Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more direct and concise: give a clear topic sentence (preference), then one supporting detail with a linking word. Avoid fillers like “MMM” and vague phrases such as “I don't have preference” — instead say “I don’t have a fixed preference” and explain when you choose each type. Use slightly richer vocabulary (e.g., energetic, mellow) to show range.

例: I don’t have a fixed preference; it depends on the situation. For instance, when I’m at the gym I prefer energetic, upbeat tracks because they boost my energy and help me work out harder.

提案: Answer directly and fully: say yes or no, then explain with a reason and an example. Avoid contradictory or unclear words like “doubtful” if you mean agreement. Use linking words such as “because” or “for example” and complete your sentence — don’t leave it hanging.

例: Yes, happy music usually makes me feel more excited because the fast tempo and positive lyrics raise my energy. For example, upbeat pop songs help me keep a faster pace on the treadmill.

提案: Give a clear, direct response and clarify what you mean. If you haven’t taken classes, say so and add a brief supporting detail (e.g., how you learn or why not). Avoid confusing phrases like “play music in phone only.”

例: No, I haven’t taken any formal music classes. I mostly listen to music on my phone and sometimes try to teach myself songs from online tutorials.

提案: Respond directly and succinctly: state whether you do, then give 1–2 specific activities and explain how music helps, using linking words like “for example” or “so.” Avoid repetition and awkward phrasing like “do more well.”

例: Yes, I often listen to music while doing other tasks. For example, I play upbeat tracks during workouts to stay motivated, and I listen to soft instrumental music while studying because it helps me concentrate.

× MMM I don't have preference actually but usually depends on the situation.

✓ MMM I don't have a preference actually, but it usually depends on the situation.

Missing indefinite article 'a' before 'preference' (article error). Also add subject 'it' before 'usually depends' for a complete clause and a comma to separate ideas. Suggestion: use 'a preference' and include the subject: 'it usually depends'.

× I would say if I'm doing gym I would choose something exciting so it would boost my mood.

✓ I would say if I'm at the gym I would choose something exciting because it would boost my mood.

Incorrect preposition with 'gym' (should be 'at the gym') and conjunction choice: 'so' is acceptable but 'because' makes the causal link clearer. Also 'doing gym' is unidiomatic. Suggestion: use 'at the gym' and 'because' to explain reason.

× Yeah, doubtful.

✓ Yeah, I'm not sure.

'Doubtful' is an adjective and does not naturally stand alone as a short reply here; 'I'm not sure' is a complete, natural response. Suggestion: use a full clause with a subject and verb for clarity.

× Especially during gym I would prefer something a bit.

✓ Especially at the gym I would prefer something a bit more upbeat.

Preposition error: use 'at the gym'. The original sentence ends incomplete: 'something a bit' requires a qualifier (e.g., 'more upbeat'). Suggestion: complete the phrase with an adjective and use correct preposition.

× No, I don't usually play music in phone only.

✓ No, I don't usually play music; I only play music on my phone.

Preposition and word order errors: use 'on my phone' not 'in phone'. Also 'only' placement was awkward; moving 'only' before the verb phrase or reordering yields a natural sentence. Suggestion: say 'I only play music on my phone' or 'I play music only on my phone.'

× Yeah, I did.

✓ Yes, I do.

The question asked 'Do you listen to music while doing other things?' uses present tense. Reply should use present simple 'Yes, I do.' 'Yeah, I did' uses past tense and mismatches. Suggestion: match tense to the question unless referring to past specifically.

× I remember I told you I play music, especially during gym and it would boost up my mood and motivate me to do more well.

✓ I remember I told you I play music, especially at the gym, and it boosts my mood and motivates me to do better.

Preposition: use 'at the gym'. Tense and modality: 'would boost up' is conditional/unnecessary here; use present simple 'boosts' to match habitual action. 'Boost up' is redundant; 'boost' suffices. 'Motivate me to do more well' is unidiomatic; use 'motivate me to do better.' Also include commas for clarity. Suggestion: use present simple for habitual actions and choose natural collocations: 'boost my mood' and 'do better.'