recently my. Study I am busy here at my studies that's why I.

✓ No, I have not taken any music classes. However, recently I have been busy with my studies, so I have not taken any classes.

Incorrect auxiliary usage: 'have no taken' should be 'have not taken'. Sentence fragments and tense consistency: use present perfect 'have been busy' to explain recent ongoing situation. Combine clauses to form complete sentences. (Grammar problem type ID:4 and 26)

× Yes, I listen to music here while I am doing other things, for instance when I cook, cook and working exercise. I do exercise I I prefer.

✓ Yes, I listen to music while I do other things; for instance, when I cook or when I exercise. I prefer that.

Redundant words and incorrect verb forms: use 'do' for general activities ('do other things'), 'when I cook' and 'when I exercise' are parallel structures. Remove repeated words and incomplete fragments. Maintain present simple for habitual actions. (Grammar problem type ID:6)