Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with a linking phrase. Correct small grammar errors (e.g., "listen to sad music") and remove filler phrases like "that's it."

例: I usually prefer sad music because it helps me reflect and relax. However, when I'm in a good mood I choose happy songs because they are upbeat and rhythmic, which makes me want to move.

提案: Use a full sentence and vary vocabulary. Give one clear reason and link it to the effect. Fix subject-verb agreement ("music makes") and avoid repeating the same idea.

例: Yes, it definitely makes me feel more excited because upbeat melodies and a strong bass drive my energy up, so I feel more motivated and happier.

提案: Provide a slightly expanded answer: start with a direct response, then add a brief reason and a specific detail. Use correct collocations like "listen to music."

例: No, I haven't taken any music classes. I usually just listen to music at home and learn by exploring different artists and tutorials online.

提案: Keep the answer focused and combine similar ideas with linking words. Give a specific example of an activity and explain the effect briefly. Avoid short choppy sentences.

例: Yes, I often listen to music while cooking or studying because it keeps me focused and makes boring tasks feel more energetic.

× When I'm sad, I prefer to listen sad music, but when I'm happy, I prefer to listen happy music because it it's for me cheerful and rhythmic.

✓ When I'm sad, I prefer to listen to sad music, but when I'm happy, I prefer to listen to happy music because it is cheerful and rhythmic to me.

Missing the preposition 'to' after 'listen' (correct pattern: listen to something) and awkward phrase 'it it's for me cheerful' — replace with 'it is cheerful and rhythmic to me' for correct word order and meaning.

× Happy music make me feel more excited because it has really cheerful and strong bass in it.

✓ Happy music makes me feel more excited because it has a really cheerful tone and strong bass.

Subject 'music' is singular so verb requires third-person singular 'makes' not 'make'. Also improve phrasing: use 'a really cheerful tone' for naturalness and keep 'strong bass'.

× That's why that feeling make me more excited.

✓ That's why that feeling makes me more excited.

Singular subject 'that feeling' requires singular verb 'makes' (subject-verb agreement). Change 'make' to 'makes'.

× No, I didn't take any music classes.

✓ No, I haven't taken any music classes.

Present perfect 'have/has + past participle' is more appropriate when talking about life experiences up to now; 'didn't take' is simple past and could imply a specific past time, which is not given.

× I prefer to listen music at home.

✓ I prefer to listen to music at home.

Omit 'to' after 'prefer to' is fine but when followed by 'listen' you need 'to' before the object: 'listen to music'.

× Yes, I listen to music while doing other things. Especially when I'm bored I use music.

✓ Yes, I listen to music while doing other things. Especially when I'm bored, I listen to music.

Second sentence is informal and uses 'use music' awkwardly. Better to repeat 'listen to music' and add a comma after the introductory phrase 'Especially when I'm bored' for correct sentence structure.

× I listen to music because it makes me feel more energetic and cheerful.

✓ I listen to music because it makes me feel more energetic and cheerful.

This sentence is already grammatically correct; no change necessary. It correctly uses present simple to state a general truth and the verbs are properly formed.