Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Να είστε πιο συνοπτικός και φυσικός, αποφεύγοντας επαναλήψεις και γεμίσματα όπως "umm" ή "uh". Ξεκινήστε με μια σαφή πρόταση (π.χ. "It depends on my mood") και στη συνέχεια προσθέστε 1-2 συγκεκριμένα παραδείγματα για να υποστηρίξετε την απάντηση. Χρησιμοποιήστε συνδέσμους (e.g. "for example", "otherwise") για ροή και περιορίστε το μήκος σε έως 5 προτάσεις.

例: It depends on my mood. For example, if I'm having a bad day I prefer sad music because it helps me process my feelings; otherwise I usually listen to upbeat songs while doing homework to stay motivated.

提案: Να δώσετε μια ξεκάθαρη απάντηση στην αρχή και μετά να εξηγήσετε συγκεκριμένα γιατί, χωρίς επαναλήψεις ή αμήχανες παύσεις. Χρησιμοποιήστε σύνδεσμο όπως "because" ή "for instance" και αναφέρετε ένα σύντομο παράδειγμα που δείχνει τη σύνδεση με μνήμη ή άτομο.

例: Yes, happy music definitely makes me more excited because I often associate certain songs with positive memories. For instance, a particular song reminds me of a fun trip with friends, so whenever I hear it I feel energetic and happy.

提案: Να απαντήσετε άμεσα με μία σαφή πρόταση και μετά να δώσετε συγκεκριμένο λόγο και ένα σχέδιο για το μέλλον. Αποφύγετε περιττές επαναλήψεις και πολυλεκτικές φράσεις όπως "I would like to" επανειλημμένα. Χρησιμοποιήστε σύνδεσμο όπως "because" ή "so" και παρέχετε ένα παράδειγμα ενδιαφέροντος (π.χ. φωνητικά ή πιάνο).

例: No, I haven't taken any music classes, but I'd like to in the future because I want to learn piano basics. For example, taking beginner piano lessons would help me read music and accompany myself when singing.

提案: Να είστε φυσικός και να προσθέσετε μια σύντομη αιτιολόγηση για κάθε κατάσταση αντί για απλή λίστα. Χρησιμοποιήστε συνδέσμους όπως "when" ή "because" και περιορίστε την απάντηση σε έως 4 προτάσεις για φυσικό ρυθμό και σαφήνεια.

例: Yes, I listen to music almost every day. For example, I play music while studying to help me concentrate, and I also listen on the bus because it makes the trip more enjoyable.

× It depends on the day and what mood I'm having.

✓ It depends on the day and on the mood I'm in.

The original uses an awkward clause 'what mood I'm having.' Native speakers more commonly say 'the mood I'm in.' This is a sentence structure and idiomatic choice issue; use 'depend on' followed by parallel prepositional phrases for clarity.

× Because if I'm having a hard day I would prefer to hear sad music.

✓ If I'm having a hard day, I prefer to hear sad music.

Mixing 'If I'm having' (present continuous) with 'I would prefer' creates an inconsistent conditional form. Use simple present 'I prefer' for general habitual preference in present situations. Also remove sentence-starting 'Because' to avoid a fragment.

× Otherwise, umm, I mainly hear happy music when I'm doing uh, homework and other responsibilities.

✓ Otherwise, I mainly listen to happy music when I'm doing homework or other tasks.

Use 'listen to' rather than 'hear' when referring to actively playing music. 'Doing homework and other responsibilities' is awkward; use 'other tasks' for parallelism. Maintain present continuous 'I'm doing' appropriately.

× From my perspective, happy music does make me feel more excited because I usually connect a song with a situation that has happened in the past and usually with a person too.

✓ From my perspective, happy music does make me feel more excited because I usually connect a song with a past situation and often with a person too.

'A situation that has happened in the past' is wordy; 'a past situation' is concise. Use 'often' instead of repeating 'usually' for variety. This addresses present participle/tense clarity and wordiness.

× And when I'm, uh, hearing, hearing this song.

✓ And when I'm hearing this song, it brings back those memories.

Original is a sentence fragment and repetitive 'hearing, hearing.' Completion is needed to form a full sentence; add a main clause describing the effect.

× To be honest, I haven't, uh, taken any music classes, but I would definitely would like to try it in the future because I think that it would be a nice opportunity to, uh, see how music classes are and I would like to.

✓ To be honest, I haven't taken any music classes, but I would definitely like to try them in the future because I think they would be a nice opportunity to see what music classes are like.

Remove duplicate 'would' and filler words. Use plural 'them' for 'music classes' and 'what ... are like' to describe experience. This fixes sentence structure, pronoun reference, and article/verb issues.

× Actually, I listened to music all the time, every day.

✓ Actually, I listen to music all the time, every day.

Using past tense 'listened' conflicts with 'all the time' which indicates a habitual present action. Use simple present 'I listen' for habitual actions.

× I listen to music when I'm in the shower, when I'm studying, when I'm cleaning my room, and when I'm going to school in the bus or in the car.

✓ I listen to music when I'm in the shower, when I'm studying, when I'm cleaning my room, and when I'm going to school by bus or by car.

Use 'by bus' or 'by car' instead of 'in the bus'/'in the car' for means of transport. Maintain parallel structure for the list.

× It's just a habit for me that I do every day and all the time.

✓ It's just a habit I have every day; I do it all the time.

Original is wordy and slightly awkward. Split into two clear clauses: one stating the habit and one stating frequency. This improves sentence structure and clarity.