Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and clear: state your preference (sad or happy) in a topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific reasons. Avoid fillers (uh, um) and unclear phrases. Use linking words like because or so to connect ideas.

例: I prefer happy music because it boosts my mood and helps me concentrate. For example, when I listen to upbeat songs while working, I feel more energetic and productive.

提案: Answer directly with a clear subject and include a brief explanation or example. Use a linking word such as because or usually to make the response coherent. Keep it to 1–3 sentences.

例: Yes, happy music usually makes me feel more excited because of its fast tempo and cheerful lyrics. For instance, upbeat pop songs make me want to move and boost my energy.

提案: Give a clear negative answer, then add a short reason or alternative (e.g., self-taught, listen only). Avoid self-deprecating phrases like “I'm not a talented girl”; instead say you haven't had lessons or lacked time. Use one linking word such as but or however if adding contrast.

例: No, I haven't taken any formal music classes, but I sometimes learn songs from online tutorials. I enjoy singing and playing by ear rather than taking lessons.

提案: Respond with a clear topic sentence (Yes or No) and specify the activities you do while listening to music. Use linking words (for example, when, while) and avoid unclear words. Mention specific activities and the reason why you listen.

例: Yes, I often listen to music while studying and cooking because it helps me relax and stay focused. For example, I play instrumental tracks when reading and upbeat songs when cleaning.

× I actually prefer the proper music. Uh, other than so I'll have music.

✓ I actually prefer pop music. I usually listen to music other than sad songs.

The original sentence uses 'proper' incorrectly and has confused structure. This is a sentence structure and word choice problem rather than a specific listed category; it best fits 'Sentence structure errors' (ID 26). Replace 'proper' with the intended genre (e.g., 'pop') or say 'happy' if that was meant, and split into two clear sentences: one stating preference and one explaining what you listen to. Use 'usually' for habitual actions and 'other than sad songs' to contrast moods. Grammar_problem_type_id:26

× It is actually the music makes me feel more excited.

✓ Actually, happy music makes me feel more excited.

This is a sentence structure issue (ID 26). The original 'It is actually the music makes me...' is ungrammatical in English. Use a clear subject 'happy music' and a simple present verb 'makes' to express a general truth or habitual feeling. Placing 'actually' at the start or before the subject is natural. Grammar_problem_type_id:26

× No, never be. I'm not a talented girl.

✓ No, never. I'm not a talented girl.

The phrase 'never be' is incorrect because 'be' is not appropriate without a subject and auxiliary—this is a sentence structure/verb form issue (ID 26). Removing 'be' leaves the correct negative response 'No, never.' The following sentence 'I'm not a talented girl.' is grammatically okay though 'talented' is subjective; you might say 'I don't have much musical talent' for clarity. Grammar_problem_type_id:26

× I do darling, especially when I do some schools in the.

✓ Yes, I do, especially when I study at school or do my schoolwork.

This sentence is a fragment and uses 'darling' inappropriately in a formal exam context; it's a sentence structure and word choice issue (ID 26). 'I do' should be expanded to 'Yes, I do' and clarify the activity: 'when I study at school' or 'when I do my schoolwork.' Remove the trailing 'in the' and avoid vocatives like 'darling' in this context. Grammar_problem_type_id:26