Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 句子要更自然、语法要正确，并避免重复。可把主旨句放在开头，随后用一两句具体原因支持。注意动词形式（makes me feel / makes my mood）和避免多余词汇。可使用连接词如 because / so 来衔接理由。

例: I prefer happy music because it lifts my mood and makes me feel energetic. For example, upbeat songs with strong rhythms help me relax and are perfect for parties, so I often choose them when I want to cheer up.

提案: 回答要简洁并避免重复，先给出直接回答，然后用一两条具体原因支持。注意句子连贯性，可用 linking words 如 because / since / as to explain。描述更具体（e.g., rhythm, tempo, melody）。

例: Yes, it does. Happy music usually has a faster tempo and strong, catchy rhythms, so it makes me feel more energetic and motivated when I listen to it.

提案: 注意时态和语法，去掉重复并补充具体信息以丰富答案（比如上过哪些乐器课、学多长时间或学到什么）。使用连接词如 since / when 来说明时间起点。

例: Yes, I have. I started taking music classes in primary school when my teacher introduced us to singing and basic instruments, and I continued with piano lessons for several years.

提案: 回答要结构清晰，先直接回答，再列举一两个具体场景作为支持。避免重复短语（I like, I like）并用连接词如 when / while / for example 提高连贯性。

例: Yes, I often listen to music while doing other things. For example, I play music when I hang out with friends and when I clean the house, because it makes these activities more enjoyable.

× I prefer happy music because happy music makes me feel excited and make me mood more more relaxed and it is easy for us to to take a party.

✓ I prefer happy music because happy music makes me feel excited and makes my mood more relaxed, and it is easy for us to enjoy a party.

句中存在形容词/副词和动词形式使用错误：原句使用“make me mood more more relaxed”不符合英语表达，正确应为“makes my mood more relaxed”或更自然地“cheers me up”。此外主语“happy music”是单数，动词需用第三人称单数“makes”，而原句第二处用“make”错误；重复词“more more”和重复“to”也需删除。建议掌握形容词/副词修饰名词和动词的一般规则，注意主语与动词的一致性，并避免重复词。

× Yes, happy music makes me feel more excited because happy music because it flows and beats are more exciting.

✓ Yes, happy music makes me feel more excited because its melody and beats are more exciting.

原句存在结构和代词使用问题：应避免重复“because happy music because”，并且用代词或更合适的名词短语替代“it flows and beats”；“it flows and beats are”主谓不一致。正确表达可为“its melody and beats are more exciting”。建议学习用代词或名词短语避免重复，并保持主谓一致。

× Yes, I have taken many music classes since since my primary school teacher teach us about this.

✓ Yes, I have taken many music classes since my primary school teacher taught us about this.

使用现在完成时表示从过去到现在的经历时，从句中需用过去时；原句中“since my primary school teacher teach us”应为过去式“taught”。此外去掉重复的“since”。建议掌握 since 引导的时间状语从句通常用过去时表示过去发生的动作。

× Yes, I do listen to music while doing something when I hang out with my friends. So I clean my house. I like, I like listen to music.

✓ Yes, I do listen to music while doing other things or when I hang out with my friends. For example, I clean my house. I like listening to music.

原句时态和动名词使用不当：短语“doing something”不自然，应为“doing other things”；“I like, I like listen to music”动词应为动名词形式“listening”。建议学习动词后接动名词的用法（like + doing），并使用更自然的短语表达。