Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện độ mạch lạc và ngữ pháp: tránh lặp từ, sửa cấu trúc câu và chia động từ cho đúng. Nên mở đầu trực tiếp (topic sentence), rồi giải thích lý do cụ thể và kết luận ngắn gọn. Ví dụ, thay vì nói lặp “I I” hoặc “because because”, hãy dùng mệnh đề rõ ràng như “I prefer happy music because it helps me relax.” Thêm chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ loại nhạc, hoàn cảnh) để làm câu đầy đủ và tự nhiên.

例: I prefer happy music because it helps me relax and lift my mood. For example, I often play upbeat pop songs after a stressful day at work to feel more energetic and positive.

提案: Cải thiện phát âm từ vựng và trật tự câu; tránh nói lặp và hoàn thiện ý. Dùng linking words hợp lý như “because” một lần, và nêu ví dụ cụ thể. Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (it makes, lively rhythm, major-key melodies). Hãy trả lời ngắn gọn, tiếp theo là lý do và ví dụ đầy đủ.

例: Yes, happy music definitely makes me feel more excited because lively rhythms and major-key melodies boost my energy. For example, when I hear upbeat electronic or pop songs, I immediately feel more motivated to exercise or work.

提案: Cải thiện cấu trúc phủ định và dùng thì đúng: nói ngắn gọn và rõ ràng. Tránh từ thừa và lúng túng. Nếu chưa học, nói rõ là không và có thể thêm thông tin thay thế (ví dụ tự học, đã học sơ cấp lúc nhỏ). Ví dụ cấu trúc: “No, I haven’t taken formal music classes, but I learned a little at primary school.”

例: No, I haven't taken formal music classes, but I did learn a little music at primary school, such as basic singing and simple recorder lessons.

提案: Cải thiện ngữ pháp thì và thứ tự từ; tránh lặp từ và dùng cụm từ chính xác (routine activities, while studying). Trả lời trực tiếp, giải thích ngắn gọn lý do và đưa ví dụ cụ thể. Sử dụng linking words như “for example” đúng vị trí.

例: Yes, I often listen to music while doing other things because it helps me concentrate and makes routine activities more enjoyable. For example, I usually play soft instrumental music while I study or cook.

× I I like happy I like listening music, happy music, then sad music because because it's help me reduce stress and and of going to them my feel.

✓ I like happy music. I like listening to happy music rather than sad music because it helps me reduce stress and improve my mood.

The original sentence has incorrect present tense verb forms and missing infinitive marker 'to'. 'It's help' should be 'it helps' for third person singular present. Also use 'listening to' not 'listening' alone. Sentence was run-on and unclear, so split into two clear sentences and replace 'of going to them my feel' with 'improve my mood'. Suggestions: use third person singular 'helps' with 'it', use 'listening to' with a noun, and keep sentence structure simple.

× Yes MMM I'll listen to music every day because it's make me feel more excited because likely rhythm and major gay melodies tend to ride my energy and lift my moods. For example when I listen to.

✓ Yes. I listen to music every day because it makes me feel more excited. Lively rhythms and major-key melodies tend to raise my energy and lift my mood.

Multiple problems: tense and subject-verb agreement. 'I'll listen' implies future but context is habitual so use simple present 'I listen'. 'It's make' should be 'it makes' (third person singular). 'likely rhythm and major gay melodies' seems to aim for 'lively rhythms and major-key melodies'. 'ride my energy' is incorrect; use 'raise my energy'. Also 'lift my moods' -> 'lift my mood' for general feeling. Suggestions: use simple present for habitual actions, ensure verbs agree with singular subjects, and choose correct adjectives/phrases.

× Uh, no, I don't have taken music classy up primary, uh. Primary academic lesson do remind you who's and a few.

✓ No, I haven't taken music classes in primary school. I had a few basic lessons.

Incorrect past tense/perfect construction: 'I don't have taken' is ungrammatical. Use present perfect 'I haven't taken' to talk about life experiences up to now. 'music classy up primary' should be 'music classes in primary school'. The second part is unclear so corrected to 'I had a few basic lessons' to convey that meaning. Suggestions: use 'haven't' + past participle for experience, and use clear noun phrases like 'primary school' and 'music classes'.

× Yes I I always listen to music while doing all the tests because it's helped me concentrate and make and make routing activity more enjoyable.

✓ Yes, I always listen to music while doing tasks because it helps me concentrate and makes routine activities more enjoyable.

Tense and agreement errors: 'it's helped me' mixes present perfect with a habitual context; use simple present 'it helps' and 'makes'. 'doing all the tests' likely means 'doing tasks' or 'chores' or 'tests' depending on context; 'routine' was misspelled as 'routing'. Suggestions: use simple present for habitual actions, maintain subject-verb agreement with 'it helps' and 'it makes', and use correct word 'routine'.

× For example I I watching TV or I study I when I study to maintain focus.

✓ For example, I watch TV or study; when I study, music helps me maintain focus.

Incorrect verb forms: 'I I watching TV' should be 'I watch TV' or 'I am watching TV' depending on tense; here simple present 'I watch TV' fits. 'I study I when I study to maintain focus' is jumbled; clarified to show that music helps maintain focus when studying. Also ensure proper clause structure: 'when I study, music helps me maintain focus.' Suggestions: use base verb form with simple present for habitual actions and place subordinate clauses correctly.