Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the response grammatically correct, more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one brief reason and an example. Reduce hesitations and repetition.

例: It depends on my mood. Generally I prefer happy music because it lifts my spirits and helps me concentrate, but sometimes I choose sad songs when I want to reflect or relax.

提案: Correct grammar (subject-verb agreement) and tighten sentences. Use a linking phrase to connect the general statement to the example. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, happy music does make me feel more excited. For example, when I exercise I listen to upbeat pop because the tempo and catchy chorus energize me and help me keep going.

提案: Improve grammar and clarity. Give a clear topic sentence, one reason, and a specific plan. Remove fillers and correct vocabulary (e.g., "learn" instead of "pay").

例: No, I haven't taken any music classes, but I plan to learn the piano in the future because I enjoy melodies and want to play my favorite songs myself.

提案: Make sentences grammatically correct and specific. Use correct words for devices and frequency. Avoid fillers and unclear phrasing; give one concise detail about when and why you listen.

例: Yes, I often listen to music while I clean my room or exercise. I usually use my headphones and find that music makes chores more enjoyable and workouts more motivating.

× Well, it depend on my mood.

✓ Well, it depends on my mood.

The verb should agree with the singular subject it (third person). Use depends (third-person singular present) not depend.

× I prefer happy music when I want to experience, uh, experience feeling happy or love.

✓ I prefer happy music when I want to feel happy or feel love.

After want to we use the base form of the verb (infinitive without to in casual speech is 'to feel'). 'Experience feeling' is redundant and awkward; use 'feel' to express emotions concisely.

× Yes, I think so. Happy music make me feel excited.

✓ Yes, I think so. Happy music makes me feel excited.

Subject-verb agreement: happy music (treated as singular concept) requires makes (third-person singular present). 'Make' is incorrect here.

× It's really make me feel energetic.

✓ It really makes me feel energetic.

Use makes (third-person singular present) to agree with the singular subject it. 'Make' is base form and does not agree.

× No I haven't uh, I never taken any music classes but in the future I will to take cards music classes like piano.

✓ No, I haven't; I have never taken any music classes, but in the future I will take music lessons like piano.

After haven't (have not) use the past participle taken, so 'I have never taken' is correct. Also 'will to take' is incorrect: modal will is followed by the base verb 'take'. 'Cards music classes' is unclear; use 'music lessons'.

× I want to pay my favorite song.

✓ I want to play my favorite song.

The verb 'pay' is incorrect for listening/performing music; the correct verb is play. 'Want to' should be followed by the base verb 'play'.

× Yes I do. I usually listen to music uh, while I clean my room and sometime I exercise.

✓ Yes, I do. I usually listen to music while I clean my room, and sometimes when I exercise.

Use the plural adverb 'sometimes' (not 'sometime') to indicate occasional actions. Also add a comma for clarity and include 'when' to parallel the first clause.

× I obtain uh youth headphone or more everyday.

✓ I get new headphones or more every day.

The verb 'obtain' is awkward in conversation; 'get' is natural. 'Youth headphone' is incorrect noun phrase; use 'new headphones'. 'Every day' as two words is the adverbial phrase meaning each day.