Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap net değil, mantıksal bağlantılar zayıf ve gereksiz cümle sonu var. Konuya doğrudan cevap verin (happy/sad), kısa destekleyici nedenler ekleyin ve 1–2 bağlaç kullanın. Kelime seçiminde "hippie music" düzgün olabilir ama niçin sevdiğinizi açıklayın. Cümle sayısını 1–4 arasında tutun.

例: I prefer happy music because it uplifts my mood and helps me stay energetic. For example, upbeat songs make me feel more motivated when I’m working or exercising.

提案: Soruya yanıt vermekten kaçınmak zayıf bir strateji. Direkt olarak görüşünüzü söyleyin, ardından kısa bir açıklama veya örnek verin. Bağlaçlar kullanarak akışı iyileştirin (e.g., 'however', 'because'). Cevabınızı 1–3 cümlede sınırlayın.

例: Yes, happy music usually makes me feel more excited because it has a fast tempo and cheerful lyrics. For instance, I often feel energized when I listen to pop songs while getting ready to go out.

提案: Cevap belirsiz ve dilbilgisi hataları var. "I don't have many" ifadesi yanlış; yerine "I haven't had many lessons" gibi açık bir yapı kullanın. Kısa bir konu cümlesiyle başlayın ve ardından geçmişteki deneyiminizi açıklayın. Gereksiz duraksamalardan kaçının.

例: I haven't taken many music classes, but I did learn to play the melodica when I was about ten. That gave me a basic understanding of melody and rhythm.

提案: Cümle yapısı ve kelime sıralaması üzerinde çalışın; eksik yardımcı fiiller mevcut ("listen to music"). Liste verirken daha düzenli bağlaçlar kullanın (e.g., 'for example', 'such as'). Özgün ve spesifik örnekler ekleyin, cümleleri 1–3 arasında tutun.

例: Yes, I usually listen to music while doing other tasks. For example, I often play music when I cook, clean my room, or do my homework because it helps me concentrate and stay motivated.

× I prefer hippie music because I love to watch and I'm cheerful person. OK, thank you listening to me.

✓ I prefer hippie music because I love to watch it and I'm a cheerful person. OK, thank you for listening to me.

Two article and pronoun issues: 'cheerful person' needs the indefinite article 'a' before the noun (article error). Also the verb 'watch' requires an object here; add the pronoun 'it' to show what is watched. Finally, 'thank you listening to me' is missing the preposition 'for' before the -ing form; use 'thank you for listening to me'. Suggestions: add 'a' before singular countable nouns, include necessary objects after verbs that need them, and use 'thank you for' + verb-ing. ID:22.

× But I don't like this question.

✓ I don't like this question.

Starting with 'But' at the beginning of a short answer to a direct yes/no question is unnecessary and can sound informal or confrontational; this is a sentence structure/style issue. Remove 'But' to make the response more natural. Suggestions: answer directly and politely in test situations. ID:26.

× No, because I don't have many. Uh, I used to, uh, melodica when I was 10 years old, yeah.

✓ No, because I haven't had many lessons. I used to play the melodica when I was 10 years old.

'I don't have many' is vague and missing a noun after the quantifier 'many' (quantifier error). Also 'used to, melodica' lacks the verb 'play' to indicate the action (sentence structure/verb error). Correct by specifying the noun 'lessons' and using 'used to play the melodica.' Suggestions: follow quantifiers with a countable noun and include the correct verb for the instrument. ID:14.

× Yes, I always listen music, like doing something make, cook, cook and clean my room or do my homework.

✓ Yes, I always listen to music while doing things like cooking and cleaning my room or doing my homework.

Multiple errors: 'listen' needs the preposition 'to' before its object (preposition error ID 11 but primary is article/structure); 'doing something make' is ungrammatical — use 'doing things like' followed by gerunds 'cooking' and 'cleaning.' Repetition 'cook, cook' removed. Also use parallel gerund forms 'doing my homework.' Suggestions: use 'listen to music' and maintain parallel gerund forms after 'like' or 'while.' ID:22.