Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific reason and a brief example. Avoid redundancy and fix tense/word order errors.

例: I prefer happy music because it helps me relax after a hectic day at work. For example, when I travel I usually play upbeat songs that lift my mood and make the journey more enjoyable.

提案: Give a direct answer, then provide one clear reason with correct grammar and a specific example. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' and avoid unclear phrases.

例: Yes, happy music definitely makes me feel more excited because the lively rhythm energises me. For instance, when I go out for a walk I play upbeat tracks that motivate me and reduce stress.

提案: Use a simple present continuous or present perfect correctly and be more specific about what you learn. State the course and one concrete benefit with a linking word.

例: Yes, I am currently taking lessons at a music coaching institute in the city centre. The classes teach me vocal technique and music theory, and as a result my confidence performing in front of others has improved.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and use consistent tenses. Provide two brief, specific examples with linking words like 'for example' or 'also'. Fix grammar (prefer -> prefer to, was -> am/when I work).

例: It depends on the activity: for example, I usually listen to music while I cook because it makes the task more enjoyable. I also listen to upbeat pop music during my evening walks since it lifts my mood.

× Well, I prefer happy music because it helps me to unwind and relax after my hectic work and also when I go to travelling then I used to play some music.

✓ Well, I prefer happy music because it helps me unwind and relax after my hectic work, and when I travel I play some music.

The sentence contains incorrect verb forms and awkward phrasing. 'Helps me to unwind' -> 'helps me unwind' (both acceptable but shorter form preferred). 'When I go to travelling' is incorrect; use 'when I travel' (present simple for habitual actions). 'I used to play some music' implies a past habit; the intended meaning is a current habit, so use 'I play some music'. Also removed redundant 'to' and improved coordination with a comma.

× Yes of course happy music make me feel more excited because I can enjoy myself and it also to get relief from stress when I went to outside then I listen prefer music.

✓ Yes, of course happy music makes me feel more excited because I can enjoy myself, and it also helps me get relief from stress; when I go outside I prefer to listen to music.

Subject 'happy music' is singular, so the verb must be 'makes' (subject-verb agreement). 'It also to get relief' is ungrammatical; use 'it also helps me get relief'. 'When I went to outside' mixes past tense and wrong preposition; use present simple 'when I go outside' for habitual actions and 'outside' without 'to'. 'I listen prefer music' is wrong order and missing preposition; correct is 'I prefer to listen to music'.

× Yes, currently I am joining a music coaching institute which is located in city center and it helps me to learn about music skills and enhance my confidence as well.

✓ Yes, currently I am attending a music coaching institute located in the city center, and it helps me learn musical skills and enhances my confidence.

'Joining' can be used but 'attending' is clearer for ongoing classes. 'Which is located in city center' needs articles: 'in the city center'. 'Helps me to learn about music skills' is awkward; use 'helps me learn musical skills'. Ensure agreement: 'helps ... and enhances my confidence' to match subjects and verbs.

× Well it depends on the situation. When I was working in a kitchen then I prefer to listen music.

✓ Well, it depends on the situation. When I am working in a kitchen, I prefer to listen to music.

The tense should be present for habitual or general situations: 'When I am working' (present continuous for actions happening while working) or 'When I work'. 'I prefer to listen music' is missing the preposition 'to' after 'listen'; correct is 'listen to music'. Removed unnecessary 'then'.

× After that when I going outside for evening walk then I listen pop music which lifted my mood.

✓ After that, when I go outside for an evening walk, I listen to pop music which lifts my mood.

'When I going' is missing auxiliary; use 'when I go' (present simple) for habitual action. 'Evening walk' needs an article: 'an evening walk'. 'I listen pop music' requires 'to': 'listen to pop music'. 'Which lifted my mood' uses past tense incorrectly for a habitual or general result; use 'which lifts my mood'. Also removed unnecessary 'then'.