Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và lựa chọn từ chính xác; trả lời trực tiếp hơn, tránh lỗi như 'refer' nên là 'prefer', và sửa cấu trúc để câu ngắn gọn hơn. Thêm các liên từ khi mở rộng ý (for example, because) và giới thiệu chi tiết cụ thể hơn về thể loại hoặc bài hát. Hạn chế độ dài tổng cộng không quá 5 câu.

例: I prefer happy music because it lifts my mood and helps me relax after a stressful day. For example, I often play upbeat K-pop songs like BTS or TWICE when I'm hanging out with friends or studying together.

提案: Sửa ngữ pháp và cách diễn đạt không tự nhiên ('leaves my mood' không đúng; 'recognize' cần trong quá khứ 'recognized' hoặc 'states'). Tránh thông tin mơ hồ ('there was once an article') — nếu nhắc đến nguồn, nêu ngắn gọn nội dung. Dùng liên từ để liên kết lý do và ví dụ. Giữ tối đa 5 câu.

例: Yes, happy music definitely makes me feel more excited because its upbeat tempo boosts my energy. For instance, I often play lively K-pop tracks when I'm with friends to lift everyone's spirits, and studies have shown music can improve mood.

提案: Cải thiện thời thì và diễn đạt mạch lạc hơn; dùng cụm từ tự nhiên như 'didn't have much money at the time' và thêm chi tiết về loại lớp muốn tham gia. Thêm liên từ để nối ý về quá khứ và kế hoạch tương lai. Giữ câu ngắn gọn và rõ ràng.

例: No, I have never taken any music classes. I really enjoy music but I didn't have much money at the time, so I couldn't afford lessons. If I get the chance in the future, I would like to take singing or guitar classes.

提案: Sửa lỗi đánh máy và cấu trúc ('a tidy' -> 'I tidy'; 'boring text' không phù hợp, dùng 'tasks'). Hợp nhất câu lặp 'I usually listen...' và đưa ví dụ cụ thể hơn. Sử dụng liên từ để diễn đạt kết quả rõ ràng.

例: Yes, quite often. I usually listen to music while doing chores, such as tidying my room or cooking, because it helps me relax and lifts my mood. It also makes tedious tasks like cleaning much more enjoyable.

× I definitely refer happy music because it always puts me in a good mood and relax after a stressful day.

✓ I definitely prefer happy music because it always puts me in a good mood and helps me relax after a stressful day.

The student used 'refer' instead of 'prefer' (wrong verb choice). Also 'relax' needs an auxiliary verb 'helps me relax' to be grammatically correct. Use verbs that match meaning and add an appropriate verb phrase: 'prefer' means to like more; 'helps me relax' expresses causation. Suggestion: learn common collocations such as 'prefer X' and 'help someone do something'. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× For example, I often play some K pop songs when I hang out with friends or when we are studying together.

✓ For example, I often play some K-pop songs when I hang out with friends or when we are studying together.

Missing hyphen in 'K-pop' is a standard spelling convention; no article errors here but spacing was off. Use correct form 'K-pop' and keep plural 'songs' to match 'some'. Suggestion: follow standard spelling of compound proper nouns like 'K-pop'. Grammar problem type ID: 22

× Absolutely happy music always leaves my mood and gives me more energy.

✓ Absolutely, happy music always lifts my mood and gives me more energy.

The phrase 'leaves my mood' is incorrect; correct collocation is 'lifts my mood' meaning to make one feel better. Also add a comma after 'Absolutely' as an interjection. Suggestion: study common collocations for mood verbs (lift/lifted, boost, improve). Grammar problem type ID: 13

× In fact, there was once an article that recognize that music is a healing remedy.

✓ In fact, I once read an article that recognized that music is a healing remedy.

'There was once an article that recognize' is unnatural and has tense/subject-verb agreement errors: 'recognize' should be past 'recognized' to match 'read'/'was' context. Better phrasing is 'I once read an article that recognized...' Use past tense for a past event. Suggestion: ensure verbs agree in tense and use natural subjects ('I read an article'). Grammar problem type ID: 5

× For example, I often play a bit K pop songs when I'm with friends to boost everyone's spirit.

✓ For example, I often play a bit of K-pop songs when I'm with friends to boost everyone's spirits.

Missing 'of' after 'a bit' ('a bit of'), hyphenation 'K-pop', and 'spirit' should be plural 'spirits' when referring to multiple people. Suggestion: remember fixed expressions like 'a bit of something' and match singular/plural when referring to a group. Grammar problem type ID: 1

× No, I have never taken any music classes.

✓ No, I have never taken any music classes.

This sentence is correct. No changes needed. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× Honestly I really like music but I didn't have much money in times so I didn't get the chance.

✓ Honestly, I really like music, but I didn't have much money at the time so I didn't get the chance.

Use 'at the time' to refer to a specific past period; add commas for clarity. 'In times' is incorrect. Suggestion: use time expressions correctly: 'at the time' for a past situation. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× In the future if I have the chance, I will try.

✓ In the future, if I have the chance, I will try.

Add comma after 'In the future' for clarity; otherwise sentence is acceptable and future tense 'will try' suits the context. Suggestion: include commas to separate introductory phrases. Grammar problem type ID: 7

× Yes, quite often. I usually listen to music while doing other things.

✓ Yes, quite often. I usually listen to music while doing other things.

Sentence is correct and natural; no grammatical changes required. 'Quite often' and 'usually' are slightly redundant but acceptable in speech. Suggestion: choose one adverb for conciseness. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× For example I often play songs when a tidy my room or cook because it helps me relax and lift my mood.

✓ For example, I often play songs when I tidy my room or cook because it helps me relax and lifts my mood.

Remove the extra 'a' before 'tidy'. Add comma after 'For example'. Subject 'it' refers to music, so the verb should be 'lifts' (third person singular). Suggestion: proofread for stray words and ensure subject-verb agreement. Grammar problem type ID: 2

× It also makes a boring text like cleaning much more enjoyable.

✓ It also makes a boring task like cleaning much more enjoyable.

'Text' is incorrect word choice; 'task' fits the meaning. 'A boring task' is the correct noun phrase. Suggestion: choose appropriate nouns for context (cleaning is a task, not a text). Grammar problem type ID: 13