Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 句子需更自然、语法须改正并保持简洁。回答要先直接表明偏好（主题句），然后用一两句具体理由和例子支持。注意时态和动词形式（e.g. 'I enjoy happy music' 而不是 'I enjoy more happy music'；'I usually listen to music'）。可以使用连词如 'because' 或 'so' 来衔接原因。

例: I prefer happy music because it lifts my mood. For example, I often listen to energetic songs with strong beats when I work out, which makes me feel more motivated and cheerful.

提案: 回答结构要更直接，先肯定或否定，然后给出具体原因或场景。修正语法（'I think so' 或 'It does'；'when I listen' 而非 'listening'）。避免多余短语如 'If I think so'。可用连接词 like 'because' 或 'when' 来组织句子。

例: Yes, it does make me feel more excited because upbeat rhythms and energetic lyrics boost my energy. For instance, when I hear a fast-paced song at the gym, I immediately feel more pumped and focused.

提案: 回答应更连贯并完成句子。先直接回答（Yes/No），然后补充具体信息：什么时候、什么课、学到了什么。修正语法和词序（'When I was a freshman at college'；'I took a vocal class'；描述教授时应完整表达 'the professor was Korean and very interesting'）。避免碎片化句子。

例: Yes, I did. When I was a freshman at college I took a vocal class. The professor was Korean and very interesting, and I learned basic singing techniques and stage confidence from that course.

提案: 先直接回答（e.g. 'Yes, I often do'），然后给出具体场景和原因。修正语法（'I almost always listen to music while I work out'；'my favourite music' 或 'the music I like'）。使理由更具体并用连接词（because/so）联系。避免模糊表达如 'deeply stimulate my mind'，可改为 'help me concentrate or feel motivated'。

例: Yes, I often listen to music while working out because my favourite energetic songs help me concentrate and stay motivated. For example, upbeat tracks make my exercises feel easier and more enjoyable.

× I enjoy more happy music.

✓ I enjoy happier music.

句子中想表达“更快乐的音乐”，应使用形容词比较级“happier”修饰名词“music”。原句“I enjoy more happy music”中使用“more happy”不符合常见比较级结构，建议使用“happier”。（简体中文：比较级用法错误，应使用形容词的比较级形式）

× I usually listening music with strong beats when I'm working out.

✓ I usually listen to music with strong beats when I'm working out.

动词“listen”在一般现在时应使用原形或第三人称单数形式（depend on subject）。主语是“I”，因此应用一般现在时的原形“listen”，并且“listen”后需接介词“to”搭配名词“music”。（简体中文：动词-ing形式使用错误，需用一般现在时并加介词“to”）

× It is uplifting and really cheer me up.

✓ It is uplifting and really cheers me up.

主语“It”为第三人称单数，谓语动词应作第三人称单数变化“cheers”。原句缺少主谓一致，导致动词形式错误。（简体中文：主语为第三人称单数，谓语需加-s）

× If I think so when I listening to some music with strong beats or energetic lyrics, it really makes me feel excited.

✓ If I think so when I listen to some music with strong beats or energetic lyrics, it really makes me feel excited.

同样主语“I”应使用一般现在时动词原形“listen”，不应用进行时“listening”。条件句中习惯性动作用一般现在时。 （简体中文：习惯性动作应用一般现在时，不能用动名词）

× Well, it's been a long time. When I was a freshman in the college, I used to have the vocal music class.

✓ Well, it's been a long time. When I was a freshman in college, I used to take a vocal music class.

短语“in the college”通常说成“in college”表示处于大学阶段；动词“have the class”在英语中更常用“take a class”来表示上课；“vocal music class”前加不定冠词“a”。（简体中文：固定搭配和冠词用法：说“in college”“take a class”，并在单数可数名词前加冠词）

× The professor is very interesting, Korean and I like to.

✓ The professor was very interesting and Korean, and I liked him.

句子有多处问题：时态与前句保持一致用过去时“was”；“interesting”用于描述人是可以，但后半句结构不完整，需明确宾语和动词。将“I like to”改为“I liked him”或“I enjoyed his class”。此外中文要求只改符合类型的问题——此处涉及时态、句子结构与代词使用，主要归为第三人称单数/时态问题。 （简体中文：句子结构不完整且时态不一致，需用过去时并补全宾语）

× I almost totally listening to music while I'm working out because I think the music that I favorite can deeply stimulate my mind.

✓ I almost always listen to music while I'm working out because I think the music that I favor can deeply stimulate my mind.

主语“I”应使用一般现在时“listen”，不能用现在分词“listening”；“almost totally”搭配不自然，应改为“almost always”表示“几乎总是”；“favorite”作形容词，但在从句里用作动词应改为“favor”或改写为“my favorite music”。同时保持与主句时态一致。 （简体中文：动词形式错误，副词搭配不当，词性使用不当；建议用“almost always listen”及“favor”或改为“my favorite music”）