Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Говорите более уверенно и естественно, сокращая паузы и повторения. Начните с прямого топик‑предложения, затем добавьте одно‑два конкретных пояснения. Избегайте ошибок в словах (например, «momently» неверно) и старайтесь использовать подходящую лексику: «cheerful», «uplifted», «drained». Также следите за количеством предложений (не более 4–5).

例: I prefer happy music because it makes me feel cheerful and energized. For example, upbeat pop songs help me relax after a long day and improve my mood. I rarely listen to sad music because it leaves me feeling drained rather than comforted.

提案: Уменьшите заполнители («umm», «uh») и повторения; стройте одно связное предложение с объяснением и примером. Используйте связки («so», «for example», «when») для логичности. Добавляйте конкретику о том, какие песни и почему поднимают настроение.

例: Yes, definitely. Happy music lifts my mood and makes me feel more energetic. For example, when I feel down, I play upbeat pop tracks because their lively rhythm and positive lyrics help me think more positively and feel motivated.

提案: Стройте ответ ясно: сначала краткий факт, затем причина и, если нужно, краткий пример. Исправьте грамматику: «musical school» → «a music school», «for improving» → «to improve», «teachers for not the best» → «the teachers weren’t very good». Избегайте двойных отрицаний и разорванных фраз.

例: Yes, I attended a music school as a child to improve my singing. However, I didn’t enjoy the lessons because the teachers weren’t very encouraging, so I eventually stopped going.

提案: Сформулируйте более чётко: начните с «Yes» или «No», затем конкретизируйте виды деятельности и как музыка помогает. Избегайте путаницы и опечаток («my best musicians», «go to the wolf»). Используйте словосочетания «listen to music while...», «I usually play...».

例: Yes, I often listen to music while exercising or walking. I usually play my favourite artists on my phone because upbeat songs motivate me during workouts and make walks more enjoyable.

× I'm not interested in sad music as it makes me feel exhausted momently.

✓ I'm not interested in sad music because it makes me feel exhausted momentarily.

The adverb 'momentarily' (or 'momentarily' intended) was misspelled as 'momently' and the conjunction 'as' is less clear than 'because' in this context; place the adverb correctly after the verb or at the end of the clause. Use 'momentarily' to mean 'for a short time' or 'exhausted for a short while' and spell it correctly.

× It makes me more excited and umm, it lifts my mood, lifts up my mood.

✓ It makes me more excited and lifts my mood.

Redundant phrasing 'lifts my mood, lifts up my mood' should be reduced to a single verb phrase; 'lifts' is the correct present tense verb and no present participle change is needed. Avoid repetition for clarity.

× I uh, feel. Usually when I feel down in the dumps, I turn on my favorite, uh, songs and feel happier.

✓ Usually when I feel down in the dumps, I turn on my favorite songs and feel happier.

The isolated fragment 'I uh, feel.' is incomplete and disrupts sentence flow. Combine clauses into one complete sentence and remove filler words for grammatical correctness and fluency.

× Uh, when I was a child, I used to visit my musical school for improving my vocal skills, but uh, it didn't, I didn't feel well during the classes as my teachers for not the best.

✓ When I was a child, I used to attend my music school to improve my vocal skills, but I didn't enjoy the classes because my teachers were not the best.

Use 'attend' instead of 'visit' for regular classes, and 'to improve' (infinitive) instead of 'for improving'. The clause 'it didn't, I didn't feel well' is redundant—use 'I didn't enjoy'. 'My teachers for not the best' is ungrammatical; use the past tense copula 'were' and the adjective phrase 'not the best'.

× The best thing I do, uh, listening to music is walking.

✓ The best thing I do while listening to music is walking.

Use the preposition 'while' to indicate simultaneous actions ('while listening to music'). The original order was incorrect; place the prepositional phrase before the main clause for clarity.

× Usually when I have to do exercises or go for a walk, I turn on my music, music, my best musicians and go to the wolf.

✓ Usually when I exercise or go for a walk, I turn on my favourite music and go for a walk.

The original sentence contains repetition ('music, music'), unclear phrase 'my best musicians', and the nonsensical 'go to the wolf'. Replace with clear vocabulary: 'favourite music' (or 'favorite music') and 'go for a walk'. Keep verbs consistent ('exercise' instead of 'have to do exercises') and remove redundancies.