Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant and clear, but you can improve by making a stronger topic sentence, avoiding redundancy, and adding a specific example or brief reason. Keep it within 2–4 sentences and use a linking word to connect ideas.

例: I prefer happy music because it boosts my energy and mood. For example, when I walk in the park I usually play upbeat pop songs, which help me keep a steady pace and enjoy the scenery.

提案: Good direct answer, but it's slightly repetitive of your previous response. Improve by giving one concise reason and a short specific example, and use a linking word to connect the cause and result.

例: Yes, it does — because upbeat rhythms raise my heart rate and concentration. For instance, when I clean my apartment with lively music, I finish tasks faster and feel motivated.

提案: Clear and natural answer. To improve, start with a direct topic sentence, then briefly expand with a specific detail about how you practice (what you sing, how often) and use a linking word to show contrast.

例: No, I haven't taken formal music classes, but I do practise by singing along to songs at home. For example, I often rehearse pop ballads for 10–15 minutes every evening to improve my pitch and confidence.

提案: Your answer is relevant but wordy and contains repetition. Make the topic sentence direct, avoid repeating earlier points, and give one or two specific examples with a linking word to make it concise and natural.

例: Yes, I often listen to music while doing other activities. For example, I play podcasts or upbeat playlists when I do household chores, and I prefer mellow acoustic tracks when relaxing in the park.

× I think I like happy music because it makes me feel more energetic while doing some work like walking in the park or doing some chores at the home.

✓ I think I like happy music because it makes me feel more energetic while doing activities like walking in the park or doing chores at home.

Use of prepositions: 'at the home' is incorrect; the usual phrase is 'at home' or simply 'home'. Also 'some work' is awkward with examples; use 'activities' to match 'walking' and 'chores'. This improves naturalness and corrects preposition use.

× Yes, happy music makes me feel more excited and energetic as I can do work while being happy at the same time.

✓ Yes, happy music makes me feel more excited and energetic because I can do work while feeling happy at the same time.

The connector 'as' is acceptable but can be ambiguous; using 'because' clarifies cause. Also 'being happy' is grammatical but 'feeling happy' is more natural in this context. This addresses tense and clarity.

× Well, no, I haven't taken any formal music classes, but in daily routines I try to sing along when listening to music.

✓ Well, no, I haven't taken any formal music classes, but in my daily routine I try to sing along when I listen to music.

Use of 'in daily routines' is unidiomatic; 'in my daily routine' or 'in my daily routines' could work but singular 'routine' with 'my' is more natural. Also change 'when listening to music' to 'when I listen to music' for clearer subject and tense consistency.

× Well yes, as I said before, I love listening to music while doing some other things like rocking in the park, doing chores in the house or any other thing.

✓ Well yes, as I said before, I love listening to music while doing other things like walking in the park, doing chores in the house, or doing other tasks.

'Rocking in the park' is likely incorrect for 'walking'; choose 'walking'. 'Some other things' is informal; 'other things' suffices. 'Any other thing' is unidiomatic; 'other tasks' is clearer. Also 'in the house' is acceptable but 'at home' is more natural; here 'in the house' is retained but could be 'at home' for improvement.