Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap daha doğrudan ve detaylı olmalı. Kısa yanıt yerine tercihini net söyle ve nedenini ekle. Bağlaçlar veya örneklerle cevabı zenginleştir. Maksimum 3-4 cümle kullan.

例: I usually prefer happy music because it lifts my mood and helps me focus. For example, upbeat songs give me energy when I exercise or work on creative tasks. However, sometimes I choose sad music when I want to relax and reflect.

提案: Cevap iyi ancak gereksiz dolgu kelimelerden (umm, yeah) kaçın ve daha spesifik örnekler ver. Bağlaçlarla neden-sonuç ilişkisi kur (örneğin "because"), ayrıca kısa bir ayrıntı ekle (ne tür müzik, hangi durumlarda).

例: Yes, absolutely, happy music makes me feel more excited because of its fast tempo and lively rhythm. For instance, when I practise drums I often play upbeat rock or pop to boost my energy and concentration.

提案: Cevap detaylı ve ilgili fakat cümleleri daha akıcı bağlaçlarla birleştir ve gereksiz tekrarları çıkar. Zaman ifadelerini düzelt ("for six years"). Örnek veya kısa anlatım ekle: hangi seviyede veya ne öğrendiğini belirt.

例: Yes. I tried piano and electric guitar and experimented with beat-making, but I have been playing drums for six years and I love it. Over the years I have learned various rhythms and played in a small band, which improved my timing and coordination.

提案: Cevap net fakat dilbilgisi ve akıcılık geliştirilmeli. "It depends on what I'm doing" şeklinde ifade et ve bağlaçlarla seçenekleri net ayır. Cümleleri kısaltarak daha doğal yap. Bir örnek ekle (hangi tür müzik hangi etkinlikte).

例: Yes, it depends on the activity. I usually avoid music when I'm studying or doing focused work because it distracts me, but I listen to upbeat pop or indie while doing chores like washing dishes to make them more enjoyable.

× I listen happy music.

✓ I listen to happy music.

Incorrect use of verb + -ing form: the verb 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' when followed by an object. Use 'listen to' + noun. Suggestion: say 'I listen to happy music.' to be grammatically correct.

× I tried beat making a little bit of time,

✓ I tried beat-making for a little while,

Incorrect form: 'beat making' should be hyphenated as 'beat-making' when used as a noun, and the time expression should be 'for a little while' not 'a little bit of time'. Suggestion: use 'I tried beat-making for a little while.'

× finally. I'm playing drums right now for six years and I love it.

✓ Finally, I've been playing the drums for six years and I love it.

Tense and aspect error: 'I'm playing drums right now for six years' mixes present continuous with a duration; English uses present perfect continuous for actions continuing from past to present. Also add the definite article before 'drums'. Suggestion: 'I've been playing the drums for six years.'

× Yes I do, but it depends that which things I'm doing.

✓ Yes I do, but it depends on what I'm doing.

Incorrect preposition and relative word: use 'depends on' not 'depends that', and 'what' is the correct word instead of 'which things' in this context. Suggestion: 'It depends on what I'm doing.'

× If I'm working or studying I do not listen music,

✓ If I'm working or studying I do not listen to music,

Verb + preposition: 'listen' requires 'to' when followed by a noun. Suggestion: 'I do not listen to music.'

× but if I'm washing dishes I can play, I can listen music.

✓ but if I'm washing the dishes I can play and listen to music.

Article and verb+preposition issues: use 'the dishes' or just 'washing up', and connect actions with 'and' instead of repeating 'I can'. Also 'listen' needs 'to'. Suggestion: 'If I'm washing the dishes I can play and listen to music.'