Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more specific and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers like “uh,” and give one brief reason with an example. Keep to 1–3 sentences and use a linking word if you add detail.

例: I prefer happy music because it lifts my mood. For example, upbeat pop songs help me feel energetic and ready to start the day.

提案: Use correct grammar and a clearer structure: give a direct yes/no, then a short reason and a specific example. Remove hesitations and correct verb forms.

例: Yes, it does. When I travel, listening to my favorite upbeat songs makes me feel excited and more energetic, so I usually create a happy playlist for trips.

提案: This is a clear and concise answer. To improve, add a brief reason or consequence with a linking word to enrich the response (one short supporting detail).

例: No, I haven't taken any music classes, but I enjoy listening to different genres, so I often study musicians’ techniques online to learn informally.

提案: Finish your sentence and correct tense. Start with a direct answer, then give two specific activities and a brief reason. Use a linking word to connect the reason.

例: Yes, I often listen to music while doing household chores or studying because it helps me relax and concentrate.

× I prefer happy music because it can brighten your day, especially, uh, good music.

✓ I prefer happy music because it can brighten my day, especially good music.

The speaker shifts person from 'I' to 'your', which is inconsistent. Use 'my' to reflect the speaker's own experience. Also remove the filler 'uh' and the extra comma for clarity.

× Yes, it's really make me happy when listening to music because, uh, when I'm traveling, I always playing with my favorite song.

✓ Yes, it really makes me happy when I listen to music because, when I'm traveling, I always play my favorite songs.

Subject-verb agreement: 'it' requires the verb form 'makes' (third person singular). Tense and form consistency: use 'when I listen' (present simple) rather than the gerund phrase 'when listening' here for clarity. 'I always playing' is incorrect—use 'I always play'. Also use plural 'songs' or 'song' consistently; 'songs' fits general habits. Remove filler 'uh' and extra commas.

× No, I've not taken any music classes, but I really like listening to music.

✓ No, I haven't taken any music classes, but I really like listening to music.

In standard conversational English the contraction 'I haven't' is more natural than 'I've not', though 'I've not' is grammatically possible. The correction ensures the common negative form for present perfect. No tense change is needed otherwise.

× Yes, I'm listening to music when I'm doing household chores or studying because it makes me calm and.

✓ Yes, I listen to music when I'm doing household chores or studying because it calms me.

Habitual actions are better expressed with the simple present 'I listen' rather than 'I'm listening'. 'It makes me calm' is awkward; use 'it calms me' or 'it makes me feel calm'. Remove the trailing 'and' to complete the sentence.