Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Reduce hesitations and incorrect words (e.g. 'muses' → 'music', 'feel him' → 'feel sad' or 'feel happy'). Use linking words like 'but' or 'because' to connect ideas. Keep the response to no more than five sentences.

例: I prefer both sad and happy music, but I listen to sad songs more often. For example, when I feel lonely or reflective I choose slow, emotional tracks because they help me process my feelings.

提案: Start with a direct answer (Yes or No) and then give a clear reason and an example. Avoid repetition and filler words. Use linking words like 'because' and 'however' correctly to show contrast. Be specific about when and why happy music is exciting or annoying.

例: Yes, happy music usually makes me feel more energetic because of its fast tempo and cheerful lyrics. However, sometimes very loud or repetitive pop songs annoy me, especially when I need to concentrate.

提案: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence ('No, I haven't taken any music classes') and give specific reasons and future intentions. Correct grammar (e.g. 'I have never taken', 'my major is ...', 'music classes') and avoid extra words. Limit to up to five sentences.

例: No, I have never taken any music classes because my course load is heavy and my major is civil engineering. However, if I find spare time next year, I would like to enroll in a beginner piano course to learn basic skills.

提案: Give a short direct answer, then two specific examples of activities you do while listening to music. Use correct verb forms and linking words ('for example', 'when') and avoid unnecessary words like 'Hello'. Keep it natural and within five sentences.

例: Yes, I often listen to music while doing other tasks. For example, I play calm instrumental music when I solve math problems to help me concentrate, and I listen to upbeat songs when I clean the house to stay motivated.

× I, I usually listen both of the muses, but most of the time I listen and such music like, uh, when I feel him, it's very, very dream, while a dream like a wildest dream I listen is sad music, uh.

✓ I usually listen to both kinds of music, but most of the time I listen to sad music when I feel emotional; it feels dreamy, like a wild dream.

Errors: incorrect word choices (muses→music/kinds of music), missing preposition (listen to), redundant fillers and disordered sentence structure. Suggestion: Use clear noun phrases ('kinds of music'), include required prepositions after verbs ('listen to'), remove fillers, and reorder clauses for clarity ('most of the time... when I feel emotional').

× Yeah, yes, I agree. I most of the type I see very, very excited the one I listen in at happy muses. But even though however it was happy for me sometime I thought it was very uh annoying for me because many.

✓ Yes, I agree. Most of the time I feel very excited when I listen to happy music. However, sometimes even happy music can be annoying for me.

Errors: incorrect word order and forms ('I most of the type I see', 'listen in at'), missing prepositions ('listen to'), redundant connectors ('even though however'), and unclear ending. Suggestion: Use standard adverbial phrase order ('Most of the time I feel...'), correct verb-preposition collocation ('listen to'), and simple cohesive words ('however').

× Actually no I never been taken a music class because I have many classes to attend but and my main major is a CES so I didn't take the muses classes but when I have a free time I will be take the music class.

✓ Actually no, I have never taken a music class because I have many classes to attend and my major is CES, so I haven't taken music classes. When I have free time, I will take a music class.

Errors: incorrect tense ('never been taken' should be present perfect 'have never taken'), article and noun form ('a music class' ok but 'the muses classes' incorrect), extra conjunctions and future form ('will be take' incorrect). Suggestion: Use present perfect for life experiences ('have never taken'), keep noun phrases correct ('music classes'), and use simple future ('I will take').

× Yes, I am. I always listening music. Why I'm doing something like when I calculating the, when I solve in the mathematics I listen in the music and when I cleaning the house I listen to music. Hello.

✓ Yes, I am. I am always listening to music. When I am doing something, for example when I'm calculating or solving mathematics problems, I listen to music, and when I'm cleaning the house I listen to music.

Errors: incorrect verb forms ('I always listening' should be 'I am always listening' or 'I always listen'), missing prepositions ('listening to', 'listen to'), incorrect tense consistency ('when I calculating' should be 'when I'm calculating' or 'when I calculate'). Suggestion: Use correct continuous forms for ongoing actions ('I am always listening'), include required prepositions after 'listen', and keep verb forms consistent in time clauses ('when I'm doing X').