Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời cần ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và tránh lặp từ. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trực tiếp, sau đó nêu 1-2 lý do cụ thể với liên từ phù hợp. Tránh lặp lại cùng một ý (ví dụ “I prefer happy music” lặp nhiều lần) và dùng từ vựng phong phú hơn (ví dụ: uplifting, cheerful).

例: I prefer happy music because it lifts my mood and helps me feel more energetic. For example, upbeat pop songs make me want to move and put me in a better frame of mind.

提案: Cần trả lời trực tiếp rồi giải thích rõ ràng bằng cấu trúc mạch lạc. Sử dụng liên từ để nối ý (because, so, for example) và chọn từ phù hợp (excited, happy, cheerful) thay vì 'fun' để mô tả cảm xúc. Tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như thì hoặc trật tự từ.

例: Yes, it does, because upbeat songs increase my energy and make me want to move. For example, when I listen to fast-tempo tracks I feel more alert and motivated.

提案: Câu trả lời hiện tại có vấn đề ngữ pháp và không rõ ràng. Nên trả lời trực tiếp (Yes/No), nêu loại lớp học, khoảng thời gian và cảm nhận ngắn gọn. Tránh từ thừa như 'so' nếu không cần và sửa cấu trúc bị động sai (have been taken).

例: Yes, I have. I took piano lessons for three years when I was a child, and I enjoyed them because they improved my concentration and musical sense.

提案: Câu trả lời cần dùng thì phù hợp và cấu trúc rõ ràng: nói khi nào bạn nghe nhạc và mục đích. Tránh dùng thì quá khứ khi nói thói quen hiện tại. Thêm chi tiết cụ thể (loại nhạc, hoạt động) sẽ tốt hơn.

例: Yes, I often listen to music while doing homework because it helps me concentrate. I also sometimes listen to calming music or podcasts before sleep to relax.

× I prefer happy music because I don't like that music because it's so sad and negative.

✓ I prefer happy music because I don't like sad music; it's too negative.

The sentence repeats 'because' and uses 'that music' awkwardly. Replace 'that music' with 'sad music' and use a semicolon or conjunction to avoid repetition. Also use 'too negative' instead of 'so sad and negative' for natural phrasing.

× I prefer happy music because it's fun.

✓ I prefer happy music because it is fun.

Contraction 'it's' is acceptable in speech, but for clarity in a test answer write 'it is'. No grammatical error beyond register; this change makes it slightly more formal.

× Yes, I know because when I listen then to music I feel more excited and fun.

✓ Yes, because when I listen to music I feel more excited and happy.

The adverb 'then' is misplaced and unnecessary. 'Listen to music' is the correct verb-object order. 'Fun' is an adjective describing things, but to describe feelings use 'happy'. Change 'feel more excited and fun' to 'feel more excited and happy'.

× So yes, I have been taken to move Seek classes is a piano class.

✓ Yes, I have taken music classes; one was a piano class.

The original mixes incorrect verb forms 'have been taken' and garbled words 'move Seek'. Use present perfect 'have taken' to indicate experience up to now. Rephrase for clarity: 'one was a piano class.'

× Uh, I'm feel very good.

✓ I feel very good.

The auxiliary 'am' is incorrectly combined with the base verb 'feel'. Use either 'I'm feeling very good' (present continuous) or 'I feel very good' (simple present). 'I feel very good' is most natural here.

× Yes, I know, I listen to music while I was through in my homework or listen to audio while I was sleep.

✓ Yes, I listen to music while I do my homework or listen to audio while I sleep.

Tense mismatch: 'while I was' is past, but the action is habitual so use present simple 'I do' and 'I sleep'. Also use 'listen to audio' consistently. Replace 'through in my homework' with 'do my homework'.