Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更直接并注意时态与用词准确。避免重复表达（例如多次说prefer/cheerful），并把例子说得更具体。可以用一到两句开门见山表达观点，再用一到两句说明何时听、效果如何，注意时态一致和搭配（e.g., “listen to upbeat music”）。

例: I prefer cheerful music because it helps me relax and improves my mood. For example, I usually listen to upbeat pop songs when I jog in the morning, and they give me more energy and focus for my workout.

提案: 回答要直接回应问题并提供具体细节，避免口头禅（uh）与重复。注意语法（e.g., “listen to cheerful music”, “makes me feel more focused”），用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: Yes, happy music does make me feel more excited. For instance, when I play lively music while cleaning or exercising, I feel more motivated and focused on finishing the tasks quickly.

提案: 回答要简洁且语法正确，避免犹豫语气。说明具体时间、持续时间或学到的技能会更有说服力。比如说明“took piano lessons in high school for two years”并解释为什么没坚持或为什么有趣。

例: Yes, I took piano lessons for two years when I was in high school, but I didn't continue afterward due to a busy schedule. I enjoyed learning basic music theory and found practicing the piano very relaxing.

提案: 回答要更自然并使用正确搭配（listen to music, apply makeup rather than putting makeup）。给出具体例子并解释音乐如何帮助你（e.g., improves mood, increases efficiency）。避免模糊表述如 “help me more”。

例: Yes, I often listen to music while doing chores, applying makeup, or exercising. Music lifts my mood and helps me stay focused, so I usually finish household tasks faster when I play my favorite songs.

× For example, I always listen upbeat music when I'm jogging or starting.

✓ For example, I always listen to upbeat music when I'm jogging or starting.

句中缺少介词“to”，动词短语是“listen to something”。建议记住固定搭配“listen to + 名词”，并在类似结构中加上“to”。

× It made me feel more concerned on my tasks.

✓ It made me feel more concerned about my tasks.

中文：短语应为“concerned about (对……感到担心/关注)”，而不是“concerned on”。建议记住常见搭配，如“concerned about + 名词”。

× Yes, actually I really enjoy cheerful music.

✓ Yes, actually I really enjoy cheerful music.

这句语法正确，无需改动。只是注意后续动词搭配（enjoy 后接动名词）。

× I always listen cheerful music when I am jogging, doing housework or making up.

✓ I always listen to cheerful music when I am jogging, doing housework or putting on makeup.

两处问题：1) “listen” 需与介词“to”搭配（见前述）。2) “making up” 用法不当，应为“putting on makeup”（化妆）。建议记住固定搭配并使用正确短语。

× It make me feel, uh, it made me more concentrated on my tasks.

✓ It makes me feel… it makes me more focused on my tasks.

句子时态和主谓不一致：描述常态应使用一般现在时，且第三人称单数需加 -s（make → makes）。另外“more concentrated”常用被动/短语不自然，改为“more focused”更地道。建议注意主谓一致并选择常用形容词搭配。

× Yes, I took a piano lessons when I am in high school, umm I think, but I haven't insisted it.

✓ Yes, I took piano lessons when I was in high school, umm I think, but I didn't stick with it.

多处错误：1) “a piano lessons” 数量不一致，应为“piano lessons”或“a piano lesson”。2) 时态不一致，过去时间应使用过去时“was”。3) “haven't insisted it” 用法错误，应为“didn't stick with it”（没有坚持）。建议把时间点与过去时统一，并使用正确动词短语。

× But the experience made me more comfortable and it's very interesting.

✓ But the experience made me more comfortable and it was very interesting.

前半句讲过去经历，后半句应与之保持过去时，“it's”（it is）应改为“it was”。建议保持时态一致。

× Yes, I always listen music when I am doing housework or putting makeup or doing exercise.

✓ Yes, I always listen to music when I am doing housework, putting on makeup, or exercising.

问题包括：1) “listen” 需加“to”。2) “putting makeup” 应为“putting on makeup”。3) “doing exercise” 更常见为“exercising”。建议记住固定搭配并使用更自然的表达。

× I think music can help me more, help me concentrate on the tasks.

✓ I think music can help me concentrate more on the tasks.

原句结构重复且位置不当，改为单一从句更简洁自然。将“concentrate” 与“more” 搭配（concentrate more on ...）。建议练习将两个动词合并为一个清晰结构。