Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more grammatical and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms and remove repetition. Focus on why you like happy music and give one concrete example.

例: I prefer happy music because it lifts my mood and helps me relax. For example, when I work out or clean my room, upbeat songs boost my energy and keep me positive.

提案: Answer directly and avoid fragmented sentences. Use correct verb agreement and clearer connectors (because, so). Give one specific effect and one brief example of what you do when you feel low.

例: Yes, happy music definitely makes me feel more excited because of its upbeat rhythm and positive lyrics. So when I feel low, I often sing along or dance to lift my spirits.

提案: Use correct tense and more natural phrasing. Give a brief reason or example of how you learn from online resources and what you have learned specifically.

例: No, I haven't taken formal music classes, but I learn a lot from YouTube. For instance, I follow tutorial videos to improve my singing technique and learn simple guitar chords.

提案: Make the response concise and correct grammar. Use linking words (for example, so) and one clear specific benefit of listening to music while multitasking.

例: Yes, I often listen to music while working out or cleaning my room. For example, listening to energetic playlists boosts my energy, so I can work more efficiently.

× I love to listen happy music because it's a bit of uplifting music really helps to to me relax and gives positivity.

✓ I love listening to happy music because a bit of uplifting music really helps me relax and gives me positivity.

Use the gerund after 'love' for activities (love listening). Also 'listen to' requires 'to'. Remove duplicate 'to'. Use 'helps me relax' (object pronoun after help) and add 'me' before 'positivity' for clarity.

× Whenever I used to do workout, whenever I used to do room clean, I used to listen.

✓ Whenever I worked out or cleaned my room, I would listen.

Avoid overusing 'used to' in the same clause; 'used to' indicates past habit but combining with actions is clearer with 'worked out'/'cleaned my room' and 'would listen' to show habitual past. Use proper verbs: 'work out' and 'clean my room'.

× Yes, of course, happy music make me feel more excited, more energetic due to the it's upbeat, it's vibes, it's lyrical music.

✓ Yes, of course, happy music makes me feel more excited and more energetic because it's upbeat, has good vibes, and has lyrical music.

Subject 'happy music' is singular, so use 'makes'. 'Due to' should be followed by a noun phrase; 'because' fits here. Use verbs correctly: 'has good vibes' and repeat 'has' rather than 'it's vibes' which is ungrammatical.

× It really helps to me be more comfortable.

✓ It really helps me to be more comfortable.

Do not insert 'to' before the indirect object 'me'. Correct structure is 'helps me (to) do something'; 'to' is optional after 'helps'.

× Whenever I feel low. I used to see, I used to sing.

✓ Whenever I feel low, I sing or I hum to cheer myself up.

Fragment: 'Whenever I feel low.' should not be a sentence on its own. 'Used to' suggests past habit; if referring to present, use simple present 'I sing'. Provide a fluent cohesive sentence and clarify the action.

× So far I haven't take any formal musical class about music, but I used to learn from YouTube from listening music of other musician edition.

✓ So far I haven't taken any formal music classes, but I have learned from YouTube by listening to other musicians.

Use past participle 'taken' after 'haven't'. 'Class' should be plural 'classes' or 'a class'; 'learned from YouTube' uses present perfect if continuing to now: 'have learned'. Use 'listening to' and 'musicians' plural.

× I I always listen the music while I'm doing workout when I'm doing room clean and other normal work it really boost my energy and I used to perform more effective way.

✓ I always listen to music while I'm working out, cleaning my room, or doing other routine tasks; it really boosts my energy and helps me perform more effectively.

Use 'listen to' not 'listen the'. Use gerunds 'working out', 'cleaning my room'. 'Other normal work' is better as 'other routine tasks'. Subject-verb agreement: 'it boosts'. Use 'perform more effectively' for correct adverb form. Remove repeated 'I'.