Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện ngữ pháp cơ bản, trật tự từ và sử dụng câu chủ đề rõ ràng; tránh lặp từ và đưa thêm chi tiết cụ thể. Ví dụ cần sửa thì dùng thì đúng (I usually listen), dùng tính từ/phó từ phù hợp (depend on), và nối ý mạch lạc hơn (however, when).

例: I don't have a strong preference overall, but I usually listen to sad music when I'm feeling down because it helps me process my emotions. However, I prefer upbeat songs in social situations because they boost my energy and make people feel happier.

提案: Tăng tính chính xác ngữ pháp và sử dụng liên từ để nối ý (for example, when, so). Nên tóm tắt trực tiếp trước rồi giải thích bằng một hoặc hai câu hỗ trợ cụ thể. Tránh câu dài thiếu cấu trúc.

例: Yes, it often does. For example, when I'm nervous before a presentation, I play upbeat pop songs to calm my nerves and lift my mood, which helps me feel more confident and energetic.

提案: Sử dụng cấu trúc câu đơn giản, chính xác và rõ ý (I haven't taken any music classes). Hạn chế cụm từ lặp và sắp xếp từ đúng (I would love to take a music class in the future). Nên nêu rõ môn học hoặc nhạc cụ cụ thể bạn muốn học.

例: No, I haven't taken any formal music classes. In the future I would like to take piano lessons and a vocal course to improve my singing technique and learn to accompany myself.

提案: Rút gọn câu, tránh lặp từ và dùng đại từ đúng (music is). Nên nêu vài hoạt động cụ thể và cách nhạc giúp bạn (concentration, motivation). Kiểm soát giới hạn 3–4 câu tối đa.

例: Yes, I often listen to music while studying and commuting. For example, I play instrumental tracks to help me concentrate while doing homework, and upbeat songs when I'm exercising or socializing with friends.

× Honestly this is a tough question for me because it's dependable for me.

✓ Honestly, this is a tough question for me because it depends on the situation.

'Dependable' is an adjective meaning 'reliable' and is incorrect here; the speaker needs the verb phrase 'depends on' to show that the answer varies by situation. Use present tense 'depends' to match general truth. Suggestion: replace 'it's dependable for me' with 'it depends on the situation'.

× I usually listening to sad music.

✓ I usually listen to sad music.

The verb 'listening' (present participle) is incorrect after 'usually' which requires the base verb with simple present tense for habitual actions. Change to 'listen' for correct subject-verb form and tense.

× When I feel bad, I feel upset.

✓ When I feel bad, I get upset.

Using 'get upset' is more natural to describe becoming upset. 'Feel upset' is grammatically possible but repetitive following 'feel bad'; replacing with 'get' improves clarity and variety. Maintain present tense for habitual reactions.

× I will play those music to heal my sounds, boost my energy and happy music in other situations.

✓ I will play that music to soothe my mood, boost my energy, and play happy music in other situations.

'Music' is uncountable, so 'those music' is incorrect; use 'that music' or simply 'music'. 'Heal my sounds' is incorrect collocation — use 'soothe my mood' or 'cheer me up'. Also sentence mixed forms; make parallel verbs: 'play', 'boost', 'play'. Maintain future intention using 'will' if desired, or present for habitual. Suggestion: 'I play that music to soothe my mood, boost my energy, and play happy music in other situations.'

× I would say yes it does in some situation like when I'm nervous for something or I feel confused, I will listen to happy music to calm me down and also make me feel more excited as you say.

✓ I would say yes, it does in some situations. For example, when I'm nervous or confused, I listen to happy music to calm myself and to make me feel more excited.

Several issues: 'situation' should be plural 'situations' for general cases. Use comma after intro phrase. 'Nervous for something' is awkward — use 'nervous' or 'nervous about something'. 'I will listen' is inconsistent with habitual reference; use simple present 'I listen'. 'Calm me down' should be reflexive 'calm myself'. Maintain parallel structure 'calm myself and make me feel' -> better 'calm myself and make me feel more excited.'

× As far as I can remember I haven't been through any music courses, but in the future I love to be to find myself in a music class where I can learn to play instruments and also can improve my vocals, my singing skills.

✓ As far as I can remember, I haven't taken any music courses, but in the future I would love to find myself in a music class where I can learn to play instruments and improve my vocals and singing skills.

'Haven't been through' is awkward; use 'haven't taken' for courses. Missing comma after introductory phrase. 'I love to be to find myself' is ungrammatical; use 'I would love to find myself' or 'I would love to be in a music class'. Use conditional 'would love' for future desire. 'Also can improve' should be 'and improve' for parallelism.

× This is a great question as I listen, I always listen to music when I do everything during my school times, when I'm learning, when I'm playing with others, or even when I'm working in my gap time.

✓ That's a great question. I always listen to music during school: when I'm studying, when I'm playing with others, or even during my free time.

Avoid redundant 'as I listen, I always listen'. 'During my school times' is unnatural; use 'during school' or 'at school'. 'When I'm learning' -> 'when I'm studying'. 'Working in my gap time' -> 'during my free time'. Break into clearer sentences and use present continuous or simple present for routines.

× I always prefer listening to music because they're so cool.

✓ I always prefer listening to music because it is so cool.

'Music' is an uncountable noun and takes singular pronoun 'it', not 'they'. Alternatively, use plural 'songs' with 'they'. Also 'prefer listening to music' is fine; keep consistent pronoun agreement.