Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và phát âm để câu trả lời rõ ràng hơn; dùng câu chủ đề ngắn gọn, tránh lặp từ, và nêu lý do cụ thể hơn. Ví dụ: chỉnh lỗi như “I am an energetic person” và “I prefer listening to happy music because it makes me feel upbeat while I work.” Thực hành nối ý bằng liên từ như 'because' hoặc 'so' và giới hạn câu dưới 5 câu.

例: I’m an energetic person, so I prefer listening to happy music because it makes me feel upbeat during the day and helps me focus while working.

提案: Rút gọn câu, sửa ngữ pháp và dùng liên từ hợp lý; tránh cụm từ mơ hồ như 'one of the part of the important thing'. Nên nêu rõ hiệu ứng và một ví dụ cụ thể. Ví dụ sửa thành “Yes, energetic music lifts my mood and boosts my energy, especially in the morning.”

例: Yes. Energetic music lifts my mood and boosts my energy, especially in the morning when I need motivation to start my work.

提案: Trả lời trực tiếp (Yes/No) rồi giải thích ngắn gọn, tránh lặp và tiếng ngập ngữ. Sửa cấu trúc thành “No, I haven’t taken classes, but I enjoy singing in my free time and singing along to my favourite artists.” Bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể như thể loại nhạc hoặc tần suất.

例: No, I haven’t taken any music classes, but I enjoy singing happy pop songs in my free time and often sing along to my favourite artists.

提案: Sửa ngữ pháp và dùng từ đúng (ví dụ 'while I'm working') và tránh nói lặp. Nên trả lời rõ tần suất và hoàn cảnh: 'Yes, I often listen to music while I work, usually upbeat tracks to keep me focused.' Đồng thời tránh lỗi như 'Mrs.' và nói rõ 'music'.

例: Yes, I often listen to music while I work; usually upbeat, energetic tracks that help me stay focused and motivated.

× I am energy energy person so I really want a king to listen to happy music because it's make me feel happy during the day, during working.

✓ I am an energetic person so I really like to listen to happy music because it makes me feel happy during the day and while working.

The sentence uses incorrect word forms and articles. 'energy energy person' should be 'an energetic person' (adjective form). 'want a king to listen' is incorrect; likely meant 'really like to listen' (verb choice). 'it's make' should be 'it makes' (subject-verb agreement). 'during working' is ungrammatical; use 'while working' or 'when working'. Suggestion: use the adjective 'energetic', include the indefinite article 'an' before a singular noun, use correct verb 'like to listen', ensure subject-verb agreement, and use 'while' for simultaneous actions.

× Yes, it's one of the part of the important thing I really keen to because the energetic music will make all my day really happy and it's a working and it working really good.

✓ Yes, it's one of the important things I am really keen on because energetic music makes my whole day really happy and it helps me work well.

Multiple issues: 'one of the part' should be 'one of the important things' (plural noun after 'one of'). 'I really keen to' requires a verb and preposition: 'I am really keen on'. 'will make all my day' is awkward; use 'makes my whole day' for habitual effect (present simple). 'it's a working and it working really good' is ungrammatical; intended meaning likely 'it helps me work well' (use verb 'help' and adverb 'well'). Suggestion: ensure correct noun number after 'one of', include the verb 'to be' and use 'keen on', use present simple for habitual effects, and use adverb 'well'.

× No, it just my favorite music was when I, when I have free time, I can sing or sing some uh, happy music and I can sing along with my uh, idol.

✓ No, it's just that my favorite music is the kind I sing when I have free time; I can sing some happy songs and sing along with my idol.

Errors: missing 'it's' or 'it's just that' to introduce the clause. 'my favorite music was when I, when I have free time' mixes tenses; use present simple 'is' and 'when I have free time'. 'sing some uh, happy music' should be 'sing some happy songs' (music countable here). Also 'sing along with my idol' is correct but sentence needs punctuation and connectors. Suggestion: use 'it's just that' to clarify, maintain present tense for habits, use 'songs' for countable items.

× I usually working, I usually listening to Mrs. while I'm working, uh, I sometimes listen to listen some bit energetic music.

✓ I usually work; I usually listen to music while I'm working. Sometimes I listen to slightly energetic music.

Problems: 'I usually working' lacks the auxiliary verb; use 'I usually work' or 'I am usually working' depending on meaning. 'I usually listening to Mrs.' is unclear and 'Mrs.' seems wrong; likely 'music'. 'I sometimes listen to listen some bit energetic music' has extra 'listen' and incorrect adjective order: 'a bit energetic' should be 'slightly energetic' or 'a bit energetic' with article 'a'. Suggestion: use correct verb forms ('work' or 'am working'), correct noun 'music', remove duplicate verbs, and use 'slightly' or 'a bit' before adjective.