Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more concise and natural: start with a direct topic sentence, then give one specific reason and an example. Reduce small grammar errors and avoid unnecessary words.

例: I prefer happy music. It lifts my mood when I'm stressed, so I usually listen to upbeat pop or acoustic songs to relax and think more clearly.

提案: Combine fragmented ideas into full sentences, correct grammar (verb forms, sentence flow), and use a linking phrase to connect cause and effect. Keep it to 2–3 clear sentences.

例: Yes, upbeat music makes me feel more energetic and motivated. For example, when I listen to lively songs while studying, I feel more productive and can work faster.

提案: This answer is mostly good — ensure smoother linking and slightly more detail about what you want to improve. Use one linking word and be specific about goals.

例: I haven't taken formal music classes, but I play the piano as a hobby. This summer I plan to join a piano course to improve my technique and learn music theory.

提案: Fix unclear vocabulary and grammar, use appropriate linking words, and give a specific example of the kind of music and one clear benefit. Avoid repetition and sentence fragments.

例: Yes, I often listen to cheerful or instrumental music while studying or doing chores. It helps me concentrate and makes routine tasks feel less boring, so I can finish them more quickly.

× I prefer happy music because music does affect my feeling.

✓ I prefer happy music because music does affect my feelings.

The noun 'feeling' should be plural 'feelings' when referring to general emotional states. Use 'feelings' to indicate overall emotions rather than a single feeling.

× So that whenever I feel stressed, I will choose some cheerful songs to uplift my mood.

✓ So whenever I feel stressed, I choose cheerful songs to uplift my mood.

The use of 'will' is unnecessary for habitual actions. For routines or habits, use the simple present tense ('I choose') instead of 'will choose'. Also remove 'that' after 'So' for natural phrasing.

× Yes, it does. A lot like whenever I listen to.

✓ Yes, it does. A lot of the time, whenever I listen to music,

The original is a sentence fragment ('whenever I listen to' lacks an object) and awkward phrase 'A lot like'. Change to 'A lot of the time' and complete the clause with 'music' to form a full sentence.

× An upbeat song I will feel, really. Activated and productive, which helped me, uh, finish.

✓ When I listen to an upbeat song, I really feel activated and productive, which helps me finish

Word order is incorrect; 'An upbeat song I will feel' is ungrammatical. Use subordinating clause 'When I listen to an upbeat song' and present tense 'helps' for general truth. 'Activated' is acceptable but more natural with 'energized'; however corrected to maintain original wording. Remove filler pauses and ensure clause flows into the next part.

× I works faster.

✓ I work faster.

Subject 'I' requires the base form 'work', not the third-person singular 'works'. Use 'work' for correct subject-verb agreement.

× I haven't taken any music classes, but I really like playing the piano.

✓ I haven't taken any music classes, but I really like playing the piano.

No grammatical change needed; sentence correctly uses present perfect 'haven't taken' and present simple 'like' to express current preference. Included here to confirm tense usage is correct.

× Therefore, this summer I am planning to sign up a piano class in order to improve my piano skills.

✓ Therefore, this summer I am planning to sign up for a piano class in order to improve my piano skills.

The verb 'sign up' normally requires the preposition 'for' when followed by a noun ('sign up for a class'). Added 'for' to correct the prepositional usage.

× Yes I do I always choose some chefs songs to listen when I am studying or when I am doing boring housework and it helps me be more concentrate and help me finish my. Works faster.

✓ Yes I do. I always choose cheerful songs to listen to when I am studying or doing boring housework, and they help me concentrate and finish my work faster.

Multiple errors fixed: punctuation added for clarity. 'chefs songs' is likely a typo for 'cheerful songs'. Use 'listen to' (preposition 'to' required). 'Be more concentrate' should be 'concentrate' (verb) or 'more concentrated' (adjective); here use 'concentrate'. 'help me finish my. Works' was fragmented—change to 'finish my work faster'. Also agree the plural subject 'they' for 'songs' and ensure verbs match.