Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更自然并且更简洁明确。先给出主题句，然后用一到两句具体原因支持，避免重复表达。例如说明悲伤音乐如何让你冷静（节奏、歌词或旋律）并举例说明何时会选择听。注意语法（如 use ‘helps me calm down and reflect’ 而非 ‘let me calm down and think a lot of things’）。

例: I prefer sad music. It helps me calm down and reflect because the slow tempo and meaningful lyrics make me focus. For example, I often listen to sad songs after a long day to relax and think things through.

提案: 回答要语法正确并更具体。先直接回答，然后说明为什么会兴奋并提供具体情况或例子。修正语法错误（‘makes me’, ‘dance along’）并避免模糊表达如 ‘with the western’。

例: Yes, happy music makes me feel more excited. Its fast rhythm and upbeat melody make me want to move, so I often dance along and sing when I listen to pop songs at parties.

提案: 回答可以更自然并包含时间或频率细节。先肯定回答，然后说明具体学了什么、多久或学到什么技能，并用连接词衔接。语法上把 ‘music instrument class’ 改为 ‘instrument classes’。

例: Yes, I have. I took a singing class for a year and instrument classes for the ukulele and guitar. Through these lessons I learned basic chords and improved my singing technique.

提案: 回答要更流畅并修正表达错误。先直接回答，然后用一两个具体场景说明，使用正确短语（例如 ‘put on makeup’ 而不是 ‘have a makeup’），并用连接词让句子连贯。

例: Yes, I often listen to music while doing other things. For instance, I usually play music when I’m putting on makeup or taking a shower because it makes routine tasks more enjoyable.

× I prefer sad music because I think sad music can let me calm down and think a lot of things.

✓ I prefer sad music because I think sad music can help me calm down and think about a lot of things.

原句中使用了“let me calm down and think a lot of things”，這裡的動詞搭配不自然。英語常用“help someone do something”或“help someone calm down”，而“think a lot of things”應改為“think about a lot of things”表示“思考很多事情”。建議用法：使用“help”或“can calm me down”並在“think”後加介詞“about”。

× Yes, happy music make me more excited and I always dance with the western and singing with the song.

✓ Yes, happy music makes me more excited and I always dance to Western music and sing along with the song.

原句中主語“happy music”為第三人稱單數，動詞應使用單數形式“makes”，而不是“make”。另外“dance with the western”結構不正確，表達應為“dance to Western music”（隨西方音樂跳舞），且“singing with the song”應改為“sing along with the song”（跟著歌曲唱）。建議注意主謂一致，並使用正確的介詞短語。

× Yes, I have taken a singing class and music instrument class like ukulele and guitar.

✓ Yes, I have taken a singing class and an instrumental class, like ukulele and guitar.

此句需注意名詞短語和冠詞用法。“music instrument class”不自然，應為“instrumental class”或“music instrument class”改為“instrumental class/ an instrument class”。此外在“class”前需要不定冠詞“an”。現在完成時“have taken”是正確的，無需改動。建議使用“an instrumental class”或“an instrument class”。

× Yes, I listen to the music. When I have a makeup or like taking a shower, I always listen to the music.

✓ Yes, I listen to music. When I do my makeup or take a shower, I always listen to music.

英文中通常說“listen to music”而不用定冠詞“the”。“have a makeup”表達不正確，應說“do my makeup”。此外“like taking a shower”結構混亂，應直接說“or take a shower”。建議刪去不必要的定冠詞，並使用常見的固定搭配“do my makeup”“take a shower”。