Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clear and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence stating your preference (e.g., "I prefer happy music"). Avoid confusing word choices ("caring", "sore") and unnecessary repetition. Then add one or two specific supporting details with linking words (e.g., genres you like and why). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: I prefer happy music because it lifts my mood when I'm feeling low. For example, I often listen to Tamil and sometimes Hindi pop songs, which have upbeat rhythms and positive lyrics that make me feel cheerful.

提案: Answer directly and organize the reply. Start with a clear yes/no sentence, then explain why using linking words (because, for example). Give a specific recent example but keep it grammatically correct and coherent. Avoid vague phrases like "A vibe"—choose descriptive words such as "a lively mood".

例: Yes, happy music usually makes me feel excited because it has a lively beat that makes me want to move. For example, yesterday I heard one of my favorite songs from a previous job and I began dancing along because the chorus was so energetic.

提案: Give a direct response first, then explain with clear reasons and correct grammar. Use linking words (however, because) and specific details (when, what prevented you). Avoid unclear fragments like "not die attended any music classic." Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

例: No, I haven't taken formal music classes. When I was a child I enjoyed dance lessons, but I haven't been able to attend music lessons as an adult because of a busy work and study schedule.

提案: Be specific and finish your thoughts. Start with a clear yes/no statement, then explain when you do or don't listen to music and why, using linking words (because, so). Avoid leaving sentences incomplete and clarify what you mean by "doing reels" and "portraits."

例: No, I don't usually listen to music while working because it distracts me. Occasionally I listen to music when I'm making short video reels or doing creative portrait photography, but I avoid it during focused tasks because it breaks my concentration.

× I prefer caring, happy and sore because it motivates me whenever I feel low.

✓ I prefer caring, happy, and sad music because it motivates me whenever I feel low.

The word 'sore' is an adjective meaning physically hurt and is incorrect here; the intended opposites are 'happy' and 'sad'. Also a list of adjectives requires commas and 'music' as the noun for clarity. Suggestion: use appropriate adjectives for emotions and include the noun 'music' to show what is being described.

× I started hearing music, especially Tamil music and sometimes Hindi music.

✓ I started listening to music, especially Tamil music and sometimes Hindi music.

In English, the verb for enjoying audio is 'listen to', not 'hear' in this context. 'Started' is followed by the base verb or '-ing' form; 'started listening to' is natural. Suggestion: use 'listen to' when referring to intentionally paying attention to music.

× Uh, it helps to keep me happy.

✓ It helps keep me happy.

The sentence is slightly awkward due to the infinitive 'to keep'; 'helps keep' is more natural and concise. Also remove filler 'Uh' in formal answers. Suggestion: use 'helps keep me happy' for smooth phrasing.

× Yes, I usually feel excited while listening all happy music because it creates A vibe and makes you dance.

✓ Yes, I usually feel excited while listening to all happy music because it creates a vibe and makes me want to dance.

Missing preposition 'to' after 'listening' (preposition error) and incorrect capitalization 'A'. 'Makes you dance' is less appropriate in a personal response; use 'makes me want to dance.' Also subject consistency: 'I' not 'you.' Suggestion: include 'to', fix articles and keep pronouns consistent.

× Actually yesterday I have heard music which is my favorite in the past job I started to dance.

✓ Actually, yesterday I heard my favorite song and, in the past, at a previous job I started to dance.

The present perfect 'have heard' with a specific time 'yesterday' is incorrect; use simple past 'heard'. The original sentence also conflates two ideas without clear connectors. Rephrase into two clauses: one about yesterday and one about dancing at a past job. Suggestion: use simple past for actions at definite times and separate ideas with commas or conjunctions.

× No, till now I have not die attended any music classic.

✓ No, so far I have not attended any music classes.

The phrase 'have not die attended' is garbled. Use present perfect 'have not attended' for experience up to now, and the noun should be 'music classes' plural. Also replace 'till now' with 'so far' for naturalness. Suggestion: clean verb form and correct noun plurality.

× When I was a child I used to like music very much because of dance class.

✓ When I was a child, I liked music very much because of my dance classes.

'Used to like' is acceptable but 'liked' is simpler. 'Dance class' should be plural or possessive 'my dance classes' to show they influenced the student's liking. Suggestion: add comma after adverbial phrase and use possessive to clarify.

× I can't able to attend music class because of the busy schedule.

✓ I couldn't attend music classes because of a busy schedule.

'Can't able' is ungrammatical; use either 'can't' or 'am not able to'. For past context, 'couldn't attend' fits if referring to past inability; if general, 'couldn't' or 'was unable to' works. Also use plural 'music classes' and 'a busy schedule' or 'my busy schedule.' Suggestion: choose correct modal construction and match tense.

× No, I don't listen to the music frequently because I feel distracted while hearing music.

✓ No, I don't listen to music frequently because I feel distracted while listening to music.

Unnecessary definite article 'the' before 'music' in general statements. Use 'listen to' instead of 'hearing' for intentional listening. Suggestion: remove 'the' and use consistent verb 'listen to.'

× And then I started to do reels.

✓ Lately, I started making reels.

'And then' is a weak connector; 'started to do reels' is awkward. Use 'started making reels' or 'I began creating reels' to sound natural. Suggestion: use clear time expressions and natural verb patterns for activities.

× So that's not a perfect option for me.

✓ So that's not a good option for me.

'Perfect option' is odd in this context; 'good option' is more idiomatic. Suggestion: use idiomatic collocations like 'not a good option.'

× So while doing portraits, uh, when I listen to music, I usually.

✓ When I'm doing portraits and I listen to music, I usually focus on the work and avoid distractions.

The original sentence is incomplete and contains filler 'uh.' It lacks a main clause stating what usually happens. Complete the thought by stating the resulting action. Suggestion: always finish sentences and avoid fillers in test situations.