Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap daha düzenli ve net olmalı. Konuya doğrudan cevap verin, sonra bir neden veya kısa örnek ekleyin. Kelime bilgisi ve dilbilgisi hatalarını düzeltin (ör. "listen sad music" → "listen to sad music", "musics" → "music"). Gereksiz veya anlaşılmaz ifadeleri çıkarın. Cümle sayısını 2-4 arasında tutun ve bağlaçlarla akıcılık sağlayın (because, so, when).

例: I prefer different types of music depending on my mood. For example, when I feel sad I often listen to slow songs because their lyrics feel relatable; when I’m happy I usually choose upbeat pop songs to match my energy.

提案: Cevabınızı daha doğru gramerle ve daha kısa cümlelerle ifade edin. "Yes they are" gibi belirsiz zamirlerden kaçının; yerine "Yes, it does" veya "Yes, happy music does" kullanın. Aynı fikri tekrarlamaktan kaçının; bunun yerine bir neden veya kısa örnek verin. Bağlaçlarla mantıklı akış kurun (e.g. because, so).

例: Yes, happy music definitely makes me more excited because it has fast rhythms and positive lyrics. For instance, when I hear upbeat songs while exercising I feel more energized and motivated.

提案: Cevap daha düzgün zaman kullanımı ve kelime seçimi gerektirir. "making musics" yerine "making music" ve "couldn't kept it long" yerine "couldn't keep it for long" kullanın. Anlatımı düzenleyip net bir başlangıç cümlesi koyun, ardından kısa bir neden veya sonuç verin. Duygusal değerlendirmelerde aşırı abartıdan kaçının (e.g. "baddest").

例: I haven't studied music extensively, although I took a beginner guitar course when I was in fifth grade. Unfortunately, I couldn't continue the lessons for long because the COVID-19 pandemic forced the school to close.

提案: Cevap açık ve uygundur ama daha doğal ifadeler ve daha özlü yapı kullanılmalı. "I am" yerine "Yes, I do" deyin. Tekrarlayan ifadeleri azaltın ve daha spesifik örnekler verin (ne zaman, hangi tür müzik). Bağlaçlarla neden-sonuç ilişkisii kurun (because, so).

例: Yes, I often listen to music while travelling, especially on long car journeys. Listening to mellow or upbeat playlists helps me relax and makes the trip feel less boring.

× I think it depends on the mood that I'm in, because if I'm feeling sad, I would like to listen sad music because it's relatable, or if I'm happy, I would like to listen musics like The Tonight Next. Much lower. Yeah, you're gonna do it now. Late cake latest.

✓ I think it depends on the mood I'm in, because if I'm feeling sad, I would like to listen to sad music because it's relatable, or if I'm happy, I would like to listen to music like The Tonight Show.

Error type 8: The verbs 'listen' require the preposition 'to' when followed by an object (listen to music). Also 'musics' is incorrect pluralization; 'music' is uncountable. Replace awkward fragments ('Much lower. Yeah, you're gonna do it now. Late cake latest.') with a clear, relevant phrase. Suggestion: always use 'listen to' + uncountable 'music' and avoid unnecessary fragmented clauses.

× Yes they are. And if I'm actually feeling so good and if I start to listen music that makes me happy, I'm the happiest in the world and listening music always makes me feel like that. I can be understandable.

✓ Yes, it does. And if I'm actually feeling very good and I start to listen to music that makes me happy, I'm the happiest in the world and listening to music always makes me feel that way. I can be understanding.

Error type 27 and 8: 'music' is uncountable, so use 'listen to music' and 'listening to music'. The short answer to 'Does happy music make you feel more excited?' requires agreement with singular 'music' so 'Yes, it does.' 'Understandable' is an adjective describing something; the speaker likely means 'I can understand' or 'I can be understanding.' Suggestion: use 'that way' instead of 'like that' for clarity and ensure subject-verb agreement in short responses.

× I'm actually not good at making musics and just playing with rhythms. But once when I'm in fifth grade, I was going to a course, which is a guitar course, but I couldn't kept it long because the coronavirus came. So that's the baddest thing ever.

✓ I'm actually not good at making music and just playing with rhythms. But when I was in fifth grade, I took a guitar course, but I couldn't keep it up for long because the coronavirus came. So that was the worst thing ever.

Error type 5: Tense consistency—'once when I'm in fifth grade' should be past 'when I was in fifth grade'. 'Was going to a course' is awkward; use 'took a course'. 'Couldn't kept' mixes past modal with wrong verb form; correct is 'couldn't keep it up' (base form after modal). 'Baddest' is incorrect comparative; use 'worst'. Suggestion: maintain past tense for past events and use correct base verb after modal verbs.

× Yes, I am. Especially when I'm on a road. It makes me feel so good and it makes me feel comfortable and also it makes me feel on board because the long roads can be tough, they can be uncomfortable and boring.

✓ Yes, I do. Especially when I'm on the road. It makes me feel so good and comfortable, and it also makes me feel on board because long trips can be tough; they can be uncomfortable and boring.

Error type 8 and 11: The short answer to 'Do you listen to music while doing other things?' should be 'Yes, I do.' 'On a road' is incorrect; use 'on the road' or 'on a long trip.' 'It makes me feel comfortable' is sufficient—avoid repeating 'it makes me feel'. 'Long roads' is awkward in this context; 'long trips' fits better. Suggestion: use correct short answers with auxiliary 'do', use 'the road' or 'a trip' depending on context, and avoid repetitive phrasing.